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Height: 5"1
Weight:140 lbs.
That hero costume will definitely need a description

He can keep it going for 5 minutes at the maximum, though he'll pass out once that's done. He can stop it before then, with stopping at a minute leaving him tired, and four minutes leaving him very tired.
So if he doesn't reach the maximum he can just spam it?
 
I am fixing all of the things. I am sorry. I am extremely off the wall with thoughts. Especially when I actually have free time at my computer. Gomen. Ima just edit it offline, and resubmit a new post. Unlees you'd rather I do otherwise
Don't do that. Take your time, wait until you have net. We don't want another vanishing post incident.
 
Don't do that. Take your time, wait until you have net. We don't want another vanishing post incident.

No no it'snot that. That was because I had copied a part from the editor and accidentally removed it. However I'm sorta glad it happened. I've had a chance to adjust and edit based off past ideas. Also i mean I only have time cuz schools all in my face like HEY WASTE TIME LISTENING TO THIS. Hahaha. Yeah. Also his personality is sorta based off my own so I hope it's human enough.

ALSO I FIXEDED THINGS. I hope it works. Sorry Im hyper. Frickity fracking fruits
 

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    Why does everyone feel like their opinions really matter? Seriously, no one actually gives a damn..-"

    -Rayō

    Name: Ryotai Takahoma
    Nicknames: Prefers Ray', as he doesn't like to be compared to a currency.
    Though a select few get to call him Rayo. (He prefers it to be resting with a select few..)
    Taka was the name he went by as a child, but very few actually know of this.

    Age:Sixteen
    Height:Five Feet, Seven inches. [Or 173 centimeters, for ya' non-americans.]
    Weight:Two-Hundred Sixty-Three Pounds. [Or 119 kilograms, for ya' non-americans.]
    Gender:Of the Male Specimen.
    Appearance
    With a somewhat messy hair that is hardly ever seen without a cap over it, Ray takes little interest in how others perceive his appearance. But to make things simple and comfortable for himself, he has a set of outfits that he wears. Two tank tops, one black and one white (Two Beanies of the same color, each corresponding to its opposite tank-top.), and Athletic pants that are black, white, or grey. He also a small series of shorts and graphic T-shirts, but these are seen very rarely.
    'Nuff about his clothes, (definitely not because he'll be wearing a uniform most of the time) because his outfits are nothing without his broad appearance.

    Ray has a very dense build, as it is one of the byproducts of his mutation quirk. This makes him weigh much more than his physique would normally make him. His bones are much denser than the norm and are essentially wrapped in a thicker marrow that allows for major bodily shifts, i.e the large wings that burst from his back, are simply well folded under his heavily layered tissue, muscle, and flexible bone. These oddities make certain parts of his body jut out awkwardly, such as his scapulas' stick out, making it look like he slouches in an unhealthy manner. Other things that span from his mutation range from features that appear minuscule like his nails being very tough and sharp, to the very apparent patches of scales placed all over his body, or even just teeth that are much sharper than the norm. Most will notice the small patches of scales on his body, as they appear on his hands, forearms, neck, shoulders, and in random places on his lower body. One will often see the occasional bruises on his body, as he tends to take plenty of hits when boxing.

    Theme:


 
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The costume can add a .24 to the multiplier that Adrenaline Rush gives thanks to color theory. It also gives a bit of protection with the gloves being thick at the knuckles to protect them from getting busted. It also has pockets at the legs, calves, and wrists.
yeah, you do have to explain this "color theory". And there are a lot of important details missing, like the material the costume is made of, exactly how much it covers, and so.
 
Quote:
A hero is no braver than an ordinary man, but he is brave five minutes longer.
-Ralph Waldo Emerson


Name: Jesse Anderson
Nicknames:Jess, Jesse, J
Desired Hero Name: Aegis
Age:16
Gender:M
Chosen Extra Class:Support
Appearance:
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(soon to be) Hero Costume: (give me the appearance like the appearance section, but also give me a detailed description of the function of anything that isn´t merely aesthetic)
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The suit has light weight armor. Sturdy for taking a few hits but still vulnerable in exchange for mobility. The belt satchel can hold medical supplies and spare ammunition. He also has a holster on his back, as well as a place on his hip. These can be used for a rifle, or pistol. Depending on a situation he may choose one or the other if allowed and needed. The armor has some areas with heavier protection, such as the elbows, chest, wrists, kneecaps and shoulders. As well as the collarbone. However some of these only cover the front, leaving his back exposed. He either needs someone watching his back, or he will craft a small shield to guard his back, and neck.

Height: 5'2
Weight: 153 lbs
Personality: Jesse keeps to himself most of the time, finding it easier to avoid others. If he lets them close, then the shadow of what-ifs grows overhead. He is riddled with self-doubts and anxiety. When he's extremely upset he runs his hands through his hair. During a panic attack he may mumble to himself in english. He carries earbuds and his cellphone with him, as if his anxiety gets too bad he can use music as a way to ground himself. If he has a total breakdown he needs something or someone to ground him. He avoids crowds, afraid that something might happen, that anything might happen. He can be a loyal and faithful friend if you manage to crack past that shell of distance he keeps up. He is the guy to make jokes and try to keep everyone happy. Glad to take jokes at his expense if it helps everyone laugh. Even though he tries to avoid butting heads with people, he has quite a temper and holds grudges until he deems the wrong-doer to be forgiven. Though he doesn't go out of his way to say rude things to people, if he catches someone being rude, disrespectful, or just plain mean, he will say something. Enough arguing can make him spout whatever comes to mind that is hurtful enough to sting. Even with friends in an argument, he uses tactics like this to get them to back down, or to escalate the situation until one of them feel satisfied with the damages done and simply walk away with their heads high. Hours after the fact Jesse tends to replay the situations in his mind, and often feels shameful for the things he says. He always ends up being the first to apologize, and even if he's forgiven for it he continues to blame himself until it's pushed away to be dragged back up later. He tends to space out at times, and easily forgets facts unless he purposely drills it into his memory, or has repeated it enough times to become subconscious thought. Most of the time he apologizes for things that aren't exactly his fault, blaming himself for being a moment too slow or leading to an event's climax when he had little to do with it. He doesn't trust himself. Always overthinking or overcomplicating simple things, and giving that dark shadow called anxiety more weight until it's suffocating him. Sometimes he just needs a bit of moral support as well as combat support. Between second guessing himself, hesitation, and his continuous self wrought guilt, he is easily distracted. In a fight this is dangerous, since if he spaces out, forgets a detail in the plan, doesn't cover his back or watch for danger, he can easily be hurt. He tries his best but sometimes it's just not enough. If he wagers a guess or a suggestion and it's wrong or submissed, he'll apologize and fall quiet until he's asked to speak again. In most cases he is his own worst enemy. Beating himself up over things he couldn't manage to control, or letting himself get distracted in midst of something important. Most of the time his self-deprecating humor is subconscious belittlement of his own worth. These "jokes" at his expense are fairly often, and if asked about them, he simple confesses that it's just something that he says without conscious thought. That's another thing. He doesn't think too much before speaking. Actions, sure. Speaking however is not something he likes to contemplate. Because eventually it becomes overwhelming in the fact that he may offend them or mispronounce their name and that just leads to him forgetting the reason he had wanted to speak with them to begin with.

