Venom Adhamm
No one is ever going to want me
Hey all, hope you're doing well and keeping safe. I'm Adhamm, and I've been writing for most of my life. It's mostly been short stories and poems, which you may have seen posted here before. But I've always wanted to write a novel. I've gone through several ideas, characters, stories, and worlds, but I've finally settled on something I really want to flesh out. I finally have a story I'd like to tell.
I've never written long-form prose before, so I was hoping to get some thoughts and feedback on what I'm doing right, what I'm doing wrong, and how to improve. Below is the first chapter in its current state. I'm still not completely happy with it and still want to tweak it later on, but its final version likely won't differ drastically from what you see here. Alongside typical feedback and thoughts on flow, sentence structure, general quality of writing, and so-forth, I am looking for specific feedback. First, what is the general vibe you get from the chapter? What kind of tone do you expect the rest of the story to take? And second, what questions does it leave you with? Would you feel motivated to continue reading in search of answers? Are you keen on seeing where this is going?
Your feedback is very much wanted and appreciated. Thank you for reading.
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I've never written long-form prose before, so I was hoping to get some thoughts and feedback on what I'm doing right, what I'm doing wrong, and how to improve. Below is the first chapter in its current state. I'm still not completely happy with it and still want to tweak it later on, but its final version likely won't differ drastically from what you see here. Alongside typical feedback and thoughts on flow, sentence structure, general quality of writing, and so-forth, I am looking for specific feedback. First, what is the general vibe you get from the chapter? What kind of tone do you expect the rest of the story to take? And second, what questions does it leave you with? Would you feel motivated to continue reading in search of answers? Are you keen on seeing where this is going?
Your feedback is very much wanted and appreciated. Thank you for reading.
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