I need feedback on a comic i'm about to write

Spoodermanultra

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So, I had this idea. I haven't completed all the reference character sheets, but it's still an awesome idea. the comic's premise is pretty much summed up in the main character's sheet, so here you go.

WENDELL CHARLES

Species: Human

Age: 26, 20 during the end of WW2

Powers: Telekinesis, Mind-Reading, Extremely Detailed Memory, Telepathy, and the ability to speak/understand any language

Weaknesses: Static and loud noises weaken his psychic powers, cannot control metal, can only mind read people he can see, and he has a rather fragile bone structure.

Equipment: N/A

Fears: Reptilians, His war flashbacks

Likes: Aliens, Space, The Unknown

Dislikes: War, Creepy Images/Footage



History: Wendell Charles, ever since he was born in 1915, had a weak body and an off-the-grid father. His mother would never let him play outside, in fear he might get a broken bone or worse. Unfortunately, his soon-to-be abusive father was found and brought back home.



But then came the day his mother died of cancer. His father blamed Wendell for her death, yelling at him, but luckily, it never became physical. Fast forward a couple years, and his father sent him into military school. He was practically the opposite of the drill sergeants’ morals, often causing him to be yelled at even more. When WW2 rolled around, he was fighting, and boy did he fight. He was hit multiple times by bullets, somehow surviving every shot.



When he returned, Wendell was in a wheelchair. he had many bruises, and luckily his immobilization was only one week away from the end of the war. Despite his commitment to the Allied Powers, he hated every single second. The sound of static over the walkie-talkies as his teammates blew up, the haunting sound of marching troops, it was all so disgusting how humans could be so hateful.



Then, during and after the Roswell Incident, Wendell had a growing interest for aliens. In 1950, he was abducted by aliens called the “Eeb” Who ran experiments on him, but they never put him back on earth. They took him to their home planet, Eon. It was at about the same technology level as humans, only a little bit more primitive in some respects, and a bit more advanced in others.



An ancient sage gave Wendell access to his previously dormant psychic powers, just recently awakened by the experimentation. The sage taught him how to use it over the course of 6 earth months. However, due to his PTSD being triggered by static, the thought of bullets/gunfire, and loud noises, his powers were weakened by both his flashbacks and whenever these sounds came into importance.



But Wendell was still left with one question: Why? This was finally answered when his training was complete. The Sage said he saw him in a vision, of a man who would save existence itself from a great evil, named Tyrannto, and his followers. That man was Wendell. Tyrannto was currently dormant, but would awaken from his slumber every 100 years to try to devour the multiverse. He was stopped every time by the Sage, but this year, he was growing old. He would die a few moments before Tyrannto was summoned, as was prophesized on the 1,000th time.



Five weeks later, The sage died. And so, Tyrannto took his chance. Wendell succeeded in pushing him back, but this time, he did not go back into his ancient coma. He instead built himself a planet, orbiting around Eon, summoned his followers, and so the war began.
 

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