Likes: Writing, Music, Reading, and helping others.
Dislikes: Crowded areas, being blamed, being a burden, not being able to help.
Fears:Claustrophobia, Autophobia.
(Small spaces, and being abandoned)
Mannerisms:Jesse keeps to himself, often having a forced sense of politeness. He tries to avoid being in large crowds or groups, as it spikes his anxiety. Occasionally he may slip away, and find a quiet place to occupy his thoughts with the world of a book or help someone so he doesn't return to the past.

Backstory: Jesse was born as the sole child of Jared and Yumi Anderson in Matsuda Japan. His parents had met through abroad studies and eventually Jared proposed to her, applying for Japanese citizenship shortly after their studies were over. Their family was the average happy kind, aside from a few...quirks. His quirk had come from seemingly nowhere, with neither parents having had one themselves. Not truly concerned about this oddness, they did their best to help him learn how to control it. No Jesse the spider in the closet isn't a reason to use your quirk, call me or your father. He was home schooled until he could control it sufficiently enough to not accidentally use it...most of the time. Other than that they had a nice dynamic. A father who came home to play catch and share his stories of America and his hometown with his son, and a mother who greeted him with a smile when he came home from school, or cheered him up with words of comfort and love. The small home was always filled with happiness and laughter. There were hard-times, as fate always saw to that, but the love between the family of three helped them see the best of life. His mother always encouraged him to be optimistic, and his father was one of opportunity. They even took a trip to his father's old homeland when he was 9, staying with his dorky grandpa and soft-spoken grandmother. There he learned how to shoot guns, much to his mother's worried titters about safety around weapons. His father and grandpa taught him how to hunt, and in tandem, to shoot. His mother and grandmother helped him better his basic English, saying you never knew when you'd need to know another language. When the time for visiting was over, the trio bid the elderly family members goodbye. But not before his mother and grandmother presented him with a gift. The two women had worked together and crafted a beautiful quilt, using a blend of red and yellow fabrics. His grandmother had said it was a 'reminder of his family connections'. They returned to Matsuda afterwards and Jesse went back to school. Ever since he'd been a kid he wanted to help people. When he heard about the PSA, he immediately began talking with his parents. His mother was on board with him using his quirk to help people, but his father was a bit hesitant. It took much coaxing but eventually his father reluctantly agreed, stating that the moment he saw him toeing the line of being reckless or foolish, he'd personally drag the boy back by his collar. And so he applied to the academy.




Relationships with family members:
Grandma Martha: Overseas family, keeps in some sense of contact occasionally. Made him the quilt he carries with him upon entry to PSA, more openly caring of her grandson than her husband.
Grandpa Thomas: Overseas family, keeps in some sense of contact occasionally. Taught him to properly shoot and hold a gun.
Soba[Misa Fukohara]: A kind motherly figure who dotes on her grandchild, always making sure he knows they love him.
Sojo [Aki Fukohara]: A supportive yet gruff father figure, who begrudgingly reminds Jesse every so often that he's a good kid. They play chess when he visits.


Quirk: (Name + description) (remember to be very specific about the details that would involve
Barrier Defense- A quirk which allows its user to create a barrier that can block physical forces like bullets or small blasts. It lasts 8 minutes maximum, and takes 16 to recharge to it's minimum functionality. Overusing it at minimum functionality can cause internal injuries. After 8 minutes of usage, the user is left exhausted. To use the quirk again without fear of overstressing it, he requires at least 2 hours to recover. In theory he could split the barrier and protect a spread out area but he hasn't tried. He can however make the shield bigger. It just takes more energy to hold up, and lessens the strength. The quirk can take at maximum 2 rounds of gunfire, or 10 pounds of force bashing on it for 1 minute straight. This can perhaps be improved with time, but it is all he can maintain from his little to no training.

Special Moves:
Bubble: A shield in the form of a sphere, used to protect an individual from moderately dangerous falls(Like a bone breaking fall that doesn't kill you but could hurt alot, maybe 3 stories at most...), or small blows. After using this it cuts the remaining time of the quirk in half.

Items:Clothes, a few books, and an old quilt.

Skills/talents: writing, piano, intermediate fighting techniques, effective at usage of rifle/pistol(Not mastery but decent enough to not shoot himself in the foot)

Theme Song:

Idea Idea

EDIT CINCO! I DID THE THINGS!

Approved!
 
The costume can add a .1 to the multipliers that Adrenaline Rush gives thanks to color theory (wearing different colors do different things to behavior, but the important one is red, which increases aggressiveness.)
this is no proper explanation to an armor increasing the strength of your quirk. Remove it.
 
Name: Duriander Tragiasa

Nicknames: Duri.

Desired Hero Name: Rush

Age: 15

Gender: Male.

Chosen Extra Class: Mentoring.

Appearance:
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Weight:140 lbs.
(145 with the costume.)

Personality:
He's a total pushover who will more often than not just go with the flow. He's pretty good at acting out certain emotions even if he doesn't even remotely feel them, with his usual being happiness. Despite that, he's actually pretty sensitive and even a joking insult will cut pretty deep and have him thinking about it for a bit. He's pretty moody and can go from obnoxiously happy to extremely sad after a really terrible insult. It's not easy to agitate him, but there are certain things that'll do it instantly. He tends to overthink things, and will often procrastinate, and then hesitate whenever he starts to do what he was not doing.
He tends not to be very sociable, and if there's somebody he feels uncomfortable around, he'll just agree with whatever they say, and hope that his friendliness will fix whatever bugs him about them. Even if it doesn't, he'll still start to eventually like them. When he's in a group with nothing but friends, he tends to become more open. He's a mother's boy who does whatever he can to stay out of trouble, which mixes with his cowardice and paranoia, as he will rarely ever take a risk. Despite his cowardice, he is polite.

(soon to be) Hero Costume:
View attachment 351950 It gives a bit of protection with the gloves being thick at the knuckles to protect them from getting busted. It also has pockets at the legs, calves, and wrists. The shoulder fins are aesthetic and can be taken off in 5 seconds. The red parts are made of aluminum, coated in colored plastic. The rest of the outfit is thick fireproof spandex. Likes:
Sweets.
Reptiles.
Elderly people.​
Classic music.​

Dislikes:
Bitter or Spicy foods.
Drama shows.
Characters dying in shows.
Being insulted.

Fears:
Any sort of small and fast animal.
He's constantly afraid that anything he does might affect people he loves, especially his grandparents.
Mannerisms: He tends to lock his hands and push his thumbs together when around someone he's uncomfortable with. He tends to immediately get agitated when someone trash talks his grandparents. He also tends to hold doors open for other people, and rarely eats with his hands. He even has a handkerchief for wiping his mouth. He tends to wear the visor on his hero costume up.

Backstory: Duriander was a normal kid who never really knew his parents, but from what he heard from his guardians, his grandma and grandpa, they were part of a large underground drug circle, which killed people who didn't pay using their quirks. Duriander didn't mind, though, because he had his grandparents, who were always there for him. His grandpa was a firefighter and his grandma was a Hero, though both have since retired. His grandparents taught him to become an outstanding citizen, most likely in disdain for Duriander's father. They taught him good manners and a lot of other "Upstanding Citizen" type stuff.
Duriander was always into becoming a hero, but finally decided on the career when his grandmother told him about what her career was like.

