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Futuristic The Desire System

TheJipan

The phone master
All accepted Characters will be archived under the Overview tab.


These current roles are still available:


The Desireless


The Unknown


The Objectioner


The Strongest


The Supporter


The Defender


The Hunter


The Detective


You can find the meaning of these roles in the Overview. If there's another role you want that isn't listed here, then go over to the OCC or PM me about it, and I'll consider adding your suggestion.


Below, you will find the code skeleton for your character profile. Just copy and paste it, then start filling in the sections!

Code:
[size=5][b]Role:[/b][/size] [size=4]<Role title>[/size]

[size=5][b]Name:[/b][/size] [size=4]<Name>[/size]

[size=5][b]Gender:[/b][/size] [size=4]<Male or Female>[/size]

[size=5][b]Age:[/b][/size] [size=4]<Somewhere between 16 and 46 should be fine, ask if you want to try something else>[/size]

[size=5][b]Sexuality:[/b][/size] [size=4]<Heterosexual, Bisexual, Homosexual>[/size]

[size=5][b]Career:[/b][/size] [size=4]<A job that exists now or may exist in the near future. Make sure it links with your desire.>[/size]

[size=5][b]Appearance[/b][/size]
[size=4][b]Body Type:[/b][/size] [size=3]<Are they big and bulky? Tall and lanky?>[/size]
[size=4][b]Height:[/b][/size] [size=3]<Somewhere between 5" and 6"4'. Ask if you'd like something different>[/size]
[size=4][b]Weight:[/b][/size] [size=3]<Please don't make them morbidly obese or severely underweight without asking about it first>[/size]
[size=4][b]Hair:[/b][/size] [size=3]<Colour, length and style>[/size]
[size=4][b]Skin colour:[/b][/size] [size=3]<An existing skin colour, please>[/size]
[size=4][b]Usual clothes:[/b][/size] [size=3]<What they normally wear>[/size]
[size=4][b]Distinguishing features:[/b][/size] [size=3]<Things you notice about someone, like scars or birthmarks>[/size]
[size=4][b]General:[/b][/size] [size=3]<Either use an image, or give a description>[/size]

[size=5][b]Personality[/b][/size]
[size=4][b]Personality type:[/b][/size] [size=3]<you might want to Google this one>[/size]
[size=4][b]Introvert/Extrovert:[/b][/size] [size=3]<Do they like being with people or alone?>[/size]
[size=4][b]Habits:[/b][/size] [size=3]<those little quirks that people have>[/size]
[size=4][b]Talents/Skills:[/b][/size] [size=3]<Outside of combat>[/size]
[size=4][b]Pessimist/Optimist:[/b][/size] [size=3]<Glass half empty or glass half full?>[/size]
[size=4][b]Character Flaws:[/b][/size] [size=3]<The things that make people human>[/size]
[size=4][b]Character Strengths:[/b][/size] [size=3]<The good side of their personality>[/size]
[size=4][b]Character weaknesses:[/b][/size] [size=3]<the bad side of their personality>[/size]
[size=4][b]General:[/b][/size] [size=3]<Write a short paragraph about their personality>[/size]

[size=5][b]Combat[/b][/size]
[size=4][b]Skills:[/b][/size] [size=3]<Combat specific>[/size]
[size=4][b]Weapons/Style:[/b][/size] [size=3]<Do they use guns? Or maybe karate?>[/size]
[size=4][b]Strengths:[/b][/size] [size=3]<once again, combat specific>[/size]
[size=4][b]Weaknesses:[/b][/size] [size=3]<things that can be exploited in a fight>[/size]
[size=4][b]General:[/b][/size] [size=3]<Write a short paragraph about how your character fights>[/size]

[size=5][b]Desires[/b][/size]<Doesn't apply for the Desireless>
[size=4][b]Primary desire:[/b][/size] [size=3]<their strongest desire, which define their career>[/size]
[size=4][b]Desire strength:[/b][/size] [size=3][- - - - - - - - - - -][/size]
[size=4][b]Secondary desire:[/b][/size] [size=3]<a second desire, if they have one, which might have some effect in their career>[/size]
[size=4][b]Desire strength:[/b][/size] [size=3][- - - - - - - - - -][/size]
[size=4][b]Attraction:[/b][/size] [size=3]<Describe, in General terms, the sort of person your character would want to have a relationship with>[/size]

Just post your profile in this tab, and I will reply to it saying whether there's anything wrong with it, and telling you what you can improve, and, finally, when it's accepted.
 
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This is what the skeleton looks like when posted properly.





Role: <Role title>


Name: <Name>


Gender: <Male or Female>


Age: <Somewhere between 16 and 46 should be fine, ask if you want to try something else>


Sexuality: <Heterosexual, Bisexual, Homosexual>


Career: <A job that exists now or may exist in the near future. Make sure it links with your desire.>


Appearance


Body Type: <Are they big and bulky? Tall and lanky?>


Height: <Somewhere between 5" and 6"4'. Ask if you'd like something different>


Weight: <Please don't make them morbidly obese or severely underweight without asking about it first>


Hair: <Colour, length and style>


Skin colour: <An existing skin colour, please>


Usual clothes: <What they normally wear>


Distinguishing features: <Things you notice about someone, like scars or birthmarks>


