Character Critique Thread

[Alyxsandre]

heeeeyyyyyyy
so I did a thing, finally
Uh
Yeah
I do not apologize for the length
I hope to get Sundew (Valentin's) done tomorrow, but for now, here's Worm 8'D

-edited stuff-
Moved to a thread.
Rivero-Morales, V.

 

[The Fuzzy Pixel]

Natealie

The phone was just an example since I couldn't think of another complex thing. It was the first thing that came to my mind. It's not that it is too complex for her, but it wouldn't work due to it requiring electricity anyway.

Understanding is supposed to be the limitation of the more complex constructs. It doesn't always apply unless what she's creating is supposed to be a complex thing. Like in the phone example she'd need to know exactly how every single part works in order for her to be able to make a working version of it.

You caught me right before I went to bed so I hope I cleared that up.

I know the phone was just the example you thought of at the time but I'm going to stick with it for now.

So if it did have electricity put into it, this phone made of blood would work? That's about the crux of my problem with this idea. How does blood compute, or mimic the electrical functions of circuitry? If we're talking complex mechanical objects, like an old wind up clock with moving gears and no circuitry, then that's something I could understand an elemental super making since it's just a bunch of shapes stuffed together. Shapes that don't require their composition (blood in this case) to do something it wouldn't be able to do (like complex electronic processing). A phone requires so much more than moving shapes though; most of which isn't even mechanical like a clock gear.

I still don't feel like understanding is a real limitation. The description of this says she can even do shortcuts to bypass this. At what point does something become 'too complex' for her to make? She has an intelligence rating of 3 to represent her prodigious academic skills so she's far smarter than two thirds of the normal population by default. Her comprehension skills must be pretty high up there, so not understanding how components in a phone work or interact is only a temporary hurdle in my opinion. Limitations, especially for an S rank, should feel more concrete and, well, limiting for the character it's tied to?

 

[ChaosZereul]

Alyxsandre
I think the Superpower page might look a tad cleaner if you put the Break Down bits into a Spoiler, since they're not actual sub-powers. Other than that, I don't really know how to help as I'm relatively bad at balancing powers, so I'll leave that to others.

 

[Natealie]

Natealie


I know the phone was just the example you thought of at the time but I'm going to stick with it for now.

So if it did have electricity put into it, this phone made of blood would work? That's about the crux of my problem with this idea. How does blood compute, or mimic the electrical functions of circuitry? If we're talking complex mechanical objects, like an old wind up clock with moving gears and no circuitry, then that's something I could understand an elemental super making since it's just a bunch of shapes stuffed together. Shapes that don't require their composition (blood in this case) to do something it wouldn't be able to do (like complex electronic processing). A phone requires so much more than moving shapes though; most of which isn't even mechanical like a clock gear.

I still don't feel like understanding is a real limitation. The description of this says she can even do shortcuts to bypass this. At what point does something become 'too complex' for her to make? She has an intelligence rating of 3 to represent her prodigious academic skills so she's far smarter than two thirds of the normal population by default. Her comprehension skills must be pretty high up there, so not understanding how components in a phone work or interact is only a temporary hurdle in my opinion. Limitations, especially for an S rank, should feel more concrete and, well, limiting for the character it's tied to?

Ok to the first point I have an answer. If a phone requires specific materials in order for it to work in specific places that blood cannot mimic the properties of then it would not work. I actually do not know if it were possible or not myself, as Anise is much smarter than I am when it comes to electronics. But let's say mineral X is required to make something work. Anise would be able to make literally everything in the device, even making a replica of the mineral, but because it wouldn't be the actual mineral it would not function unless blood can replicate the properties of that mineral. If blood cannot, then she will be able to create the replica provided she knows how to make it, but it will be unable to function unless she can find to missing pieces out of the correct materials and incorporate them into the device.

In that example I see a battery being an issue for example. If she were to make the phone the battery wouldn't have the ability to hold a charge since it's blood. Therefore she would need to put an actual battery into the phone for it to work.

The clockwork thing you mentioned is much more akin to how Anise would like to do things like that. She can manipulate the shape and hardness of her blood and move it like she would an arm. But she cannot change its' physical properties for the most part.

I hope that clears it up. The phone was a really bad example so I apologize.

