Can I interest you in trading feedback for feedback? Since your piece is substantial I'd like to commit some time to make more detailed notes via Google Docs but I wouldn't go ahead with it without checking that's what you were looking for.
Is it possible to link to a google doc or some other sharing service? Because that's a wall of text at the moment and a comment link could really help make it more easy to read.
Shall give other people a chance to respond/ join in. But for now, assume that Iryz doesn't notice what he's saying, but if manage to get her attention she'll likely get Flame Face out again.
Iryz didn’t know how long it took before the lizard nudged her back into realisation.
“Mumphs puff humpf.” It’s mouth stuffed with coins. Iryz offered an open pouch for the lizard to spit them out into with a jangling. “Much obliged, now I’ve managed to find you some room in the stables for the...
It had been a pretty productive day so far. Iryz wasn’t exactly fond of how densely forested the surroundings were, preferring to be out in the open. But if that was where one went to be ambushed so be it. Unfortunately, the bandits had barely had anything good on them. The weapons she’d looted...
I'll trade you a free copy of a collection of short stories I wrote for a piece of art/music whatever you feel like making based on one of the stories?
I'll even throw in a free platitude if you act withing the remaining lifetime of the universe.
Or more specifically, would you be interested...
Thanks for being complicit
I wrote some short stories and one of them is here for free. (If anyone want an example of my writing to see how I'd be as a roleplay person).
https://www.rpnation.com/threads/short-story-and-a-vote-for-the-next-story-to-be-published.340168/