General: <Either use an image, or give a description>


Personality


Personality type: <you might want to Google this one>


Introvert/Extrovert: <Do they like being with people or alone?>


Habits: <those little quirks that people have>


Talents/Skills: <Outside of combat>


Pessimist/Optimist: <Glass half empty or glass half full?>


Character Flaws: <The things that make people human>


Character Strengths: <The good side of their personality>


Character weaknesses: <the bad side of their personality>


General: <Write a short paragraph about their personality>


Combat


Skills: <Combat specific>


Weapons/Style: <Do they use guns? Or maybe karate?>


Strengths: <once again, combat specific>


Weaknesses: <things that can be exploited in a fight>


General: <Write a short paragraph about how your character fights>


Desires<Doesn't apply for the Desireless>


Primary desire: <their strongest desire, which define their career>


Desire strength: [- - - - - - - - - - -]


Secondary desire: <a second desire, if they have one, which might have some effect in their career>


Desire strength: [- - - - - - - - - -]


Attraction: <Describe, in General terms, the sort of person your character would want to have a relationship with>
 
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Name:


Phenex black



Gender:



Male



Age:



17



Sexual orientation:



Heterosexual



Job:



Assassin



Appearance:



Body type:



built



Height:



5'11



Weight:



120lbs



Hair:



Black/long/messy



Skin color:



White



Usual clothing:



In pic



Distinguished features:



Gas mask on face



Personality:



Personality type:



Estp (the doer)



Introvert/extrovert:



Introvert



Habits:



Plays with a blade in his hand when bored



Talents/skills:



Mechanic, medic.



Pessimistic/optimistic:



Optimistic



Character flaws:



Silent



Blunt



And loves sweets



Character strengths:



Assassination



Level headed



Smart



Quick thinking



Character weakness:



Sweets (loves them)



Being under to much pressure



General:



Phenex is a person that's usually quiet and alone he usually thinks about the good side and can think fast during combat he usually is quiet so people don't notice him that much and he always spotted eating candy.



Combat:



Skills:



Close combat, long range combat, and assassinations



Weapon style:



Uses blades most of time uses guns when the time comes



Strengths:



Thinking



Blades



Guns



Assassinations



Weakness:



Heavy weapons



And choppers


Desires:


Primary desires:



Best assassin there is



Desire strength:



High



Secondary desire:



Having all weapons



Desire strength:



Low



Attraction:



Phenex is attracted to someone that can fight and not give ground and that will die for what they believe in and loves mystirios people like him.






 

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Role: Desireless


Name: Evan 'Cika' Youvenne


Gender: Male


Age: 19


Sexuality: Bisexual


Career: Direless


Appearance


Body Type: Skinny


Height: 69.9 Inches


Weight: 156.8 Pounds


Hair: Black, Just above the neck, scruffy and usually not fixed.


Skin colour: Light Pale


Usual clothes: Hoodies, Jackets, Cargo Pants and anything else he can find.


Distinguishing features: Bullet wound on his left hip.


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Personality


Personality type: ENTJ


Introvert/Extrovert: Both


Habits: Exploring


Talents/Skills: Free-running, Cooking, Art, Combat.


Pessimist/Optimist: Optimist


Character Flaws: Over-thinks too much.


Character Strengths: Imaginative and creates really bad/good plans.


Character weaknesses: Over-thinks too much and often makes the dumbest plans yet.


General: Evan is a an unpredictable, witty kind of guy. You'll probably never expect what he brings to the table and he often thinks smart or stupid but it really doesn't matter because he'll bring a really bad plan on the table so expect something really bad or stupid.


Combat


Skills: Close Combat and Sneaking.


Weapons/Style: Evan uses guns for his specific type of fighting style but he sometimes carries a dagger and a silenced pistol.


Strengths: Fast, Unpredictable, Witty


Weaknesses: Weak, Long Range Combat


General: Evan is a sneaky kind of guy, he'll hide in a vent, stay behind the door and wait until someone comes out. His combat style includes using guns to pike or shoot someone closely or use it to duck n' gun.


Desires


Primary desire: Desireless


Desire strength: Desireless


Secondary desire: Desireless


Desire strength: Desireless


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Aqua said:

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Name:


Phenex black



Gender:



Male



Age:



17



Sexual orientation:



Heterosexual



Job:



Assassin



Appearance:



Body type:



built



Height:



5'11



Weight:



120lbs



Hair:



Black/long/messy



Akin color:



White



Usual clothing:



In pic



Distinguished features:



Gas mask on face



Personality:



Personality type:



Estp (the doer)



Introvert/extrovert:



Introvert



Habits:



Plays with a blade in his hand when bored



Talents/skills:



Mechanic, medic.



Pessimistic/optimistic:



Optimistic



Character flaws:



Silent



Blunt



And loves sweets



Character strengths:



Assassination



Weapons



Combat



Quick thinking



Character weakness:



Sweets (loves them)



Being outnumbered



And heavy guns



General:



Phenex is a person that's usually quiet and alone he usually thinks about the good side and can think fast during combat he usually is quiet so people don't notice him that much and he always spotted eating candy.



Combat:



Skills:



Close combat, long range combat, and assassinations



Weapon style:



Uses blades most of time uses guns when the time comes



Strengths:



Thinking



Blades



Guns



Assassinations



Weakness:



Heavy weapons



And choppers


Desires:


Primary desires:



Killing the person in charge of this palace



Desire strength:



High



Secondary desire:



Having all weapons



Desire strength:



Low



Attraction:



Phenex is attracted to someone that can fight and not give ground and that will die for what they believe in and loves mystirios people like him.




Please use the skeleton I posted for your character profile.


 


Noyeh said:
Role: Desireless
Name: Evan 'Cika' Youvenne


Gender: Male


Age: 19


Sexuality: Bisexual


Career: Someone who gets rid of obstacles and difficulties.