Relationships:
His Grandma - The Retired Hero, Technocality. - His driving force for becoming a hero. She is the person he looked to for guidance in his life. Her quirk is Machine Reactor, a quirk that allows her to ingest electricity, gasoline, and most other fuels machines can use.
His Grandpa - A Retired Firefighter - The person he'd always go to when he needed a friend.
His Tortoise - Shelly - Caring for and playing with her is the main way he'd pass his time, besides reading.

Quirk:
Adrenaline Rush
His body produces a large amount of adrenaline when he gets agitated to a certain point. When he gets agitated to a certain point, Adrenaline Rush activates until he consciously switches it off. He can keep it going for 5 minutes at the maximum, though he'll pass out once that's done. He can stop it before then, with stopping at a minute leaving him tired, and four minutes leaving him very tired. After use, he'll need to rest for twice the amount of time he used it for him to recharge, or else he'll pass out after a few seconds of resuming Adrenaline Rush. While activated, he gets a 2x boost to his speed and strength, with a 4x boost to his endurance.
Special Moves:
Adrenaline Hijack.
This move is impossible for him to consciously trigger, but activates automatically when Duriander is pissed off to the extreme, i.e seeing somebody very close to him get beaten half to death. He receives a 3x boost to speed and strength, and a 6x boost to endurance. This lasts 30 seconds, with Duriander passing out after it's over.

Items: He brought a tablet with music and books on it, a handkerchief, and an old arts and crafts project.

Skills/talents: He's good with animals and children.

Theme Song:

Approved!
 
Desired Hero Name: Colorful Sound

Name: Deysha Ressau-Persan

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Age: 15


Gender: female


Chosen Extra Class: mentoring


Appearance: Deysha applied with the others at the same time. She was one of the people who didnt bathe in the limelight but if she wanted to would.


(soon to be) Hero Costume: Her costume is a armored chameleon. the first form has simple armor that allows for enhanced sound absorbtion. This form also has a cape but it can be taken off. The armor is as durable as iron. Once the armor is released off the user, the second form increase that. She wear tights under her costume that keeps exposed parts warm. In both forms the user wears combat boot heels that can be switched out for combat boots. Her costume is also white in the second form rather that black like the the picture.

25% increase in sound absorption.
50% increase in sound absorption.

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Height: 1.8 meters


Weight: 59 Kilograms


Personality:
Deysha is a very optimistic person and always finds the good side of everything. Deysha is very understanding and avoids being judgemental toward others. Deysha likes to have and create postive environmrnts ratger than negative ones. Deysha also doesnt really get mad at other because she is a very nice person. She attracts all the positive energy and prevents the negative energy.

She intrigued by anything science and love because of the intellectual conversations as they stimulate the mind. Her IQ had actually reached 190 but Deysha doesnt act like it.
Deysha doesnt really like talking about others and really prefer to ignore boring stuff that doesnt have to deal with her at all. This causes her to avoid most mean and negative people. She just doesnt find the purpose in going on people. Deysha tries to stay away from irrational people to prevent getting caught in thier problems. She doesnt like to get dragged down by others.

She is very forgiving of other unless they cross her. She even cracks jokes with her opponents. Deysha is a huge jokester sometimes. She loves to laugh and is pretty goofy sometimes. She likes to be with more relaxed people than the most serious people. She also prefers
people who help helps her up and push her further to a good future.

Deysha loves to have friendships. If a person is bringing her down though she ignores them and cant be on the list of possible friends. If someone keeps bothering her, she Its a really small group that she considers friends but many she calls acquaintances. Deysha also very patient with others and doesnt mind waiting. She tries her best to get along with everyone.

Deysha has her own ways of doing things rather than the normal ways. She can be creative when she want to be. Deysha is a very calm and cool person who likes her space. Interypting that time will enf up with a slap. She also prefers to be with others in a group rather than herself though it depends on the activity. Deysha is a very responsible and respectable person according to those around her.

Deysha may be a good person but there are also quite alot of many bad things. She can get very sarcastic if she wants but it may not be consciously. She also can be really shy and not really talk to the prople around her. She may even go as far to ignore people altogether. Deysha can also be quite messy when doing certain things and sometimes even forgets to do her chores. She also has hint of sadness inside of her and that cause nightmares sometimes. She wonder why her parent gave her up and did not keep her.

She is unreliable and unhonest to people. If she believes she can benefit fron them, she doesnt have them around. She is cheater when it comes to tricks and almost every card game. She is no gambler but she would seem to be a very lucky one.

She is a mean person to those around her when she feels like it. She hates the golden children who have almost no flaws. She may even go as far to challenging them in battle. She is also rude when she sees people who brag about being strong or having a cool blood family. She also is pessimistic when she doesnt see the bright side.

Deysha also lies and even does it unconsciously. She get really lazy or distracted easily and forgets the task at hand. If you wake her and she isnt ready to get up, she will slap you across the face. She can also be stubborn about matters and not letting others tell her otherwise. She also is controlling and rude when she is int he middle of work. Deysha is known as a master procrastinater.

She is also a very sore loser. She absolutley hates losing so if she really wants to be someone, she will cheat no matter the cost. She also makes it look like someone else did something wrong. She also is a master analyzer of battle so she will even go for a low blow to win.

She is also very violent when it comes to fighting. Once she gets her rhythm, she becomes a beast of instict and strategy rather than a fighting human. She also finds it good to work off stress and other things by fighting. She also will fight anyone who challenges her even if they are a teacher. She may not always be the topdog bit you wont get away with threatining her. If she is reading, she will act totally uniterested with your presence.

Deysha may be good at somethings but absolutely hates lazy intelligent people. She also hates heros for being fake all the time like, why does smiling matter.


Likes:
-pasta
-candy corn
-animals
-children and babies


Dislikes:
-broccli
-homophobes
-crimes that arent justified
-silence


Fears:
-claustrophobic
-being alone for more than 2 days.
-a world with no music


Mannerisms:
-she scrathches her hair when she is nervous.
-she falls alseep if she isnt intersted in something.
-she taps her fooot when she is excited to do something when sitting.
-she may cry in the middle of a match to trick an enemy.


Backstory:

Deysha Ressau-Persan was born on September 25th. She was adopted by an adoptive family as a baby. Though she knows she is adopted, she isnt treated any different then her brother. He was born a year after her. She treated him like a twin to him.

In elementary school, she worked hard and joined different activities. She was a honor student and finally got her quirk and so did her brother. He had the "super smarts" as she said and helped her better monitor her power. She ws finally able to start her journey to a hero school.

In middle school, she did swimming and loved to play tennis. Her power developed nicely and she was able to apply to a hero school. She was planning to go to one of the top ten in america along with her brother. Sadly thier father got moved to japan for a job. Not all hope was lost and they were Ble to apply to another school.

When she turned 14 a year before she entered the school, she recieved a ring and letter from her adoptive parents. Her real parents had wanted them to send the ring so she could always remeber they are with her. Though they had the hero All Might, she still looked up to the american heroes.



Relationships:

Remi Persan- the adoptive mother in her family. She has a quirk with powers to grow plants at a very fast rate though its limited to only 2 times. Remi works in the plany store she owns. She does the laundry for the family and gives Deysha advice.

Endran Persan- the father figure in her adoptive family. He has a quirk with the power to find a person by having something with thier DNA on it. He is naturally a detective and loves his work. He loves doing the cooking for the family and spending time with his family.