On to the second point, it really ties into the things you brought up with the first! Too complex isn't just her understanding of the object she's trying to create, but it's also limited by whether or not blood can replicate it. So even if she does understand it, there's still a chance that she may need additional materials to create a given item. I'll make a note of that on the sheet as well, thank you for having me think about that. I think I'll change that limitation to Understanding and Possibility to reflect how she still may need other materials depending on what she's making. It actually fits her quite well now that I think about it, so thank you for bringing it to my attention.

 

[Necessity4Fun]

Lady Midnight Instead of writing something in the tabs you're not using currently, leave them empty like so [Tab][/Tab] and they will remain in the code, but not show up in the post
That way you can come back to them anytime you want and edit information in once you have it >w<

I like Hitomi and the power seems pretty straightforward, I just think that maybe the Overheat limitation should get a little more description to it, it's a bit vague right now. As in, mention that raising her temperature a lot could get her dazed like the case of a bad fever and maybe potentially make her pass-out, something like that. It's nice to write the exact implications of limitations like that.

 

[The Fuzzy Pixel]

Ok to the first point I have an answer. If a phone requires specific materials in order for it to work in specific places that blood cannot mimic the properties of then it would not work. I actually do not know if it were possible or not myself, as Anise is much smarter than I am when it comes to electronics. But let's say mineral X is required to make something work. Anise would be able to make literally everything in the device, even making a replica of the mineral, but because it wouldn't be the actual mineral it would not function unless blood can replicate the properties of that mineral. If blood cannot, then she will be able to create the replica provided she knows how to make it, but it will be unable to function unless she can find to missing pieces out of the correct materials and incorporate them into the device.

In that example I see a battery being an issue for example. If she were to make the phone the battery wouldn't have the ability to hold a charge since it's blood. Therefore she would need to put an actual battery into the phone for it to work.

The clockwork thing you mentioned is much more akin to how Anise would like to do things like that. She can manipulate the shape and hardness of her blood and move it like she would an arm. But she cannot change its' physical properties for the most part.

I hope that clears it up. The phone was a really bad example so I apologize.

On to the second point, it really ties into the things you brought up with the first! Too complex isn't just her understanding of the object she's trying to create, but it's also limited by whether or not blood can replicate it. So even if she does understand it, there's still a chance that she may need additional materials to create a given item. I'll make a note of that on the sheet as well, thank you for having me think about that. I think I'll change that limitation to Understanding and Possibility to reflect how she still may need other materials depending on what she's making. It actually fits her quite well now that I think about it, so thank you for bringing it to my attention.

Okay yeah, that does clear it up for me. Thanks! It was my misunderstanding that her blood would be doing everything like the computing that had me scratching my head.

Understanding and Possibility sounds pretty good to me, too!

Only suggestion I have now is maybe use the clockwork example instead of the phone example in her sheet? Might be easier for people to visualize and conceptualize using an example that Anise can definitely make out of her blood and nothing else. If she gets all the tech to make a working phone later on though, that might be fun for her to explore IC?

 

[Natealie]

Okay yeah, that does clear it up for me. Thanks! It was my misunderstanding that her blood would be doing everything like the computing that had me scratching my head.

Understanding and Possibility sounds pretty good to me, too!

Only suggestion I have now is maybe use the clockwork example instead of the phone example in her sheet? Might be easier for people to visualize and conceptualize using an example that Anise can definitely make out of her blood and nothing else. If she gets all the tech to make a working phone later on though, that might be fun for her to explore IC?

I agree. It'll definitely be fun to explore. Especially since Anise would totally just do it just so that she can understand how.Whether she ever does it again or not is irrelevant to her! I think I'll keep the example for now though since I don't have the words to express the vision I have any other way. But once I figure out how to say it I'll edit the example. You meant clockwork things as an example of what she could make without outside materials correct?

 

[The Fuzzy Pixel]

I agree. It'll definitely be fun to explore. Especially since Anise would totally just do it just so that she can understand how.Whether she ever does it again or not is irrelevant to her! I think I'll keep the example for now though since I don't have the words to express the vision I have any other way. But once I figure out how to say it I'll edit the example. You meant clockwork things as an example of what she could make without outside materials correct?

Yep, just as a singular example of a complex item she could make with only her blood. It wouldn't be the only thing she could make, but it'd be something that might help as a simpler explanation to get the foundation of the idea out there.