Appearance


Body Type: Skinny


Height: 69.9 Inches


Weight: 156.8 Pounds


Hair: Black, Just above the neck, scruffy and usually not fixed.


Skin colour: Light Pale


Usual clothes: Hoodies, Jackets, Cargo Pants and anything else he can find.


Distinguishing features: Bullet wound on his left hip.


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Personality


Personality type: ENTJ


Introvert/Extrovert: Both


Habits: Exploring


Talents/Skills: Parkour, Cooking, Art, Combat.


Pessimist/Optimist: Optimist


Character Flaws: Over-thinks too much.


Character Strengths: Imaginative and creates really bad/good plans.


Character weaknesses: Over-thinks too much and often makes the dumbest plans yet.


General: Evan is a an unpredictable, witty kind of guy. You'll probably never expect what he brings to the table and he often thinks smart or stupid but it really doesn't matter because he'll bring a really bad plan on the table so expect something really bad or stupid.


Combat


Skills: Close Combat and Sneaking.


Weapons/Style: Evan uses guns for his specific type of fighting style but he sometimes carries a dagger and a silenced pistol.


Strengths: Fast, Unpredictable, Witty


Weaknesses: Weak, Long Range Combat


General: Evan is a sneaky kind of guy, he'll hide in a vent, stay behind the door and wait until someone comes out. His combat style includes using guns to pike or shoot someone closely or use it to duck n' gun.


Desires


Primary desire: Desireless


Desire strength: Desireless


Secondary desire: Desireless


Desire strength: Desireless


Attraction: Evan will take anyone, he doesn't care about status or strength, just that he can have a good life.
Looking good so far! Just a couple of things: the first being that the Desireless wouldn't have a career because the system wouldn't know where to put them (which I probably should have put in the skeleton) and the second being a few typos and formatting, which I fixed for you.
 
Role: The Strongest


Name: Geiss Fliegel (Ghe-ass, Flu-ghel)


Gender: Male


Age: 20


Sexuality: Heterosexual


Career: [Error/No Career]


Appearance


Body Type:
Geiss isn't the tallest, or shortest person most people would know, and possesses a fine strength. He's no real marvel, though, and can be considered to be a fairly average guy when it comes to body build.


Height: 5'6"


Weight: 169


Hair: Geiss' hair is long, falling down to his lower neck, and has a mesmerizing shine and silkiness to it. He keeps it wild, but at least tends to his bangs, to which he brushes a few times flowing towards the right side of his face. His hair color is raven black.


Skin colour: White.


Usual clothes: If not his favorite black jacket, jeans, and a black t-shirt, Geiss is almost always wearing a suit and tie. Not only does he believe them to be comfortable, but he believes that he is to be completely business if anyone is to take him seriously. (Even though he doesn't have a career. His suit and tie is probably his most prized possession, other then his mind)


Distinguishing features: His eyes often unsettle people, and give him an edge when it comes to persuasion. There's a small scar across his nose, but it's more like some sort of crease.


General:


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Personality


Personality type:
INTJ


Introvert/Extrovert: Introvert


Habits: Has a knack for correcting people, whether it be in their logic or simply the way they speak. He likes to doodle when he thinks, and is a good artist at that. Sometimes, Geiss likes to speak to himself, as a way of thinking easily. His biggest habit is being shady for no particular reason, disliking it when people inquire on what he's doing.


Talents/Skills: Geiss is very good at persuasion and manipulation, having a natural aura of reason about his character. He's a very good cook, artist, and dancer at that, picking up most of these talents due to his undeniable connection to his mother.


Pessimist/Optimist: Optimist


Character Flaws: He tends to miscalculate, and get carried away.


Character Strengths: He isn't afraid to sacrifice everything, for everything. Geiss possesses a very high level of intelligence and quick-wit, making up for his lack of particularly extraordinary combat skills or physical build. He possesses an iron will.


Character Weaknesses: He tends to miscalculate, and get carried away when he comes up with plans. He isn't that good of a fighter, and lacks any sort of trust with people besides his mother. He lacks a sense of moral code, but this isn't necessarily a flaw, including the fact that his mother is indeed deceased. He also often thinks that he's invincible, especially in the worst of times. Geiss loves to gamble.


General: Geiss was the person at school who turned their test in first, without trying, and got a very good grade on it (if he didn't ace it). He seemed to care about what you'd tell him, albeit for completely different reasons. He made every situation turn into his favor, and caused drama for shits and giggles. The person who always seemed like they were either daydreaming or thinking, and could easily scare someone if they got in their way. Geiss was that person, the optimistic and intelligent elite who was always thinking ahead.


Combat


Skills:
Fencing, Quick,


Weapons/Style: Geiss is very skilled with the butterfly knife he usually keeps on him, which he mixes with a mixed form of karate. He likes to trip during fights, and often fights in a turn-based style, letting out all he has in an attack before automatically switching to the defensive, in which he'll fall back and parry. Geiss can also mix this fighting style with a rapier he owns, but he keeps it stored away.


Strengths: Geiss uses his speed to his advantage in most battles, but doesn't forget to also include his mental power as well. He often sees opportunities to strike when others wouldn't, and, mixing this with his speed, can exploit those openings quickly. When Geiss is taking a beating, however, he has a rather high pain tolerance.


Weaknesses: Geiss likes to often underestimate his foe. Not only this, but Geiss has a tendency to bump into things, as his fighting style requires a lot of movement. This means that closed areas are the absolute worst fighting location for Geiss. Geiss doesn't have the greatest endurance.