Ethan Persan- Her brother and only adoptive sibling. He was one year younger than her But was already starting due to his power in the supporting class. He has a quirk of extreme intelligence and likes to help his sister with her power. She is also his guinea pig so he is more than welcome to his help. She doesnt mind unless it messes up her hair. He also made two braclets that help her control her power. He also had a crush on her friend Seth.

Seth Granhm- Her best friend who also came to school her. He has a ice creation and has new her since they were still very young kids. He was her knight but she was also a knight that was his. Surprisingly they didnt like each other like that. Actually that last comment is a lie, it would never work since he is gay. He also liked her brother back but didnt know how to approach them. She could only laugh at them from afar.


Quirk: Sound Distortion

The user can refine sound to make sonokinetic energy. That energy can then be used to make sonokinetic constructs. They each last up to 5 minutes with up to 3 at a time. There is a cooldown time of ten minutes. This requires moving sound around the user so naturally at a stadium they ahve the advantage. Destroying them lets out a blast of sound energy that knocks back the user and those around the sound object. If the user isnt within the 5 meter range they arent affected. Depending on the users strenght is how much they may get knocked back and the max is 3 meters. If the oponents strength is high enough, they may not even feel it. The constructs appear in a light blue color. The constructs are as durable as ironwood.

Special Moves: Dragon creation- the user can create 1 three meter tall sonokinetic Dragon. They can move alone but need to be controlled by user to keep attacking an enemy. The user can also fuse with them as armor to fight with. The durability is that of wood and its weakness is its wings. It can move 15 mph.

3 minute duration- 10 minutes cooldown



Items:
-a diamond, emerald, sapphire and ruby ring she got from her orginal parents.
-she always carries lolipops in her pocket and often eats them during fighting. She prefers fruit punch, blue raspberry, and orange.
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Skills/talents:
-cooking
-singing
-any kind of dancing
-roller blading/ice skating



Theme Song: Im Weak by AJR
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Desired Hero Name: Colorful Sound
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Age: 15


Gender: female


Chosen Extra Class: mentoring


Appearance: Deysha was there fron the very beginning and enjoyed the school. Her teaxhers had goid insight and gave her the knowledge to succeed.


(soon to be) Hero Costume: Her costume is a changing dress. It will be changed by the button pressed on a ring she has. Her costume was from her orginal parents and is all she has. Each stone has its button ob the side. By pressing all four the user gets a rainbow colored dress(#1). The dress has the ability to absorb shocks from physical attack. It can absorb up to 70% of it. By pressing the ruby button they get a simple red school looking outfit(#3). This outfit give heat resitance and ice resitance. By pressing it agin they get a even fancier version of that(#2). This can do the same as the other with water resitance. By pressing the sapphire a ROTC uniform with style is created(#5). This suit can allow user to beest absorb soubd to piwer up. By pressing it again a purple dress is created(#4). This dress can help user to move faster and jump higher. By pressing the emerald the user gets a dark purpleish dress (#6). With this the user legs become strong as steel.
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Height: 1.8 meters


Weight: 59 Kilograms


Personality:
Deysha is a very optimistic person and always finds the good side of everything. She loves to laugh and is pretty goofy sometimes. Deysha will crack She intrigued by anything science and love because of the intellectual conversations as they stimulate the mind. Her IQ had actually reached 190 but Deysha doesnt act like it.

Deysha doesnt really like talking about others and really prefer to ignore boring stuff that doesnt have to deal with her at all. She is very forgiving of other unless they cross her. Deysha is very understanding and avoids being judgemental toward others. Deysha likes to have and create postive environmrnts ratger than negative ones. She also avoids most mean and negative people.

As long as a persons helps her up and pushes her further to a good future, Deysha is ok with friendship. Otherwise if they bring her down she will leave them alone. Its a really small group that she considers friends but many she calls acquaintances. Deysha also very patient with others and doesnt mind waiting. Deysha also doesnt really get mad at other because she is a very nice person. Even if she hasnt done anything to cayse something, she will blaim herself.

Deysha tries to stay away from irrational people to prevent getting caught in thier problems. She can be creative when she want to be. Deysha a very calm and cool person who likes her space. She also prefers to be with other rather than herself though it depends on the activity. Deysha is a very responsible and respectable person.


Likes:
-pasta
-candy corn
-animals
-children and babies


Dislikes:
-broccli
-homophobes
-crimes that arent justified
-silence


Fears:
-claustrophobic
-being alone for more than 2 days.
-a world with no music


Mannerisms:
-she scrathches her hair when she is nervous.
-she falls alseep if she isnt intersted in something.
-she taps her fooot when she is excited to do something when sitting.


Backstory:

Deysha Ressau-Persan was born on September 25th. She was from the United States and was sadly an orphan. In her first ten years or so of life she moved from home to home. She was really a kid with no home. She struggled at most places and barely got by.

Deysha had ambitions about what she wanted to be though. Unlike the other orphans. She didnt turn to stealing due to the plan she would enact once she was adopted.
Deysha wanted to be a hero like the ones all around the world. She admired them very much and hoped her power would get that strong.

Finally all the young eoentary kids along with her tested for powers. She has a sound power which had lots of potential according to the doctor. The lucky few in the orphanage were sent to a new one specifically for people with superpowers. Life was finally looking up for the little girl who dreamed for a better life and that happened.

On her 10th birthday she was adopted and moved in with her new family. They were living in America on a mission and thats when they saw her. She had been with the orphanage on a trip and they instantly clicked. They adopted her the next day and she moved back with them.

Fitting in was hard at first but evantually she was well-liked. She made friends and even a had a brother beside her. She was hapoy to finally get to see her happy ending. When she turned 14 a year vefore she entered the school, she recieved a ring and letter from the foster system. Her parents had wanted them to send the ring that could make her costume appear. Though they has the hero All Might, she still worshipped the justice league in the U.S. with the Amazan Princess, Wonder Woman. Also known as the god killer.



Relationships:

Remi Persan- the adoptive mother in her family. She has a quirk with powers to grow plants at a very fast rate though its limited to only 2 times. Remi works in the plany store she owns. She does the laundry for the family and gives Deysha advice.

Endran Persan- the father figure in her adoptive family. He has a quirk with the power to find a person by having something with thier DNA on it. He is naturally a detective and loves his work. He loves doing the cooking for the family and spending time with his family.

Ethan Persan- Her brother and only adoptive sibling. He was one year younger than her But was already starting due to his power in the supporting class. He has a quirk of extreme intelligence and likes to help his sister with her power. She is also his guinea pig so he is more than welcome to his help. She doesnt mind unless it messes up her hair. He also made two braclets that help her control her power. He also had a crush on her friend Seth.

Seth Granhm- Her best friend who also came to school her. He has a ice creation and has new her since they were still very young kids. He was her knight but she was also a knight that was his. Surprisingly they didnt like each other like that. Actually that last comment is a lie, it would never work since he is gay. He also liked her brother back but didnt know how to approach them. She could only laugh at them from afar.


Quirk: Sound Distortion

-The user can refine sound to make sonokinetic energy. That energy can then be used to make sonokinetic constructs. They each last up to 5 minutes with up to 5 at a time. This requires moving sound around the user so naturally at a stadium they ahve the advantage. This can also be used to make apendages that act as if they are apart of the body. Destroying them lets out a blast of sound energy that knocks back the user and those around the sound object. If the user isnt within the 10 meter range they arent affected. They aopear in a light blue color.