 

[Natealie]

Yep, just as a singular example of a complex item she could make with only her blood. It wouldn't be the only thing she could make, but it'd be something that might help as a simpler explanation to get the foundation of the idea out there.

Ok. What do you think a good example of a clockwork item would be? Just like a clock? Or is there something more? My apologies but I'm having a hard time thinking of it.

 

[The Fuzzy Pixel]

Ok. What do you think a good example of a clockwork item would be? Just like a clock? Or is there something more? My apologies but I'm having a hard time thinking of it.

It doesn't have to be a clock specifically, but something that doesn't rely on electricity would be a good example. Like a bicycle, or an old typewriter, or even something like a rubik's cube. They all have moving parts that interact, but are moved mechanically instead of electrically.

 

[Natealie]

Updated the example.

 

[Alyxsandre]

Edited the spoiler stuff and added a TL ; DR

 

[Malikai]

Kingston, L

• Stats
• General
• Appearance
• Biography
• Relationships
• Superpower
• Skills and Flaws
• Tools & Weapons
• Gallery

• Heroism Statistics
  Aspect	Scale	Total
  Courage	▰▰▰▰▰▰▰▰▰	09
  Altruism	▰▰▰▰▰▰▰▱▱	07
  Order	▰▰▰▰▱▱▱▱▱	04
  Kindness	▰▰▰▰▰▰▱▱▱	06
  Proaction	▰▰▰▰▰▰▰▰▱	08
  Diplomacy	▰▰▰▰▰▰▱▱▱	06
  Composure	▰▰▰▰▰▰▰▰▰	09

  Ability Statistics
  Aspect	Scale	Total
  Health	▰▰▰▱▱▱▱▱▱	03
  Strength	▰▰▱▱▱▱▱▱▱	02
  Defense	▰▰▰▰▰▱▱▱▱	05
  Agility	▰▰▱▱▱▱▱▱▱	02
  Intelligence	▰▰▱▱▱▱▱▱▱	02
  Willpower	▰▰▰▰▱▱▱▱▱	04
  Energy	▰▰▰▰▰▰▰▰▰	09

• Full Name
  Leona Kingston
  
  Nicknames
  Leo,
  
  Codename
  "Hell, I never changed it from Static Shock or whatever did I? I feel like they should warn you that the code name is permanent, especially when giving you the option to assign it in High School..."
  
  Gender
  Female
  
  Age
  23
  
  Birthday
  February 25, 2017
  
  Rank
  S Rank
  
  Limiter
  Inactive; Level 4
  
  Role
  Part Vigilante/Commonwealth Resource
  
• Race
  Caucasian
  
  Hair
  Blonde
  
  Eyes
  Hazel Green
  
  Height
  5'07"
  
  Figure
  Lean, but with just a bit of muscle tone visible; 135 lbs.
  
  Notes
  Scars crisscrossing palms and hands
  Very faint scarring that resembles burns around mouth and eyes
  One aggressive scar situated on her right shoulder
  Tattoo on left ankle of a small cartoonish bolt of electricity dancing between iron bars
• Lenient
  Leo is a lot more willing than most to let mistakes and problems slide by. She doesn't hold grudges over inconsequential issues and even larger issues with people she's more willing to let go. Though this doesn't mean that she forgives everybody for everything. She certainly holds things over her family and she also understands why people would not be quite as forgiving as her. Still she is a lot more willing to let a mistake simply be a mistake.
  
  Confident/Brash
  Leona believes in herself an excessive amount. This belief leads to her feeling extremely confident and often also ties closely to the brash actions she takes. Such things like charging into protect somebody or moving to attack as soon as she can or whenever she believes she can. Though she does think out her attacks/actions she often relies on her instinct and quicker planning to help guide her.
  
  Positivity/Optimistic
  Leo is a very positive person by default. It's how she was raised and it's the value that she still holds by today. For better or worse Leo always approaches every situation with an optimistic idea in place and a need to look at the bright side. This can often be interpreted as childlike or unrealistic, but Leo likes to think that this allows her to consider the world a more comfortable place. People that tend to be more pessimistic are bound to hate the way she talks on subjects, not that that stops her from thinking in that way.
  