General: Geiss likes to jump around, and go in for a quick strike when he can, letting out volleys of attacks at once. After going for multiple hits, he'll pull out and prepare to go on the defensive. On the defensive, he often parries or dodges, often moving, but not too much, as his goal is to recover for another attack. Geiss uses the environment to his advantage, and will analyze his weaknesses and strengths in certain environments when he enters them. Using this knowledge, Geiss will often make unpredictable movements or attacks, only for them to be extremely effective when applied to the nearby area.


Desires


Primary desire: To be immortal.


Desire strength: 11


Secondary desire: To help guide humanity to a great future.


Desire strength: 10


Attraction: Someone who could get him what he wants, no matter how difficult it would prove to be.
 
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SirFlabberghaspy said:
Role: The Strongest
Name: Geiss Fliegel (Ghe-ass, Flu-ghel)


Gender: Male


Age: 20


Sexuality: Heterosexual


Career: [Error/No Career]


Appearance


Body Type:
Geiss isn't the tallest, or shortest person most people would know, and possesses a fine strength. He's no real marvel, though, and can be considered to be a fairly average guy when it comes to body build.


Height: 5'6"


Weight: 169


Hair: Geiss' hair is long, falling down to his lower neck, and has a mesmerizing shine and silkiness to it. He keeps it wild, but at least tends to his bangs, to which he brushes a few times flowing towards the right side of his face. His hair color is raven black.


Skin colour: White.


Usual clothes: If not his favorite black jacket, jeans, and a black t-shirt, Geiss is almost always wearing a suit and tie. Not only does he believe them to be comfortable, but he believes that he is to be completely business if anyone is to take him seriously. (Even though he doesn't have a career. His suit and tie is probably his most prized possession, other then his mind)


Distinguishing features: His eyes often unsettle people, and give him an edge when it comes to persuasion. There's a small scar across his nose, but it's more like some sort of crease.


General:


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Personality


Personality type:
INTJ


Introvert/Extrovert: Introvert


Habits: Has a knack for correcting people, whether it be in their logic or simply the way they speak. He likes to doodle when he thinks, and is a good artist at that. Sometimes, Geiss likes to speak to himself, as a way of thinking easily. His biggest habit is being shady for no particular reason, disliking it when people inquire on what he's doing.


Talents/Skills: Geiss is very good at persuasion and manipulation, having a natural aura of reason about his character. He's a very good cook, artist, and dancer at that, picking up most of these talents due to his undeniable connection to his mother.


Pessimist/Optimist: Optimist


Character Flaws: He tends to miscalculate, and get carried away.


Character Strengths: He isn't afraid to sacrifice everything, for everything. Geiss possesses a very high level of intelligence and quick-wit, making up for his lack of particularly extraordinary combat skills or physical build. He possesses an iron will.


Character Weaknesses: He tends to miscalculate, and get carried away when he comes up with plans. He isn't that good of a fighter, and lacks any sort of trust with people besides his mother. He lacks a sense of moral code, but this isn't necessarily a flaw, including the fact that his mother is indeed deceased. He also often thinks that he's invincible, especially in the worst of times. Geiss loves to gamble.


General: Geiss was the person at school who turned their test in first, without trying, and got a very good grade on it (if he didn't ace it). He seemed to care about what you'd tell him, albeit for completely different reasons. He made every situation turn into his favor, and caused drama for shits and giggles. The person who always seemed like they were either daydreaming or thinking, and could easily scare someone if they got in their way. Geiss was that person, the optimistic and intelligent elite who was always thinking ahead.


Combat


Skills:
Fencing, Quick,


Weapons/Style: Geiss is very skilled with the butterfly knife he usually keeps on him, which he mixes with a mixed form of karate. He likes to trip during fights, and often fights in a turn-based style, letting out all he has in an attack before automatically switching to the defensive, in which he'll fall back and parry. Geiss can also mix this fighting style with a rapier he owns, but he keeps it stored away.


Strengths: Geiss uses his speed to his advantage in most battles, but doesn't forget to also include his mental power as well. He often sees opportunities to strike when others wouldn't, and, mixing this with his speed, can exploit those openings quickly. When Geiss is taking a beating, however, he has a rather high pain tolerance.


Weaknesses: Geiss likes to often underestimate his foe. Not only this, but Geiss has a tendency to bump into things, as his fighting style requires a lot of movement. This means that closed areas are the absolute worst fighting location for Geiss. Geiss doesn't have the greatest endurance.


General: Geiss likes to jump around, and go in for a quick strike when he can, letting out volleys of attacks at once. After going for multiple hits, he'll pull out and prepare to go on the defensive. On the defensive, he often parries or dodges, often moving, but not too much, as his goal is to recover for another attack. Geiss uses the environment to his advantage, and will analyze his weaknesses and strengths in certain environments when he enters them. Using this knowledge, Geiss will often made unpredictable movements or attacks, only for them to be extremely effective when applied to the nearby area.


Desires


Primary desire: To be immortal.


Desire strength: 11


Secondary desire: To help guide humanity to a great future.


Desire strength: 10


Attraction: Someone who could get him what he wants, no matter how difficult it would prove to be.
Brilliant! You're character is accepted.
 
(Please let me know if any of this needs editing. I wrote it while kind of busy.)


Role: The Detective


Name: Olivia Fitzgerald


Gender: Female


Age: 18


Sexuality: Heterosexual


Career: Detective for hire


Appearance


Body Type: Healthy build


Height: 5’3”


Weight: 115 lbs.


