ChoShadow
That One Fear In My Enemy's Eyes
Some of you have heard of this phrase before, but some of you probably haven't.
So for those who haven't heard it before, what do you think it means?
Well to put it simply, it means to write visually instead of descriptively. Yes, your visual writing is descriptive in nature. But at the same time there's a difference between visual descriptions and descriptions for description's sake.
Allow me to demonstrate the difference between an example that utilizes "Show, Don't Tell" and one which does not. Can you tell which is which?
The following two examples
1) Sally, age 7, stood alone in her back yard gazing sadly at Lucy's empty doghouse. She tightly held Lucy's old leash while her parents watched and wept from the doorway for their daughter's emotional suffering.
2) With hair kissed by the breeze and tears dripping down her cheeks, a girl no more than seven years of age stood silent and still in the solitude of her back yard. Beneath her feet the grass swept lazily in the wind accompanied by the sounds of the wind chimes clanking and bumping into one another. Clutched tight to her breast was a leash, and at the end of the leash was a collar. Hanging from the collar was a tag gently swaying too and fro upon which sat a single word: Lucy. Blinking away her tears and sniffling against the hitches in her breath, she stared at the empty wooden structure upon which the word Lucy again stared back at her. She extended a hand, placing it upon the carving of a dog's paw just below the name.
From the doorway to their home, her parents watched and wept silently. Her mother buried her face into her husband's loving shoulder as his arm draped around her waist and held her close. In his free hand he held an old and well worn "Lost Dog" flyer with a picture of a beautiful German Shepherd with the tag "Lucy" shining around her neck.
So, which of the two was using "Show, Don't Tell?"
If you guessed Example #2, you are correct.
Example #1 is not using "Show, Don't Tell." It's jumping to the point and describing everything as fast as possible and taking away the finer details found within the otherwise heart wrenching scene. If you read the first example in a novel, you'd likely continue reading without a second thought whereas the second example is more likely to tug at your heart strings. Is it not?
"Show, Don't Tell" is an incredibly powerful tool for any creative writer, role-players especially because what we do is visual story telling. Everything we write it about a visual in our heads that we are trying to share with others. The more you think in terms of "Show, Don't Tell," the more successful you'll be in sharing that vision with those you role-play with.
Thank you for reading!
~ ChoShadow
So for those who haven't heard it before, what do you think it means?
Well to put it simply, it means to write visually instead of descriptively. Yes, your visual writing is descriptive in nature. But at the same time there's a difference between visual descriptions and descriptions for description's sake.
Allow me to demonstrate the difference between an example that utilizes "Show, Don't Tell" and one which does not. Can you tell which is which?
The following two examples
1) Sally, age 7, stood alone in her back yard gazing sadly at Lucy's empty doghouse. She tightly held Lucy's old leash while her parents watched and wept from the doorway for their daughter's emotional suffering.
2) With hair kissed by the breeze and tears dripping down her cheeks, a girl no more than seven years of age stood silent and still in the solitude of her back yard. Beneath her feet the grass swept lazily in the wind accompanied by the sounds of the wind chimes clanking and bumping into one another. Clutched tight to her breast was a leash, and at the end of the leash was a collar. Hanging from the collar was a tag gently swaying too and fro upon which sat a single word: Lucy. Blinking away her tears and sniffling against the hitches in her breath, she stared at the empty wooden structure upon which the word Lucy again stared back at her. She extended a hand, placing it upon the carving of a dog's paw just below the name.
From the doorway to their home, her parents watched and wept silently. Her mother buried her face into her husband's loving shoulder as his arm draped around her waist and held her close. In his free hand he held an old and well worn "Lost Dog" flyer with a picture of a beautiful German Shepherd with the tag "Lucy" shining around her neck.
So, which of the two was using "Show, Don't Tell?"
If you guessed Example #2, you are correct.
Example #1 is not using "Show, Don't Tell." It's jumping to the point and describing everything as fast as possible and taking away the finer details found within the otherwise heart wrenching scene. If you read the first example in a novel, you'd likely continue reading without a second thought whereas the second example is more likely to tug at your heart strings. Is it not?
"Show, Don't Tell" is an incredibly powerful tool for any creative writer, role-players especially because what we do is visual story telling. Everything we write it about a visual in our heads that we are trying to share with others. The more you think in terms of "Show, Don't Tell," the more successful you'll be in sharing that vision with those you role-play with.
Thank you for reading!
~ ChoShadow