  Trouble Articulating Emotions
  It's not too strange given how often she remains positive and amicable that she would also find it fairly troubling to connect with people. She has a lot of trouble expressing emotions that aren't more positive ones, and she also has trouble understanding other people's emotions if they're not happy. This isn't to the point that she can't understand at all that somebody is mad or sad. It's more along the lines of her just not having any idea of what to say and how to feel about their emotions.
  
  History
  Leo was born in San Francisco on February 25, 2017. She was born to Johnathan and Maria Kingston, two former blue card supers that had decided to settle down. Though they were certainly not prolific in their activities as supers they were certainly active. Leona was told from a young age that she was bound to get powers, and so the day that she actually obtained them was not a surprise to any of her family. She was enlisted into training at a young age, before she was even fully in Middle School. It would become natural for her to be attending school throughout the weekday and go to TEPRO Facility 48 for an hour or two after school. During summers her days would be replaced by going to the school to further train her powers. By the time she was in her Sophomore year she had full control and understanding over her powers.
  
  It was during her early childhood years that she was crammed with the idea that she needed to keep smiling and that a frowning or neutral face was not a good look on somebody. Leo's parents hardly paid her any attention unless she was smiling or staying positive. Throughout her early childhood she thought this was a normal occurrence and even going into Middle School she felt this. The point that would help change this in her mind was also the point where she met her best friend, Hitomi Nakashima. Leona met Hitomi in middle school and although at first they didn't hit it off time let them grow closer and closer to each other. When Leo grew old enough to go where she wanted after her facility training she would often find herself heading over to Hitomi's house to spend more time with her and her parents. It was there that she grew closely attached to both Hitomi and her parents, and it was also while there that she saw how Hitomi didn't have to be always smiling or happy whenever she wanted attention. In fact they paid her attention however she was feeling, and that also included Leona. One particular time going home she was close to tears from the affection she had felt while over at their house.
  
  In between her frequent sleepovers at Hitomi's house Leona would go back to her parents house with further increasing doubt in the relationship she felt towards them. This relationship she had with her parents became even further strained after the birth of her younger sister, Heidi. Heidi was praised all the time, no matter how she acted. She could be throwing a huge hissy fit and still be treated like the queen of the house. It infuriated Leo, and she made an effort to stay away from Heidi as much as she could. Her parents always gushed about Heidi was such a perfect child, and after she obtained her powers Leo remembered her mother saying that she finally had a daughter she was proud of. It was the straw that broke the metaphorical camel's back, and Leo made up her mind that after High School she would move away and never look back.
  
  This left her with the difficulty of telling Hitomi of this move. Something that Leo was not looking forward to, especially with how connected she was feeling to Hitomi. Nonetheless she eventually brought it up to her, and before there could be a proper goodbye Leo left home and San Francisco. Her first stop was Las Vegas, where she managed to swindle somebody out of an RV. All it cost her was the graduation gift her grandma had given her which was a cool one thousand. After seeing the RV Leo quickly realized she had been robbed of her money, but she still kept the RV and kept on in high spirits. Since she had also graduated from Tepro Facility she had been given a blue card that was active throughout all of the United States. And so she decided to become a wandering Vigilante, going from town to town helping out where she could and earning a bit of money whenever she could as well.
  
  It was during her travels that she stopped a dog fighting ring in Chihuahua, Mexico. This area was out of her jurisdiction as a blue card holder, but since it was within a SASS protected area she was able to feign being a separate kind of agent for some time. One of the dogs that was in the ring appealed to her so much that she decided to keep him, naming Goliath because of his clear historical connection. Another person she met during her travels was the mysterious M.A.N.S.W.E.L.L. who had a name that still perplexes Leona. After helping them out with a problem in Montgomery, Alabama they remained one of Leo's frequent contacts and the person she goes to for help with suits first.
  
  That brings everything to present day, where during her leg of travels in Virginia she got an urgent call from a Commonwealth officer asking for her assistance in Baltimore. She took her RV and revved up to Baltimore, stopping to see a bit of D.C., before she arrived on May 1. Leo is ready to help out in Baltimore, unaware of the full gravity of the situation that is the Knights attack.
  
• Johnathan and Maria Kingston
  Leo's parents. Leo has a strained relationship with them now that she realizes how they treated her as a kid. She hasn't talked to them or seen them in five years.
  