Hair: Long and black with bangs


Skin Color: Healthy, but pale color


Usual Clothes: Unlike the tight skirt and blazer that she wears on duty, Olivia typically prefers garments that provide comfort and function during her leisure time.


Distinguishing Features:


General:
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Personality


Type: ISTJ


Introvert/Extrovert: Introvert


Habits: Olivia likes to chew on things, such as pens or cigarettes or even her bottom lip, when thinking. She also tends to mutter aloud to herself in order to better organize her thoughts.


Talents/Skills: Puzzles, crosswords, chess


Pessimist/Optimist: Optimist, but mainly a realist most of the time


Character Flaws: Olivia can be a bit clumsy at times, which isn’t preferred in her line of work. She is reserved and quiet because she tends to be in her own head too much. She might even consider the amount of ideas she has to be a flaw, as well.


Character Strength: She is strong-willed and determined. Once she sets her mind to something, she usual doesn’t stop until the task is finished.


Character Weakness: She is stubborn and sometimes a bit of a workaholic. She has a tendency to look over certain things if she doesn’t find them relevant or if she is too preoccupied.


General: Olivia enjoys being able to test her problem solving skills, as well as anything that gets her mind working. She is intelligent and thoughtful and curious. Because of this, she may come off cold and distracted most of the time. However, she tends to be quite loyal to those she trusts and calls “friend.”


Combat


Skills: She is not particularly quick or agile, but she is capable enough to get by. She prefers guns or other such weapons to assist her in combat. She was raised with an emphasis on mental strength rather than physical strength. It was merely over the recent years that she began to actually train a bit in the gym.


Weapons/Style: Olivia uses firearms, since she is given a standard issue gun when she is on the job. However, she was also taught some hand-to-hand basic techniques.


Strengths: She has quite a steady hand, which works in her favor when she is aiming a gun.


Weaknesses: She is not as strong at hand-to-hand combat. In fact, blood tends to turn her stomach a bit.


General: Olivia feels most confident with a gun at her side. Due to a lack of confidence, she tends to get sloppy when attempting to dodge or maneuver about during a fight, which is why she would prefer to remain as stationary as possible. Instead of landing a finishing blow, she would much prefer to leave her enemy incapacitated and run for safety or find a nice hiding spot.


Desires


Primary: Discovering the truth.


Strength: 10


Secondary: Living up to her father's reputation.


Strength: 8


Attraction: Olivia is attracted to someone who is intelligent, as well as courageous. She likes to be matched mentally.
 
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EvilFishy said:
(Please let me know if any of this needs editing. I wrote it while kind of busy.)
Role: The Detective


Name: Olivia Fitzgerald


Gender: Female


Age: 18


Sexuality: Heterosexual


Career: Detective for hire


Appearance


Body Type: Healthy build


Height: 5’3”


Weight: 115 lbs.


Hair: Long and black with bangs


Skin Color: Healthy, but pale color


Usual Clothes: Unlike the tight skirt and blazer that she wears on duty, Olivia typically prefers garments that provide comfort and function during her leisure time.


Distinguishing Features:


General:
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Personality


Type: ISTJ


Introvert/Extrovert: Introvert


Habits: Olivia likes to chew on things, such as pens or cigarettes or even her bottom lip, when thinking. She also tends to mutter aloud to herself in order to better organize her thoughts.


Talents/Skills: When her clumsiness is in check, she can be quite good at being sneaky and, basically, invisible.


Pessimist/Optimist: Optimist, but mainly a realist most of the time


Character Flaws: Olivia can be a bit clumsy at times, which isn’t preferred in her line of work. She is reserved and quiet because she tends to be in her own head too much. She might even consider the amount of ideas she has to be a flaw, as well.


Character Strength: She is strong-willed and determined. Once she sets her mind to something, she usual doesn’t stop until the task is finished.


Character Weakness: She is stubborn and sometimes a bit of a workaholic. She has a tendency to look over certain things if she doesn’t find them relevant or if she is too preoccupied.


General: Olivia enjoys being able to test her problem solving skills, as well as anything that gets her mind working. She is intelligent and thoughtful and curious. Because of this, she may come off cold and distracted most of the time. However, she tends to be quite loyal to those she trusts and calls “friend.”


Combat


Skills: Generally stationary or little movement involved


Weapons/Style: Olivia uses firearms, since she is given a standard issue gun when she is on the job. However, she was also taught some hand-to-hand basic techniques.


Strengths: She has quite a steady hand, which works in her favor when she is aiming a gun.


Weaknesses: She is not as strong at hand-to-hand combat. In fact, blood tends to turn her stomach a bit.


General: Olivia feels most confident with a gun at her side. Due to a lack of confidence, she tends to get sloppy when attempting to dodge or maneuver about during a fight, which is why she would prefer to remain as stationary as possible. Instead of landing a finishing blow, she would much prefer to leave her enemy incapacitated and run for safety or find a nice hiding spot.


Desires


Primary: Discovering the truth.


Strength: 10


Secondary: Thirst for knowledge.


Strength: 8


Attraction: Olivia is attracted to someone who is intelligent, as well as courageous. She likes to be matched mentally.
Looking good so far. Just a couple of things, and it should be fine: your desires are too similar (the secondary desire is there to add more depth to the character) and the skills section needs to describe particular skills they have (what you put makes little sense as well).
 
EvilFishy said:
Ok, I edited it. Let me know about the changes.
*I was talking about her combat skills. Those still need to be fixed. I'm sorry if that wasn't clear.
 
