Historical Storyteller
Four Thousand Club
Mostly, more accurate words. But I plan to include some of the FERVOR you suggested; and revise the side-effects and effects of some of the ZEAL.
Further suggestions are always welcome.
Your writing's good, but yeah, we should strive to be better. There's always room for improvement, man. And you know, you can read the comic books if you want to get an idea of superpowers. Or maybe hit Tvtropes and look at some superpower index or something there.
Hmm, yeah, I haven't asked how many times one uses ZEAL/FERVOR/BLISS before the side effects are felt. Does one use them hundreds or thousands of times before feeling their effects? Or does one use it a dozen of times before his health starts to deteriorate? Are there instances of a person using it only once and dying? Maybe these items mirror the effects of drugs, and so we can compare ZEAL/FERVOR/BLISS to drug use.
Suggestions?
Hmm, if you know a little about political theories and revolutions, I suggest that you give a short description of the revolutionaries' beliefs. If there are Communists, tell them how they want to change the world into a proletarian paradise through armed revolution. If there are Capitalists, tell the world how they believe in world prosperity through the use of free trade...
I don't really know much about these political theories, and frankly, it's a pain in the ass to try to get familiar with all of 'em. A couple of sentences on their beliefs is enough, we just need to know why they fight.
Then there's the Socialists... the Union Workers... etc... etc...
I wonder if religion plays a big role in here too. God, there are so many denominations here. There's the Catholics, the Lutherans, the Baptists, the Presbyterians...
Fuck. So. Many. Movements.
Well, we can't have 'em all so let's select a few only.
Also concluded rectifying the first part. Better words, better summarizing, etc.
I'll take a look at it then.
However futuristic the world may as well be, people are still too poor or ignorant to catch on with electricity. That, and the grid is still a newborn idea.
I'm not familiar with the 1920's, so I'm probably going to make a few mistakes along the way. Well, whatever, I'll just have fun.