-The user can also use that raw sound and do a sonic scream though it can only move up to 5 pounds of anything. As it is a sonic scream it can cause temporary deafness for
3 minutes. By doing a very low power scream she can echolocate or call an to animal.

-the user catches sound but can also store it in jars. By putting your ear against it you can hear it or opening the top only slighty, you can hear it.



Special Moves: Siren Song-The user refines sound to sing a song. This song can cause a enemy to fall alseep only if they are weaker than the user. A perosn can resist it if stronger but they must will themselves and believe they can overcome it. This also results in the user being frozen for twice as many minutes after using it. The user can move while singing it though.
2 minute song- 4 minutes frozen.



Items:
-Two wristbands made of a speccial metal and a few electronics to limit the sound she picks up. Also it can help collect more sound.
-a diamond, emerald, sapphire and ruby ring she got from her orginal parents. It also hold a costume made by them.




Skills/talents:
-cooking
-singing
-any kind of dancing
-roller blading/ice skating



Theme Song: Im Weak by AJR
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I don't see her name on the top, the CS is riddled with grammar mistakes that make it a bit hard to read, the quirk's a bit strong and the special move isn't really related to what the quirk's main form is. The backstory is fine, but using Wonder Woman herself may be overdoing it even though she is American I don't think using the exact name and nickname from the character is wise. Her personality is also basic, it's sorta all over the place for what you're aiming for and again riddled with grammar problems. (Did I do good Idea Idea ?)
 
I don't see her name on the top, the CS is riddled with grammar mistakes that make it a bit hard to read, the quirk's a bit strong and the special move isn't really related to what the quirk's main form is. The backstory is fine, but using Wonder Woman herself may be overdoing it even though she is American I don't think using the exact name and nickname from the character is wise. Her personality is also basic, it's sorta all over the place for what you're aiming for and again riddled with grammar problems. (Did I do good Idea Idea ?)
Yeah, you did great. The backstory is also overdramatic and inconsistent with the lore of boku no hero, plus as you kinda already mentioned it tries to mix in things that don't make sense here. I will get to them though, as soon as I have a response to my comment about them breaking a rule...
 
Yeah, you did great. The backstory is also overdramatic and inconsistent with the lore of boku no hero, plus as you kinda already mentioned it tries to mix in things that don't make sense here. I will get to them though, as soon as I have a response to my comment about them breaking a rule...

What rule was broken?
Also I tried to fix the errors I could like the backstory is less dramatic and I tried to fix things.
 
Desired Hero Name: Colorful Sound

Name: Deysha Ressau-Persan

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Age: 15


Gender: female


Chosen Extra Class: mentoring


Appearance: Deysha applied with the others at the same time. She was one of the people who didnt bathe in the limelight but if she wanted to would.


(soon to be) Hero Costume: Her costume is a changing dress. It will be changed by the button pressed on a ring she has. Her costume was from her orginal parents and is all she has. Each stone has its button ob the side. By pressing all four the user gets a rainbow colored dress(#1). The dress has the ability to absorb shocks from physical attack. It can absorb up to 70% of it. By pressing the ruby button they get a simple red school looking outfit(#3). This outfit give heat resitance and ice resitance. By pressing it agin they get a even fancier version of that(#2). This can do the same as the other with water resitance. By pressing the sapphire a ROTC uniform with style is created(#5). This suit can allow user to beest absorb soubd to piwer up. By pressing it again a purple dress is created(#4). This dress can help user to move faster and jump higher. By pressing the emerald the user gets a dark purpleish dress (#6). With this the user legs become strong as steel.
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Height: 1.8 meters


Weight: 59 Kilograms


Personality:
Deysha is a very optimistic person and always finds the good side of everything. Deysha is very understanding and avoids being judgemental toward others. Deysha likes to have and create postive environmrnts ratger than negative ones. Deysha also doesnt really get mad at other because she is a very nice person. She attracts all the positive energy and prevents the negative energy.

She intrigued by anything science and love because of the intellectual conversations as they stimulate the mind. Her IQ had actually reached 190 but Deysha doesnt act like it.
Deysha doesnt really like talking about others and really prefer to ignore boring stuff that doesnt have to deal with her at all. This causes her to avoid most mean and negative people. She just doesnt find the purpose in going on people. Deysha tries to stay away from irrational people to prevent getting caught in thier problems. She doesnt like to get dragged down by others.

She is very forgiving of other unless they cross her. She even cracks jokes with her opponents. Deysha is a huge jokester sometimes. She loves to laugh and is pretty goofy sometimes. She likes to be with more relaxed people than the most serious people. She also prefers
people who help helps her up and push her further to a good future.

Deysha loves to have friendships. If a person is bringing her down though she ignores them and cant be on the list of possible friends. Its a really small group that she considers friends but many she calls acquaintances. Deysha also very patient with others and doesnt mind waiting. She tries her best to get along with everyone.

Deysha has her own ways of doing things rather than the normal ways. She can be creative when she want to be. Deysha is a very calm and cool person who likes her space. She also prefers to be with others in a group rather than herself though it depends on the activity. Deysha is a very responsible and respectable person according to those around her.


Likes:
-pasta
-candy corn
-animals
-children and babies


Dislikes:
-broccli
-homophobes
-crimes that arent justified
-silence


Fears:
-claustrophobic
-being alone for more than 2 days.
-a world with no music


Mannerisms:
-she scrathches her hair when she is nervous.
-she falls alseep if she isnt intersted in something.
-she taps her fooot when she is excited to do something when sitting.


Backstory:

Deysha Ressau-Persan was born on September 25th. She was adopted by an adoptive family as a baby. Though she knows she is adopted, she isnt treated any different then her brother. He was born a year after her. She treated him like a twin to him.

In elementary school, she worked hard and joined different activities. She was a honor student and finally got her quirk and so did her brother. He had the "super smarts" as she said and helped her better monitor her power. She ws finally able to start her journey to a hero school.

In middle school, she did swimming and loved to play tennis. Her power developed nicely and she was able to apply to a hero school. She was planning to go to one of the top ten in america along with her brother. Sadly thier father got moved to japan for a job. Not all hope was lost and they were Ble to apply to another school.

When she turned 14 a year before she entered the school, she recieved a ring and letter from her adoptive parents. Her real parents had wanted them to send the ring that could make her costume appear. Though they has the hero All Might, she still looked up to the american heroes.



Relationships:

Remi Persan- the adoptive mother in her family. She has a quirk with powers to grow plants at a very fast rate though its limited to only 2 times. Remi works in the plany store she owns. She does the laundry for the family and gives Deysha advice.

Endran Persan- the father figure in her adoptive family. He has a quirk with the power to find a person by having something with thier DNA on it. He is naturally a detective and loves his work. He loves doing the cooking for the family and spending time with his family.

Ethan Persan- Her brother and only adoptive sibling. He was one year younger than her But was already starting due to his power in the supporting class. He has a quirk of extreme intelligence and likes to help his sister with her power. She is also his guinea pig so he is more than welcome to his help. She doesnt mind unless it messes up her hair. He also made two braclets that help her control her power. He also had a crush on her friend Seth.

Seth Granhm- Her best friend who also came to school her. He has a ice creation and has new her since they were still very young kids. He was her knight but she was also a knight that was his. Surprisingly they didnt like each other like that. Actually that last comment is a lie, it would never work since he is gay. He also liked her brother back but didnt know how to approach them. She could only laugh at them from afar.