  Heidi Kingston
  Leo's younger sister. She has the power of bending and manipulating metal. Leo disliked her growing up as she got treated as such a star while Leo was treated with such disrespect. Leo hasn't talked to her or seen her in five years.
  
  Hitomi Nakashima
  Leo's best friend in the whole world. Leo would make sure to spend as much time with her as she could throughout middle school and high school. Leo felt so strongly connected to Hitomi that she was ready to completely open up to her about her parents before she suddenly decided to leave San Francisco. Leo felt her feelings toward Hitomi change over the years, becoming a lot more strong. She felt that they were becoming especially good friends, and even her heart felt the same way as it beat even more around her. Leo started feeling the need to be around her and not just a want to be near her, along with the intense desire to protect her best friend. Leo feels terrible about leaving Hitomi without a proper goodbye, but she hopes that Hitomi has forgotten about this somehow and been able to find another friend in her leaving. She, like everyone else she knows in San Francisco, has not seen Hitomi in five years.
  
  Yeong-Ja and Yoshiro Nakashima
  Hitomi's parents. Leo got to know them both pretty well as she stayed over at Hitomi's place quite frequently. She considers them more parental to her than her actual parents were and she knows more about them than she does her own parents. It was the Nakashimas that showed her what a healthy family looked and acted like, and it was partly their fault that led to Leona realizing how she was treated by her parents. Not that Leona thinks that it's a bad thing she learned this, quite the contrary.
  
  M.A.N.S.W.E.L.L.
  Leo's contact in Montgomery, Alabama. She has never seen their real face or heard their real voice. The only name they've given her is this acronym. She has still not gotten an answer as to what the acronym stands for. They are pretty great at designing suits and although they usually ask for something in return Leo still ends up going to them.
  
  Goliath
  Leo's most faithful companion and a really lovable dog. He is a Great Dane that absolutely loves to run with Leo. Much to her exhaustion. Although she suspected that he wouldn't like living in a cramped RV the frequent trips outside likely help out his mood. Along with being fed a constant amount. Leo sometimes struggles to get the money together to feed him, but when it comes down to it she's always able to just cook up a bit more for herself and hand it off to him.
  
  
• NOTE: THIS POWER CONTAINS SOME STUFF THAT MIGHT BE CONSIDERED OFFENSIVE, IT IS NOT INTENDED AS SUCH BUT JUST BE WARNED
  
  (Ideas can be drawn to self-harm/cutting)​
  Electrical Reaction
  Leo has the power to generate/form electricity and to control its movements outside of her body. This can be something as simple as an electric bolt thrown or something more complicated like an arc of electricity. The way her power works is thanks to her blood. When her blood spills and either comes out of her arteries or veins it creates a certain reaction. This reaction changes every atom that touches her blood into shedding its electrons. This in turn forms plasma which creates a charge of electricity. Thus the more blood that meets air or whatever material it may be outside of the body the more electricity it creates.
  
  Electric Knitting/Formation: Far more simpler than it sounds Leo is able to link together electricity much like a chain-link fence. She can draw these connections to be tighter, so as to show less "holes" in between the links, or just let them be more open and spread out. This does not mean she can form anything complicated. The most complicated object she could possibly form would be a sword, and even then what would be the point of that? Most often going to be used to create walls or cages of electricity.
  Dulled By Repetition and Time: The electricity that courses back through Leo’s veins has shocked her pain nerves to the point that it would take a lot of healing, most definitely of a super kind, to even get it to half of what it was when she was a child. Thankfully, Leo does not really miss being able to feel pain. Well, at the very least she finds it pretty useful for her particular job. Whether it be enduring the pain of whatever a villain throws at her, withstanding the own cutting she does to herself, or to even just withstand the electricity leaving her body.
  
  
  Limitations​
  
  Water Is An Escape: Leo has to make sure 24/7 that she is not touching water of any kind. Water does not act as an entirely hindering factor, but it does put her completely out of control. Due to the reaction that creates the electricity she uses water is an especially good conductor. One small drop of blood can produce the equivalent power of a lightning bolt when it touches water. Salt water is even worse thanks to the ions it has. This means that beach days are not a great option for her, lest she want to exterminate the population of fish in miles every direction.
  