Role: The Unknown


Name: Theo Wilhelm (Noiz)


Gender: Male


Age: 19


Sexuality: Homosexual


Career: N/A


Appearance


Body Type: Quite tall and slightly underweight, although he can still pack a punch.


Height: 6"0'


Weight: 160lb


Hair: Noiz has mousey blond hair, which goes just past his ears and manages to reach the back of his neck. His hair isn't too neat, because he never brushes it, but it also isn't a complete mess.


Skin colour: White


Usual clothes: Showing off his brilliant (sarcasm) sense of style, Noiz always sports clothes that are bright green and black. His trousers are black with a green and black patterned belt. He wears a black undershirt with green cuffs on top, as well as a white green and black shirt, which has a black and green pocket with strange pins on. He also wears a green and black hat, which has the same pattern as his belt. The only part of his attire that suggests his high class upbringing is his tie, which is always neat, even if it is bright green.


Distinguishing features: Noiz has piercings everywhere, his lips, his ears, tongue, belly button and many others, adding to about 20 in total.


General:
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Personality


Personality type: ISTJ


Introvert/Extrovert: Introvert


Habits: Pulling on his snakebites with his teeth when nervous/feeling awkward/bored and pretty much whenever. Correcting people or replying to anything they say on his head instead of out loud unless it's important that he answers. He generally just doesn't talk much.


Talents/Skills: Noiz applies his logic to nearly anything, meaning he never does things on spur of the moment that he will regret later. He is generally detached from a situation, allowing him to make good choices instead of random, emotion based ones. He is quite intelligent because of his good education, and is quite good at applying things practically as long as no large amounts of creativity are required.


Pessimist/Optimist: Pessimist/Realist


Character Flaws: Noiz can be 'slightly' violent, often hurting people when he doesn't mean to both emotionally and physically. Noiz assesses any injuries by eye, and even though he isn't awful at it, he often underestimates how dangerous they are or how safe it is to ignore them.


Character Strengths: Even though he tries his best to avoid it, when Noiz somehow ends up with a friend or ally, Noiz is quite protective of them. He is quite good at predicting human behaviour, as he spends much more time watching people than he does actually interacting with them. He is fairly good at anything computer related, and enjoys coding quite a bit. He is learning to hack into things but he's not great at it yet.


Character weaknesses: Noiz is bad at judging the strength of his or others actions, and also not great at judging how dangerous injuries are, this means he can end up hitting people jokingly and hurting them a lot, or actually hitting them but a lot stronger than he means to.


General: Even though he was brought up in good conditions, Noiz has become a fighter. He is violent but methodical, and never does anything on spur of the moment. Noiz is not quick to make friends, and often doesn't talk much to people at all, but when he does make friends he is quite protective over them as he assumes he is better at fighting.


Combat


Skills: Noiz is fairly fast, meaning he can often dodge quite well. He is very skilled with his fists and a knife, meaning he prefers close combat. He has had a lot of practise on both people and in gyms, meaning he is fairly good at what he does.


Weapons/Style: Knifes and simple hand to hands combat, a little jujitsu and self defence, but his parents took him out of the classes when they realised he was actually using the lessons for real fighting. Anything else related to hand to hand combat such as baseball bats or anything that isn't ranged.


Strengths: Noiz can't feel pain like a normal person, and barely understands what it is, the only thing he can feel is any strong injuries, but even those only feel mild. This helps him to carry on fighting through injuries that would have normal people screaming in pain, giving him a significant advantage.


Weaknesses: If anyone chooses to attack Noiz without him noticing, there is a large chance the injury will go unnoticed and untreated until he's feeling faint from blood loss. This is obviously useful to others if they can get in a good attack a minute or so before actually fighting him. His many piercings can get caught on things and can rip out when caught, which would result in a lot of blood loss. This is mainly a problem in general instead of just when fighting.


General: Noiz fights with a lot of power, sometimes more than he realises, and often thinks quickly when in combat. He seems as if he can fight through pain, when actually he just can't feel it, which can be both an advantage and a disadvantage. He isn't great at judging injuries, often underestimating how bad they are.


Desires


Primary desire: Noiz wants to feel. Even if it occasionally gives him an advantage, having a whole sense missing is horrible.


Desire strength: [- - - - - - - - - - [10]]


Secondary desire: Be left alone.


Desire strength: [- - - - - [6]- - - - -]


Attraction: Noiz would prefer someone who isn't weak, because he doesn't want to hurt anyone he's with. He wouldn't want a touchy feely person because he can only feel ridiculously strong touches, and he therefore finds gentle touches strange and slightly creepy.
 
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snakeyem12 said:
Role: The Unknown
Name: Theo Wilhelm (Noiz)


Gender: Male


Age: 19


Sexuality: Homosexual


Career: N/A


Appearance


Body Type: Quite tall and slightly underweight, although he can still pack a punch.


Height: 6"0'


Weight: 160lb


Hair: Noiz has mousey blond hair, which goes just past his ears and manages to reach the back of his neck. His hair isn't too neat, because he never brushes it, but it also isn't a complete mess.


Skin colour: White


Usual clothes: Showing off his brilliant (sarcasm) sense of style, Noiz always sports clothes that are bright green and black. His trousers are black with a green and black patterned belt. He wears a black undershirt with green cuffs on top, as well as a white green and black shirt, which has a black and green pocket with strange pins on. He also wears a green and black hat, which has the same pattern as his belt. The only part of his attire that suggests his high class upbringing is his tie, which is always neat, even if it is bright green.