Quirk: Sound Distortion

-The user can refine sound to make sonokinetic energy. That energy can then be used to make sonokinetic constructs. They each last up to 5 minutes with up to 5 at a time. This requires moving sound around the user so naturally at a stadium they ahve the advantage. This can also be used to make apendages that act as if they are apart of the body. Destroying them lets out a blast of sound energy that knocks back the user and those around the sound object. If the user isnt within the 10 meter range they arent affected. They aopear in a light blue color.

-The user can also use that raw sound and do a sonic scream though it can only move up to 5 pounds of anything. As it is a sonic scream it can cause temporary deafness for
3 minutes. By doing a very low power scream she can echolocate or call an to animal.

-the user catches sound but can also store it in jars. By putting your ear against it you can hear it or opening the top only slighty, you can hear it.



Special Moves: Siren Song-The user refines sound to sing a song. This song can cause a enemy to fall alseep only if they are weaker than the user. A perosn can resist it if stronger but they must will themselves and believe they can overcome it. This also results in the user being frozen for twice as many minutes after using it. The user can move while singing it though.
2 minute song- 4 minutes frozen.



Items:
-Two wristbands made of a speccial metal and a few electronics to limit the sound she picks up. Also it can help collect more sound.
-a diamond, emerald, sapphire and ruby ring she got from her orginal parents. It also hold a costume made by them.




Skills/talents:
-cooking
-singing
-any kind of dancing
-roller blading/ice skating



Theme Song: Im Weak by AJR
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Name on top is fixed, personality is better, but the quirk is still to strong. Having a quirk that allows sonokinetic constructs and having a quirk that allows the amplified usage of sound through voice (aka Present Mic) are two different quirks entirely. The My Hero Academia universe is filled with interesting and different characters and quirks that while they may appear the same, both are uniquely different. It isn't just like She can control sound it's more like She can control a certain and specific aspect of sound. That principal applies to many and is one of the core aspects of quirk creation.

Now moving onto the actual ranges and prox's of the quirk itself, they also need a nerfing. First off making different kinds of constructs, while possible, is also a bit of a stretch for a 15 year old girl. She can make sonic appendages or sonic constructs, not both (until she earns enough QEP then it could be possible). The idea of having a sonic knock back for a destroyed construct is a good idea for a passive, but having it's range being 10 meters (which is around 30 or so feet) is a pretty large radius. The actual range of the knock back (like how far away they are sent) isn't listed, it would also be a good idea to include how far away they god depending on how close they were to the construct.

Also I don't get the sound in a jar bit, so that may need an explanation for it's usefulness. Now as for the actual special move, the requirements for it to work and the amount of time asleep isn't really explained or explained well. How does the special move dictate if the person is stronger than the user, is it via mental or physical means? In which case how does the special move know if the person is more mentally stable or physically stable? And the time asleep, how long is that and how long does it last? Also having something that makes people fall asleep instantly is a bit to strong, maybe make it have a drowsing affect or have the person fall asleep after a certain amount of time.

Well I think that's enough for know, the personality also could use work. If I were you I'd suggest a website called Free personality test, type descriptions, relationship and career advice | 16Personalities as it helps with making a solid personality and such. Sine there are literally only 16 options and since everyone is different, it would also be wise to variate certain attributes if you decide to take the personality test (when you are thinking of your character in mind, not yourself). Welp, now I take out my dogs.
 
Name on top is fixed, personality is better, but the quirk is still to strong. Having a quirk that allows sonokinetic constructs and having a quirk that allows the amplified usage of sound through voice (aka Present Mic) are two different quirks entirely. The My Hero Academia universe is filled with interesting and different characters and quirks that while they may appear the same, both are uniquely different. It isn't just like She can control sound it's more like She can control a certain and specific aspect of sound. That principal applies to many and is one of the core aspects of quirk creation.

Now moving onto the actual ranges and prox's of the quirk itself, they also need a nerfing. First off making different kinds of constructs, while possible, is also a bit of a stretch for a 15 year old girl. She can make sonic appendages or sonic constructs, not both (until she earns enough QEP then it could be possible). The idea of having a sonic knock back for a destroyed construct is a good idea for a passive, but having it's range being 10 meters (which is around 30 or so feet) is a pretty large radius. The actual range of the knock back (like how far away they are sent) isn't listed, it would also be a good idea to include how far away they god depending on how close they were to the construct.

Also I don't get the sound in a jar bit, so that may need an explanation for it's usefulness. Now as for the actual special move, the requirements for it to work and the amount of time asleep isn't really explained or explained well. How does the special move dictate if the person is stronger than the user, is it via mental or physical means? In which case how does the special move know if the person is more mentally stable or physically stable? And the time asleep, how long is that and how long does it last? Also having something that makes people fall asleep instantly is a bit to strong, maybe make it have a drowsing affect or have the person fall asleep after a certain amount of time.

Well I think that's enough for know, the personality also could use work. If I were you I'd suggest a website called Free personality test, type descriptions, relationship and career advice | 16Personalities as it helps with making a solid personality and such. Sine there are literally only 16 options and since everyone is different, it would also be wise to variate certain attributes if you decide to take the personality test (when you are thinking of your character in mind, not yourself). Welp, now I take out my dogs.


Is the quirk better now?
Also what can I do specifically for the character personality?
 
Is the quirk better now?
Also what can I do specifically for the character personality?
Desired Hero Name: Colorful Sound

Name: Deysha Ressau-Persan

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Age: 15


Gender: female


Chosen Extra Class: mentoring


Appearance: Deysha applied with the others at the same time. She was one of the people who didnt bathe in the limelight but if she wanted to would.


(soon to be) Hero Costume: Her costume is a changing dress. It will be changed by the button pressed on a ring she has. Her costume was from her orginal parents and is all she has. Each stone has its button ob the side. By pressing all four the user gets a rainbow colored dress(#1). The dress has the ability to absorb shocks from physical attack. It can absorb up to 70% of it. By pressing the ruby button they get a simple red school looking outfit(#3). This outfit give heat resitance and ice resitance. By pressing it agin they get a even fancier version of that(#2). This can do the same as the other with water resitance. By pressing the sapphire a ROTC uniform with style is created(#5). This suit can allow user to beest absorb soubd to piwer up. By pressing it again a purple dress is created(#4). This dress can help user to move faster and jump higher. By pressing the emerald the user gets a dark purpleish dress (#6). With this the user legs become strong as steel.
View attachment 353961
Height: 1.8 meters


Weight: 59 Kilograms


Personality:
Deysha is a very optimistic person and always finds the good side of everything. Deysha is very understanding and avoids being judgemental toward others. Deysha likes to have and create postive environmrnts ratger than negative ones. Deysha also doesnt really get mad at other because she is a very nice person. She attracts all the positive energy and prevents the negative energy.

She intrigued by anything science and love because of the intellectual conversations as they stimulate the mind. Her IQ had actually reached 190 but Deysha doesnt act like it.
Deysha doesnt really like talking about others and really prefer to ignore boring stuff that doesnt have to deal with her at all. This causes her to avoid most mean and negative people. She just doesnt find the purpose in going on people. Deysha tries to stay away from irrational people to prevent getting caught in thier problems. She doesnt like to get dragged down by others.

She is very forgiving of other unless they cross her. She even cracks jokes with her opponents. Deysha is a huge jokester sometimes. She loves to laugh and is pretty goofy sometimes. She likes to be with more relaxed people than the most serious people. She also prefers
people who help helps her up and push her further to a good future.