  Rubber Is A Wall, but not that bad of one: Rubber, much like with any other electricity, can stop the spread and conduction of Leo's electricity. Of course this doesn't mean the electricity just disappears, and it won't stop Leo from trying to just get rid of the rubber. It does still mean that Leo can't just push her electricity through anything. This concept applies to other insulators such as plastic and wood.
  
  Skin Is Not A Conductor: At least not her own skin. Even after Leo has gotten the electricity out and moving that doesn't mean she can just move it around the rest of her body. Her skin has no way of moving the electricity around and it could only be channeled if Leo was to just tear her skin along the path she wanted to take the electricity. Of course cutting a long line along something like your arms is not exactly a smart idea.
  
  Electricity Knitting Limitation: Leo can only create enough interlocked electricity to take up the space of a bus. This gives her quite a bit of creativity to form different shapes/formations of electricity. Though she likely could not create a wall much bigger than the city itself.
  
  Pain =/= Damage: Just because Leo dulls pain inflicted on her body does not mean that the damage is entirely gone. She might be able to keep standing even after losing large amounts of blood, but that does not mean that she will be completely healthy. Eventually the effects will catch up to her, later than most, but they will eventually stop her.
  
  Distance Limits: Leo can conduct her electricity to extreme lengths. Similar to how she can form electric barricades across the entire city she can send arcs of electricity comparable to lightning as far as her eyes can see. Of course she has to actually see something to be able to visualize the electricity coursing out to the object or person that she sees. Similarly the more powerful an action/the more electricity required would mean that it could travel across less of a distance.
  
• +Stitching: Leo is pretty skilled with a needle and string. Specifically using them to stitch her skin back together after a particularly rough battle. She gets a lot of practice for this.
  
  +Electrical Understanding: Leo has a fairly good understanding of how electricity works. She tends to use this information mainly when she's fighting, but she's found it useful outside of her work as well.
  
  +Fix-It-Up!: While she doesn't rely on this part of her skill set too often Leo is able to repair some various things. Those things being usually her costume/tools, basic electronics, and her RV. Her RV which happens to break down quite often.
  
  +Good With Dogs: This one is pretty obvious, but yeah, she's pretty great with dogs.
  
  +Combat Experience: Years on the road of being a part-time vigilante and Commonwealth operative have given her a fair bit of experience with combat situations. She won't panic at the idea of being in one, neither will she not know what to do.
  
  +Great Horseback Rider: A fun activity that Leo took while travelling throughout Arizona and the Southern states was riding horses. She became pretty skilled at it, although she doesn't find too much use for it on a daily basis.
  
  -Bad Publicity: Leo is not known for holding back on environmental damage when she fights. This has given her a slightly notorious reputation as a super/vigilante for those that keep up with that particular kind of news. It also doesn't help that Leo is bad at giving public statements.
  
  -Lazy: Not to the point of it being a serious problem, but Leo is a fairly lazy person. If it's not related more directly to her personal directive or to her job she's unlikely to be in a rush to do it.
  
  -Fear of Rats: "Wait, you need an explanation for this one? Seriously? How can you not be scared of them? They're creepy little plague monsters. Plus they can fit into tinier spaces easier. Or was that Mice? Either way they're both creepy and I don't want to see them."
  
  -Fear of the Ocean: Leo has a natural right to fear the ocean, after all just being dropped into it could kill millions of fish. Not to mention likely killing her, as she can't swim.
  
  -Can't Swim: Bet you couldn't see this one coming, huh? This isn't a thing of, 'Not sure on the specifics' this is full blown 'I can not swim.' Leo would likely immediately start sinking and flailing her arms around. Good luck to the life guard who tries to save her. Hope you brought your rubber suit.
  
• Silver Lined Gloves: [Tool] Thanks to her close associate in Montgomery, Alabama she has a way to access professionally made super suits for far less the cost that others have to pay. Of course this usually means she has to trade them favors which often involve quick mercenary jobs. It is worth it, as items like her gloves are well made and easily transportable. Her gloves have silver circles on the finger tips that if pressed together push a small pin into her skin to draw blood. They also have silver lining down her fingers and coalescing on her palms. This allows her to spread electricity easily along her hands, and also down into her suit.
  
  Silver Lined Suit: [Suit] Leo's commonly worn suit that after producing electricity allows her to run it all along her body. The suit is fairly simple material that doesn't hold up well against anything above a dull knife. It is lined with silver from her neckline, on her shoulders and along her arms, to her gloves, down her spine and her chest, and wraps around her legs leading to her boots.
  