Distinguishing features: Noiz has piercings everywhere, his lips, his ears, tongue, belly button and many others, adding to about 20 in total.


General:
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Personality


Personality type: ISTJ


Introvert/Extrovert: Introvert


Habits: Pulling on his snakebites with his teeth when nervous/feeling awkward/bored and pretty much whenever. Correcting people or replying to anything they say on his head instead of out loud unless it's important that he answers. He generally just doesn't talk much.


Talents/Skills: Noiz applies his logic to nearly anything, meaning he never does things on spur of the moment that he will regret later. He is generally detached from a situation, allowing him to make good choices instead of random, emotion based ones. He is quite intelligent because of his good education, and is quite good at applying things practically as long as no large amounts of creativity are required.


Pessimist/Optimist: Pessimist/Realist


Character Flaws: Noiz can be 'slightly' violent, often hurting people when he doesn't mean to both emotionally and physically. Noiz assesses any injuries by eye, and even though he isn't awful at it, he often underestimates how dangerous they are or how safe it is to ignore them.


Character Strengths: Even though he tries his best to avoid it, when Noiz somehow ends up with a friend or ally, Noiz is quite protective of them. He is quite good at predicting human behaviour, as he spends much more time watching people than he does actually interacting with them. He is fairly good at anything computer related, and enjoys coding quite a bit. He is learning to hack into things but he's not great at it yet.


Character weaknesses: Noiz is bad at judging the strength of his or others actions, and also not great at judging how dangerous injuries are, this means he can end up hitting people jokingly and hurting them a lot, or actually hitting them but a lot stronger than he means to.


General: Even though he was brought up in good conditions, Noiz has become a fighter. He is violent but methodical, and never does anything on spur of the moment. Noiz is not quick to make friends, and often doesn't talk much to people at all, but when he does make friends he is quite protective over them as he assumes he is better at fighting.


Combat


Skills: Noiz is fairly fast, meaning he can often dodge quite well. He is very skilled with his fists and a knife, meaning he prefers close combat. He has had a lot of practise on both people and in gyms, meaning he is fairly good at what he does.


Weapons/Style: Knifes and simple hand to hands combat, a little jujitsu and self defence, but his parents took him out of the classes when they realised he was actually using the lessons for real fighting. Anything else related to hand to hand combat such as baseball bats or anything that isn't ranged.


Strengths: Noiz can't feel pain like a normal person, and barely understands what it is, the only thing he can feel is any strong injuries, but even those only feel mild. This helps him to carry on fighting through injuries that would have normal people screaming in pain, giving him a significant advantage.


Weaknesses: If anyone chooses to attack Noiz without him noticing, there is a large chance the injury will go unnoticed and untreated until he's feeling faint from blood loss. This is obviously useful to others if they can get in a good attack a minute or so before actually fighting him. His many piercings can get caught on things and can rip out when caught, which would result in a lot of blood loss. This is mainly a problem in general instead of just when fighting.


General: Noiz fights with a lot of power, sometimes more than he realises, and often thinks quickly when in combat. He seems as if he can fight through pain, when actually he just can't feel it, which can be both an advantage and a disadvantage. He isn't great at judging injuries, often underestimating how bad they are.


Desires


Primary desire: Noiz wants to feel. Even if it occasionally gives him an advantage, having a whole sense missing is horrible.


Desire strength: [- - - - - - - - - - [10]]


Secondary desire: N/A


Desire strength: N/A


Attraction: Noiz would prefer someone who isn't weak, because he doesn't want to hurt anyone he's with. He wouldn't want a touchy feely person because he can only feel ridiculously strong touches, and he therefore finds gentle touches strange and slightly creepy.
I... Don't have much to say about this. In fact, I can only think of now thing - when I was reading through the character profile, I got the impression of someone who wants to be alone. Maybe you could use that as a secondary desire? Other than that, it's good.
 
TheJipan said:
*I was talking about her combat skills. Those still need to be fixed. I'm sorry if that wasn't clear.
No worries! I went back again and rewrote that part, as well.
 
Role: The Defender


Name: Ophelia Parke


Gender: Female


Age: 25


Sexuality: Heterosexual


Career: Inspector, Utopia Police Department


Appearance


Body Type: Tall, thin


Height: 5'10"


Weight: 155


Hair: Blonde, chest-length, naturally wavy


Skin colour: Slightly tan


Usual clothes: Modest shirt, knee-length skirt, trench coat, three-inch heels, UPD gold star brooch


Distinguishing features: None


General:


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Personality


Personality type: INFJ


Introvert/Extrovert: Introvert


Habits: Staring into the distance


Talents/Skills: Ability to catch wind of criminal activity before most of her colleagues


Pessimist/Optimist: Optimist


Character Flaws: Live and die by the Desire System, no compromise, easily swayed and influenced


Character Strengths: Determined and perseveres to the very end, altruistic and strives to make the world a better place


Character weaknesses: Private and doesn't let people in, sensitive and doesn't take well to criticism, anxious and doesn't fare well under pressure, people pleaser despite the cost


General: Parke is easily the youngest and least respected Police Inspector in the Utopia Police Department. First, she lacks the ability to command a room. As an Inspector, not being charismatic enough to rally up the troops means that her team is constantly falling apart and running its own show without her. Second, she doesn't possess the emotional integrity to handle stressful situations. Moments of stress are common in the UPD, and breaking down and running out in the middle of meetings have always left bad impressions of her among her colleagues. Third, she helplessly wants to please everyone. She isn't opinionated enough, and her decision making depends on who sounds the most passionate about their cause. In spite of her shortcomings, she is a hard worker who finishes what she starts. On the brink of being ostracized by her colleagues, they still keep her around because she is able to hear of illegal activity before they do. She finds refuge in wandering the streets at night and eavesdropping to organize her thoughts, and she sometimes catches wind of criminal activity. She is dedicated to making Utopia a safe place for all citizens, and her strong desire for that one cause is why the Desire System placed her where it did.