Deysha loves to have friendships. If a person is bringing her down though she ignores them and cant be on the list of possible friends. Its a really small group that she considers friends but many she calls acquaintances. Deysha also very patient with others and doesnt mind waiting. She tries her best to get along with everyone.

Deysha has her own ways of doing things rather than the normal ways. She can be creative when she want to be. Deysha is a very calm and cool person who likes her space. She also prefers to be with others in a group rather than herself though it depends on the activity. Deysha is a very responsible and respectable person according to those around her.


Likes:
-pasta
-candy corn
-animals
-children and babies


Dislikes:
-broccli
-homophobes
-crimes that arent justified
-silence


Fears:
-claustrophobic
-being alone for more than 2 days.
-a world with no music


Mannerisms:
-she scrathches her hair when she is nervous.
-she falls alseep if she isnt intersted in something.
-she taps her fooot when she is excited to do something when sitting.


Backstory:

Deysha Ressau-Persan was born on September 25th. She was adopted by an adoptive family as a baby. Though she knows she is adopted, she isnt treated any different then her brother. He was born a year after her. She treated him like a twin to him.

In elementary school, she worked hard and joined different activities. She was a honor student and finally got her quirk and so did her brother. He had the "super smarts" as she said and helped her better monitor her power. She ws finally able to start her journey to a hero school.

In middle school, she did swimming and loved to play tennis. Her power developed nicely and she was able to apply to a hero school. She was planning to go to one of the top ten in america along with her brother. Sadly thier father got moved to japan for a job. Not all hope was lost and they were Ble to apply to another school.

When she turned 14 a year before she entered the school, she recieved a ring and letter from her adoptive parents. Her real parents had wanted them to send the ring that could make her costume appear. Though they has the hero All Might, she still looked up to the american heroes.



Relationships:

Remi Persan- the adoptive mother in her family. She has a quirk with powers to grow plants at a very fast rate though its limited to only 2 times. Remi works in the plany store she owns. She does the laundry for the family and gives Deysha advice.

Endran Persan- the father figure in her adoptive family. He has a quirk with the power to find a person by having something with thier DNA on it. He is naturally a detective and loves his work. He loves doing the cooking for the family and spending time with his family.

Ethan Persan- Her brother and only adoptive sibling. He was one year younger than her But was already starting due to his power in the supporting class. He has a quirk of extreme intelligence and likes to help his sister with her power. She is also his guinea pig so he is more than welcome to his help. She doesnt mind unless it messes up her hair. He also made two braclets that help her control her power. He also had a crush on her friend Seth.

Seth Granhm- Her best friend who also came to school her. He has a ice creation and has new her since they were still very young kids. He was her knight but she was also a knight that was his. Surprisingly they didnt like each other like that. Actually that last comment is a lie, it would never work since he is gay. He also liked her brother back but didnt know how to approach them. She could only laugh at them from afar.


Quirk: Sound Distortion

The user can refine sound to make sonokinetic energy. That energy can then be used to make sonokinetic constructs. They each last up to 5 minutes with up to 3 at a time. There is a cooldown time of ten minutes. This requires moving sound around the user so naturally at a stadium they ahve the advantage. Destroying them lets out a blast of sound energy that knocks back the user and those around the sound object. If the user isnt within the 5 meter range they arent affected. Depending on the users strenght is how much they may get knocked back and the max is 3 meters. If the oponents strength is high enough, they may not even feel it. The constructs appear in a light blue color.

Special Moves: Siren Song-The user refines sound to sing a song. This song can cause a enemy to fall alseep for 20 seconds only if they are mentally weaker than the user. A person can resist it if they are stronger but they must will themselves and believe they can overcome it. This is in terms of mental strength and if they are mentally unstable it has a high sucess rate. This also results in the user being unable to move for twice as many minutes after using it. The user can move while singing it though.

2 minute song- 4 minutes Unable to move.



Items:
-Two wristbands made of a speccial metal and a few electronics to limit the sound she picks up. Also it can help collect more sound.
-a diamond, emerald, sapphire and ruby ring she got from her orginal parents. It also hold a costume made by them.




Skills/talents:
-cooking
-singing
-any kind of dancing
-roller blading/ice skating



Theme Song: Im Weak by AJR
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It is definitely getting better, keep that up as it shows your determination. There are still some problems however. For one the sonokinetic structures and the special move as like previously said are two different uses of sound. Potentially in the future she may be able to unlock that usage of sound, but as of now she can not have both. The ability of a quirk is very specific and so are it's weaknesses. Even though they aren't apparent at first, they exist and once the user is aware it would be wise to avoid going to that limit so that other's don't know and to avoid harming the body, saving that for training their quirk.

Well for her personality all I can gather from it right now is that she is a nice, understanding, forgiving, and has her own way of doing stuff. Which is fine and dandy, but from all of this she's a gary stu. She's perfect in the fact that she's always kind except to the meanies and is super-duper smart. What about the flaws? What about the fact that she's adopted? How does that affect her? I see an overall arching theme, which is good, but where is some of the contrasts that go along with it? I don't see anything about her personality that could hinder her is what I'm talking about. Her IQ is also pretty high for a 15 year old, which don't get me wrong it's fine for people to be smart, but not even some of the world's greatest minds like Einstein and Hawking have an IQ higher than 190. It's even thought that most renaissance men didn't have a higher IQ than that, except for Leonardo.

Point is she's a gary stu and her quirk can't have two usages of sound at this given moment.
 
It is definitely getting better, keep that up as it shows your determination. There are still some problems however. For one the sonokinetic structures and the special move as like previously said are two different uses of sound. Potentially in the future she may be able to unlock that usage of sound, but as of now she can not have both. The ability of a quirk is very specific and so are it's weaknesses. Even though they aren't apparent at first, they exist and once the user is aware it would be wise to avoid going to that limit so that other's don't know and to avoid harming the body, saving that for training their quirk.

Well for her personality all I can gather from it right now is that she is a nice, understanding, forgiving, and has her own way of doing stuff. Which is fine and dandy, but from all of this she's a gary stu. She's perfect in the fact that she's always kind except to the meanies and is super-duper smart. What about the flaws? What about the fact that she's adopted? How does that affect her? I see an overall arching theme, which is good, but where is some of the contrasts that go along with it? I don't see anything about her personality that could hinder her is what I'm talking about. Her IQ is also pretty high for a 15 year old, which don't get me wrong it's fine for people to be smart, but not even some of the world's greatest minds like Einstein and Hawking have an IQ higher than 190. It's even thought that most renaissance men didn't have a higher IQ than that, except for Leonardo.

Point is she's a gary stu and her quirk can't have two usages of sound at this given moment.


I edited it the best I could and did what you said I would need to change. I made her more realistic and I made the special move closer to the actual quirk, what do you think of it now.
 
Desired Hero Name: Colorful Sound

Name: Deysha Ressau-Persan

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Age: 15


Gender: female


Chosen Extra Class: mentoring


Appearance: Deysha applied with the others at the same time. She was one of the people who didnt bathe in the limelight but if she wanted to would.