  Silver Sole/Toed Boots: [Shoes] A pair of boots that Leo is always wearing, as they are essentially just her shoes. They contain silver that runs from the tops of her toes to the very back of her soles. She has a sharp edge that can draw blood on the inside of her shoes, but it's not placed in an obvious way so that it doesn't just draw blood every time she walks.
  
  Push Pin/Pocket Knife: [Tool] Oh it';s impractical, but it's also really effective at getting blood out. Leo carries this around 24/7, and if she doesn't have her suit she makes do with this small object. It's shape is similar to most pocket knives with the added benefit of having a smaller attachment for if she just wants to get some blood out.
  
  Copper Wire: [Tool] For if Leo needs to expertly channel her electricity. Not that she can't do that usually, but some jobs need absolute certainty. She carries around five feet of this very thin wire with her.
  
  "Worn-In" RV: [Vehicle] Leo's preferred method of transportation. Comes with a simple double bed, refrigerator, a few cabinets, a very small table, and a very small and cramped bathroom.
  
• Spoiler: Themes, In order of her life

  
  
  
  
  
  Spoiler: Goliath

  
  Spoiler: What the RV kind of looks like, but with some liberties taken

  
  
  

 

[The J]

Malikai you may want to note that the plasma produced would probably be very very hot, especially if it can sustain itself in air.

 

[Gus]

Not necessarily so, J. Normally, plasma is hot. But that is because high temperature is the only way to get electrons to have high enough kinetic energy to disassociate from the potential well of the nucleus. The way I am understanding the power though, the blood acts like a catalyst, allowing the electrons to escape at low energy levels.

 

[The J]

Not necessarily so, J. Normally, plasma is hot. But that is because high temperature is the only way to get electrons to have high enough kinetic energy to disassociate from the potential well of the nucleus. The way I am understanding the power though, the blood acts like a catalyst, allowing the electrons to escape at low energy levels.

It sounds like it's just arcing the air due to its electrical nature, but I guess that works too.

 

[welian]

Natealie I've got a few questions!

• How much is too much blood? What volume of blood can she safely remove from herself?
• What happens when she uses too much blood?
• Do her constructs have a time limit? Are they affected by water? Air?
• What makes her an S rank, instead of a C or B rank?

 

[Natealie]

Natealie I've got a few questions!

• How much is too much blood? What volume of blood can she safely remove from herself?
• What happens when she uses too much blood?
• Do her constructs have a time limit? Are they affected by water? Air?
• What makes her an S rank, instead of a C or B rank?

Did you read the first sheet or second one? I updated the second one and it's the current since I used an old layout for the first. I didn't want to get rid of the work I already did though.

I'm afraid I don't have exact numbers for how much is too much or how much can be safely removed from her, but that's because I don't know how much blood a 14 year old girl has offhand.

If she uses too much blood she'll pass out from blood loss. At which point the constructs she has out will become liquid again and she'll be completely vulnerable.

The constructs have no time limit and are unaffected by air or water. And there is no limit to how many she can have out at a time as long as she allows her blood to replenish. That's why she's an s rank. Not for sheer power but versitility.

 

[welian]

ChaosZereul if you haven't already, could you add approximate size (meters or feet, doesn't matter) of Zayne's barrier?

Natealie I completely ignored the original sheet, I assume that an edited version will contain the same base info as the original.

 

[ChaosZereul]

welian It's mentioned at the bottom of the first paragraph, the barrier can be expanded to roughly 12 feet in diameter and is shaped like a sphere. It also doesn't need to be expanded to work, it originally starts out coating his body. Sorry if I worded it poorly.

 

[Natealie]

ChaosZereul if you haven't already, could you add approximate size (meters or feet, doesn't matter) of Zayne's barrier?

Natealie I completely ignored the original sheet, I assume that an edited version will contain the same base info as the original.

Ok. Sorry about the confusion. The answers I provided are still what I stand by in that case.

 

[welian]

Ok. Sorry about the confusion. The answers I provided are still what I stand by in that case.

Humor me... how much does she weigh?

 

[Natealie]

Humor me... how much does she weigh?

I just googled the average so 105 pounds.

