Fantasy Scarlet Savior (Or: How I Became a Vampire's Guest)

[Count Gensokyo]

     "My mistress gives you her warmest greetings," the silver-haired, young maid said cooly to you as you stepped foot into the great mansion. "For now, you are considered a guest here."





      Hello, and welcome to the Scarlet Devil Mansion. In this quest, you play a young man who has found himself in a realm of the fantastic. Now, you live inside a mansion that feels like it came straight from the renaissance period. Meet and socialize with the girls of the mansion as you discover the mystery behind the disappearance of your best friend from the real world.


What secrets will be unearthed? What will your choices bring? Most importantly...


...who is best girl?

 

[Count Gensokyo]

@MrNeko @Crimrose @Venom Adhamm @Idea @onbeth

 

[onbeth]

oooh i like this idea!

 

[Count Gensokyo]

oooh i like this idea!

Awesome! I'm thinking about posting the beginning sometime before Halloween. I'll let you know when I have the thread up! Thanks for the interest!


@onbeth

 

[Idea]

Not bad. The words seems a little awkward some times but that may be me and my basic English talking.

 

[Count Gensokyo]

Awakened? I also had no idea English wasn't your primary language, haha.


@Idea

 

[Idea]

Awakened? I also had no idea English wasn't your primary language, haha.


@Idea

Awkward, I meant awkward. 


Well, I have a Cambridge proficiency degree in English, but in terms of the expressions I'm actually used to, that's not saying too much. So some things may be perfectly good English and still sound/look awakened to me.

 

[Count Gensokyo]

Care to tell me how I can improve the awkwardness, then?


@Idea

 

[Idea]

Care to tell me how I can improve the awkwardness, then?


@Idea

"As you discover the disappearance of your best friend from the real world"


this phrase makes it seem as if you didn't know they disappeared and the journey is to find out they disappeared. Which, contextually speaking, makes little sense, as you likely meant the friend had disappeared and you want to uncover the truth about their disappearance. 

 

[Zaxs]

This sounds really interesting.

 

[Count Gensokyo]

"As you discover the disappearance of your best friend from the real world"


this phrase makes it seem as if you didn't know they disappeared and the journey is to find out they disappeared. Which, contextually speaking, makes little sense, as you likely meant the friend had disappeared and you want to uncover the truth about their disappearance. 

Crap, I got gramatically wrecked there.


@Idea

This sounds really interesting.

Thanks! I'll be sure to let you know when I start up. 


@Zaxs

 

[Zaxs]

Thanks! I'll be sure to let you know when I start up. 

Thank you!

 

[Idea]

Crap, I got gramatically wrecked there.


@Idea


Thanks! I'll be sure to let you know when I start up. 


@Zaxs

I hope I didn't upset you? I wasn't meaning to be a troll or a grammar Nazi, I was just legitimately confused when I passed through that

 

[Count Gensokyo]

I hope I didn't upset you? I wasn't meaning to be a troll or a grammar Nazi, I was just legitimately confused when I passed through that

Not at all, lol. I'll fix that up real quick. 


Edit: I actually omitted a couple of key words. Oops.


@Idea

 

[Idea]

Not at all, lol. I'll fix that up real quick. 


Edit: I actually omitted a couple of key words. Oops.


@Idea

Phew, glad to hear

 

[Metalgeardude]

Nice

 

[GasMaskie]

So long as you retain the will to keep this Quest going, I'll respond with my votes for it.

 

[Count Gensokyo]

Thanks. Hopefully, I'm up to the challenge!


@GasMaskie