(soon to be) Hero Costume: Her costume is a changing dress. It will be changed by the button pressed on a ring she has. Her costume was from her orginal parents and is all she has. Each stone has its button ob the side. By pressing all four the user gets a rainbow colored dress(#1). The dress has the ability to absorb shocks from physical attack. It can absorb up to 70% of it. By pressing the ruby button they get a simple red school looking outfit(#3). This outfit give heat resitance and ice resitance. By pressing it agin they get a even fancier version of that(#2). This can do the same as the other with water resitance. By pressing the sapphire a ROTC uniform with style is created(#5). This suit can allow user to beest absorb soubd to piwer up. By pressing it again a purple dress is created(#4). This dress can help user to move faster and jump higher. By pressing the emerald the user gets a dark purpleish dress (#6). With this the user legs become strong as steel.
View attachment 353961
Height: 1.8 meters


Weight: 59 Kilograms


Personality:
Deysha is a very optimistic person and always finds the good side of everything. Deysha is very understanding and avoids being judgemental toward others. Deysha likes to have and create postive environmrnts ratger than negative ones. Deysha also doesnt really get mad at other because she is a very nice person. She attracts all the positive energy and prevents the negative energy.

She intrigued by anything science and love because of the intellectual conversations as they stimulate the mind. Her IQ had actually reached 190 but Deysha doesnt act like it.
Deysha doesnt really like talking about others and really prefer to ignore boring stuff that doesnt have to deal with her at all. This causes her to avoid most mean and negative people. She just doesnt find the purpose in going on people. Deysha tries to stay away from irrational people to prevent getting caught in thier problems. She doesnt like to get dragged down by others.

She is very forgiving of other unless they cross her. She even cracks jokes with her opponents. Deysha is a huge jokester sometimes. She loves to laugh and is pretty goofy sometimes. She likes to be with more relaxed people than the most serious people. She also prefers
people who help helps her up and push her further to a good future.

Deysha loves to have friendships. If a person is bringing her down though she ignores them and cant be on the list of possible friends. Its a really small group that she considers friends but many she calls acquaintances. Deysha also very patient with others and doesnt mind waiting. She tries her best to get along with everyone.

Deysha has her own ways of doing things rather than the normal ways. She can be creative when she want to be. Deysha is a very calm and cool person who likes her space. She also prefers to be with others in a group rather than herself though it depends on the activity. Deysha is a very responsible and respectable person according to those around her.

Deysha may be a good person but there are also quite alot of many bad things. She can get very sarcastic if she wants but it may not be consciously. She also can be really shy and not really talk to the prople around her. She may even go as far to ignore people altogether. Deysha can also be quite messy when doing certain things and sometimes even forgets to do her chores. She also has hint of sadness inside of her and that cause nightmares sometimes. She wonder why her parent gave her up and did not keep her.

Deysha also lies but only if its for a good reason Though she has done it for other reasons. Sometimes she get really lazy or distracted easily and forget the task at hand. She can also be stubborn about matters and not letting others tell her otherwise. She also can be controlling if she may not believe a group can do the work by the due date. Sometimes she is a mster procrastinater.

She is also very violent when it comes to fighting. Once she gets her rhythm, she becomes a beast of instict and strategy rather than a fighting human. She also finds it good to work off stress and other things by fighting. She also will fight anyone who challenges her even if they are a teacher. She may not always be the topdog bit you wont get away with threatining her. If she is reading, she will act totally uniterested with your presence.


Likes:
-pasta
-candy corn
-animals
-children and babies


Dislikes:
-broccli
-homophobes
-crimes that arent justified
-silence


Fears:
-claustrophobic
-being alone for more than 2 days.
-a world with no music


Mannerisms:
-she scrathches her hair when she is nervous.
-she falls alseep if she isnt intersted in something.
-she taps her fooot when she is excited to do something when sitting.
-she may cry in the middle of a match to trick an enemy.


Backstory:

Deysha Ressau-Persan was born on September 25th. She was adopted by an adoptive family as a baby. Though she knows she is adopted, she isnt treated any different then her brother. He was born a year after her. She treated him like a twin to him.

In elementary school, she worked hard and joined different activities. She was a honor student and finally got her quirk and so did her brother. He had the "super smarts" as she said and helped her better monitor her power. She ws finally able to start her journey to a hero school.

In middle school, she did swimming and loved to play tennis. Her power developed nicely and she was able to apply to a hero school. She was planning to go to one of the top ten in america along with her brother. Sadly thier father got moved to japan for a job. Not all hope was lost and they were Ble to apply to another school.

When she turned 14 a year before she entered the school, she recieved a ring and letter from her adoptive parents. Her real parents had wanted them to send the ring that could make her costume appear. Though they has the hero All Might, she still looked up to the american heroes.



Relationships:

Remi Persan- the adoptive mother in her family. She has a quirk with powers to grow plants at a very fast rate though its limited to only 2 times. Remi works in the plany store she owns. She does the laundry for the family and gives Deysha advice.

Endran Persan- the father figure in her adoptive family. He has a quirk with the power to find a person by having something with thier DNA on it. He is naturally a detective and loves his work. He loves doing the cooking for the family and spending time with his family.

Ethan Persan- Her brother and only adoptive sibling. He was one year younger than her But was already starting due to his power in the supporting class. He has a quirk of extreme intelligence and likes to help his sister with her power. She is also his guinea pig so he is more than welcome to his help. She doesnt mind unless it messes up her hair. He also made two braclets that help her control her power. He also had a crush on her friend Seth.

Seth Granhm- Her best friend who also came to school her. He has a ice creation and has new her since they were still very young kids. He was her knight but she was also a knight that was his. Surprisingly they didnt like each other like that. Actually that last comment is a lie, it would never work since he is gay. He also liked her brother back but didnt know how to approach them. She could only laugh at them from afar.


Quirk: Sound Distortion

The user can refine sound to make sonokinetic energy. That energy can then be used to make sonokinetic constructs. They each last up to 5 minutes with up to 3 at a time. There is a cooldown time of ten minutes. This requires moving sound around the user so naturally at a stadium they ahve the advantage. Destroying them lets out a blast of sound energy that knocks back the user and those around the sound object. If the user isnt within the 5 meter range they arent affected. Depending on the users strenght is how much they may get knocked back and the max is 3 meters. If the oponents strength is high enough, they may not even feel it. The constructs appear in a light blue color. The constructs are as durable as iron.

Special Moves: Dragon creation- the user can create 1 three meter tall sonokinetic Dragon. They can move alone but need to be controlled by user to keep attacking an enemy. The user can also fuse with them as armor to fight with. The durability is that of wood and its weakness is its wings. It can move 15 mph.

3 minute duration- 10 minutes cooldown



Items:
-Two wristbands made of a speccial metal and a few electronics to limit the sound she picks up. Also it can help collect more sound.
-a diamond, emerald, sapphire and ruby ring she got from her orginal parents. It also hold a costume made by them.




Skills/talents:
-cooking
-singing
-any kind of dancing
-roller blading/ice skating



Theme Song: Im Weak by AJR
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Decrease the durability of the sonokinetic constructs, since most students in PSA can only breakthrough concrete trying to break through something nearly solid as steel will be very challenging. It's not that bad of a problem and if Idea says that it's okay then it's okay, but just to make things a bit more even with others you know? As of now though you don't have to change it. This isn't a problem but rather a compliment, as the special move is unique and creative so good on you. Deysha's personality is also improved and seem's good, but in order to get a final estimate I'll as Idea to see if it qualifies (I think it does, but he's the head GM so I want to clear it. Until then I'll let you know.
 

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