Combat


Skills: Stealth, reconaissance work


Weapons/Style: UPD standard issue Glock 27 .40, various military arms


Strengths: Quiet, good aim


Weaknesses: Tires easily, not very agile


General: Parke received police training upon entry into the Utopia Police Department. She was trained in handling arms and initiating raids. Soon, she grew good at stealth and reconaissance work. Training is standard procedure in the UPD. Her line of work rarely takes her into the line of fire. As a Police Inspector, she spends most of her time delegating tasks and reporting to superiors, all behind the safety of her desk. The only time she gets to go out into the field is when there's reconaissance to be done on a case that requires a higher level of security clearance than her subordinates' allow. Because of this, she never kept up with stamina training, and her tall physique meant that she's awkward and not very agile. The only silver lining with working in an office is that she has unlimited access to the shooting range in the building.


Desires


Primary desire: Protecting Utopia and its citizens


Desire strength: [- - - [4] - - - - - - -]


Secondary desire: None


Desire strength: [- - - - - - - - - -]


Attraction: Parke desires someone who can understand and respect her personal space. She desires someone who can take care of her and make her feel safe.
 
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Cyanide said:
Role: The Defender
Name: Ophelia Parke


Gender: Female


Age: 25


Sexuality: Heterosexual


Career: Inspector, Utopia Police Department


Appearance


Body Type: Tall, thin


Height: 5'10"


Weight: 155


Hair: Blonde, chest-length, naturally wavy


Skin colour: Slightly tan


Usual clothes: Modest shirt, knee-length skirt, trench coat, three-inch heels, UPD gold star brooch


Distinguishing features: None


General:


Ophelia.png



Personality


Personality type: INFJ


Introvert/Extrovert: Introvert


Habits: Staring into the distance


Talents/Skills: Connecting with people


Pessimist/Optimist: Optimist


Character Flaws: Live and die by the Desire System, no compromise


Character Strengths: Inspiring and leads her team well, decisive and stands by her decisions, altruistic and strives to make the world a better place


Character weaknesses: Private and doesn't let people in, sensitive and doesn't take well to criticism, dedicated and doesn't have time for personal life


General: Ophelia is usually described by her colleagues as being an introvert, but when it counts, she comes out of her shell and takes the lead. That's the main reason her team takes to her so well; she knows how to step up and take charge when it's time to do so. She may be young for her position in the Utopia Police Department, but her quick decision-making skills and her dedication to protecting Utopia and its citizens make her the ideal candidate, and the Desire System knew that. Her dedication, however, has a downside: her personal life is non-existent. On top of that, she doesn't let people in. She can connect with people and get to know them really well, but that's not the case vice versa. It's a good thing the Desire System will take care of her love life.


Combat


Skills: Stealth, reconaissance work


Weapons/Style: UPD standard issue Glock 27 .40, various military arms


Strengths: Quiet, good aim


Weaknesses: Tires easily, not very agile


General: Ophelia received police training upon entry into the Utopia Police Department. She was trained in handling arms and initiating raids. Soon, she grew good at stealth and reconaissance work. Training is standard procedure in the UPD. Her line of work rarely takes her into the line of fire. As a Police Inspector, she spends most of her time delegating tasks and reporting to superiors, all behind the safety of her desk. The only time she gets to go out into the field is when there's reconaissance to be done on a case that requires a higher level of security clearance than her subordinates' allow. Because of this, she never kept up with stamina training, and her tall physique meant that she's not very agile. The only silver lining with working in an office is that she has unlimited access to the shooting range in the building.


Desires


Primary desire: Protecting Utopia and its citizens


Desire strength: [- - - - - - [7] - - - -]


Secondary desire: Feeling safe and secure


Desire strength: [- - - - [5] - - - - -]


Attraction: Ophelia desires someone who can understand and respect her personal space. She desires someone who can take care of her and make her feel safe.
I'm sorry, but this is a cardboard cut-out Mary Sue. I can't accept this before some serious changes are made. Add some more flaws, and add some more depth to her character so that she can't be summed up with a couple of words.
 
Cyanide said:
Ability to catch wind of Desireless activity before most of her colleagues
There is only one desireless, and no one knows they even exist yet, not even the Desire System.

Cyanide said:
Primary desire: Protecting Utopia and its citizens
Desire strength: [- - - - - - [7] - - - -]
A level 7 would be a Commander. A level 3 or 4 would be an Inspector.


Also, the two desires are very similar - the second desire is supposed to add more depth to the character. If you can't think up of a different desire for the secondary desire, then don't put one at all.


Additionally, there can't be someone who is bad at or doesn't like their job in Utopia, because of the Desire System. Literally the set up of the RP.


In short, your character still needs to be less one dimensional, less of a Mary Sue, less of a cardboard cut out and have more flaws. The above were just a couple of more immediate flaws I found.
 
@TheJipan, I made the changes regarding the Desireless as well as her desire level. As for the rest, I'll PM you about it once I figure out how to PM people, haha.
 
To 'PM', you click on a person's name and then click 'Start a Conversation' on the pop-up window that appears.
 

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