Advice/Help An odd issue...Could use feedback. <3

[Zelena]

Minus the troll, I think most commented here genuinely want to help. Anyway, good luck in your future endeavors!

I agree, its not this thread just the lack of RP for my time. And you as well.

 

[Sara Sidereal]

Minus the troll, I think most commented here genuinely want to help. Anyway, good luck in your future endeavors!

I offered specific suggestions on how to improve which they ignored. Keep your passive aggressiveness to yourself.

 

[Cross]

Keep your aggressive comments to yourself. You badgered Zelena for not taking your advice and may have made them feel unwelcome on the site.

Jesus, what a mess. Re-write this paragraph from scratch.

This isn't helpful critique.

 

[Sara Sidereal]

There's a lot of redundancy in your writing sample. For example, "... their trek might establish itself to be." can be written "their trek might be." with no loss of meaning. This is a fairly common mistake for new writers. Neither grammarly nor your "editor" are providing you with useful information; they aren't identifying areas where you could improve. If you're paying your editor, stop, and look for a new one.

This is.

 

[Vertex]

Seems less like being helpful and more like being an aggressive snark.

 

[Onmyoji]

As the thread has become too aggressive, as well as the original question exhausted itself, it will be now closed for further discussion.