 

[welian]

I just googled the average so 105 pounds.

Based on really rough math, she would have about one gallon of blood in her body, total.

"According to the American College of Surgeons’ Advanced Trauma Life Support (ATLS), hemorrhaging can be divided into four classifications of severity. The first class is the least severe, concerning a hemorrhage equal to or lesser than 15 percent of the body’s total blood volume. For reference, when a person donates blood, about eight to 10 percent of the body’s blood is removed. There are generally no symptoms of blood loss at this point, though some may feel slightly faint.

A Class 2 hemorrhage is a loss of 15 to 30 percent of blood volume. This is where symptoms of blood loss begin to manifest. “The body tries to compensate at this point with, among other things, a faster heartbeat to speed oxygen to tissues,” Alton said. “The patient will feel weak, appear pale, and skin will be cool.”

The next level of blood loss occurs with the Class 3 hemorrhage, which references loss of 30 to 40 percent of total blood volume. This could be around 3 to 4 pints of blood, for those keeping track. Blood transfusion is usually necessary with a hemorrhage of this magnitude, according to Alton.

“At this point, the heart will be beating very quickly and is straining to get enough oxygen to tissues,” he said. “Blood pressure drops. Smaller blood vessels are constricting to keep the body core circulation going.”

The final classification of hemorrhaging, Class 4, occurs when a person loses over 40 percent of their blood volume. A hemorrhage so severe requires immediate and major resuscitative help, or else the strain on the body’s circulatory system will be too great to survive. The heart will no longer be able to maintain blood pressure and circulation, Alton said, so organs will fail and the patient will slip into a comatose state preceding death.

This condition is called hypovolemic shock, and the prognosis depends on many factors, including the amount of blood lost, the rate at which a patient is losing it, and the illness or injury underlying the blood loss."

There's some straight-up ignoring we can do for the sake of looking cool as shit, but I still think you should add in some limitations based on how much blood she has, and how tired she would be afterward - and if there's consequences for not using her power often enough, etc.

 

[Gus]

Based on really rough math, she would have about one gallon of blood in her body, total.

"According to the American College of Surgeons’ Advanced Trauma Life Support(ATLS), hemorrhaging can be divided into four classifications of severity. The first class is the least severe, concerning a hemorrhage equal to or lesser than 15 percent of the body’s total blood volume. For reference, when a person donates blood, about eight to 10 percent of the body’s blood is removed. There are generally no symptoms of blood loss at this point, though some may feel slightly faint.

A Class 2 hemorrhage is a loss of 15 to 30 percent of blood volume. This is where symptoms of blood loss begin to manifest. “The body tries to compensate at this point with, among other things, a faster heartbeat to speed oxygen to tissues,” Alton said. “The patient will feel weak, appear pale, and skin will be cool.”

The next level of blood loss occurs with the Class 3 hemorrhage, which references loss of 30 to 40 percent of total blood volume. This could be around 3 to 4 pints of blood, for those keeping track. Blood transfusion is usually necessary with a hemorrhage of this magnitude, according to Alton.

“At this point, the heart will be beating very quickly and is straining to get enough oxygen to tissues,” he said. “Blood pressure drops. Smaller blood vessels are constricting to keep the body core circulation going.”

The final classification of hemorrhaging, Class 4, occurs when a person loses over 40 percent of their blood volume. A hemorrhage so severe requires immediate and major resuscitative help, or else the strain on the body’s circulatory system will be too great to survive. The heart will no longer be able to maintain blood pressure and circulation, Alton said, so organs will fail and the patient will slip into a comatose state preceding death.

This condition is called hypovolemic shock, and the prognosis depends on many factors, including the amount of blood lost, the rate at which a patient is losing it, and the illness or injury underlying the blood loss."

There's some straight-up ignoring we can do for the sake of looking cool as shit, but I still think you should add in some limitations based on how much blood she has, and how tired she would be afterward - and if there's consequences for not using her power often enough, etc.

Natealie

I feel like however powerful the constructs are, this does not make sense as an S class power if the maximal volume of the construct is a quart and a half. What if she could control any blood that her blood touched though? (So not blood inside another person, but once it was out of them, she could co-opt it for constructs.) This would raise the power level dramatically, and frighteningly. The worse a massacre became, the more powerful she would be, but at horrific cost.