DovahBeat
The Flame of Kamura
Seems like a decent concept. As with anything, could use a little refining. But i find that just comes with time and exploring the character more. I've actually had sab for about a year now, which is why I have so many details about him, a lot I forget about until it comes up in context. Like the fact he can't cook to save his life. (At least he can't really get food poisoning though lmao)Since Azuza was a shotgun made character I'd like a generalized opinion if possible. I've been told my shotgun characters can be a bit spotty I've been trying to improve it. Thoughts?
Tldr: you're doing just fine and you'll get there.