Project Team Zero (Hero's and Martyr's)

[Church418]

Greetings fellow Role-Players! I've been working on this idea for a little while, and wanted to post it to the forums to see what you, the community, think.


Obviously, I want to know if Role-Playing this sounds fun to you, but I also want to know how I did on setting this up. Is it easy to read? Is it boring to read? Did it make sense? Did the "computer style format" work for you or did it suck? (Honestly, I think it might've sucked, and you can totally tell me that! ) and finally, would this be better as a standard role-play or some form of dice game? I've DM'd for a group before, but have never attempted to create a concept like it from scratch.


Anyways, without further adieu, Welcome Cadet's! Death to the Empire!

PRESIDENTIAL TERMINAL





AUGUST 6TH, 2109






WELCOME MR. PRESIDENT!



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>_TIME OF INITIATION: 1436/ AUGUST 6TH, 2109


>_INITIATED BY: GOVERNOR JIM CARDIN, SOUTH EAST SECTOR


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(garbled)….from the earth! My god, they’ve…..(garbled)….hit the military first then the police staish(station?)….(garbled)…..borders! for god sakes seal the borders!.....(garbled)……jammed all comm(communications?)….destroyed the cell towers! I’ve been contacted by project tee(tea?)…..zero (Project Team Zero?)….securing the civilian population……(garbled)…….[TRANSMISSION LOST]

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MEMORANDUM FOR RECORD


TO: THE PRESIDENT of UNITED OZEA and THE MEMBERS OF HIS CABINENT


FROM: GENERAL ARSON (UNITED OZEAN ARMY)


SUBJECT: THE PURPOSE OF THIS MEMORANDUM IS TO DEFINE PROJECT TEAM ZERO, THE CANDIDATES, THEIR CAPABILITIES, AND THEIR PURPOSE. THE CONTENTS OF THIS MEMORANDUM ARE OF THE HIGHEST CLASSIFICATION

1.) MR. PRESIDENT. PROJECT TEAM ZERO IS AN ALL VOLUNTEER OUTFIT OFFERED ONLY TO THE ABSOLUTE BEST IN MY ARMY. THESE INDIVIDUALS HAVE UNDERGONE AN EXTENSIVE AND GRUELING SET OF AUGMENTATIONS THAT HAVE PLACED THEM, NOT ONLY ABOVE THEIR PEERS, BUT ABOVE HUMANITY AS A WHOLE

2.)PROJECT TEAM ZERO IS OUR RESPONSE TO THE RECENT DEPLOYMENT OF THE HALENBRAAD EMPIRE'S BIOLOGICALLY ENGINEERED MECHANOIDS THAT NOW SERVE AS THE FRONT LINE OF THEIR MILITARY. WE, THE COMMAND STAFF OF THE UNITED OZEAN ARMY, BELIEVE HUMAN INSTINCT AND INGENUITY ARE KEY TO A SUCCESSFUL AND PRODUCTIVE MILITARY. AS SUCH, PROJECT TEAM ZERO CADETS ARE IN FULL COMMAND OF THEIR ACTIONS AND CAN USE THEIR AUGMENTATIONS WHEN THEY SEE FIT.

3.)SIR, THE CADETS AT PROJECT TEAM ZERO ARE THE BEST OF THE BEST IN EVERY QUALITY THAT MAKES A SUCCESSFUL WARFIGHTER, HOWEVER, EACH OF THEM ARE SPECIALLY TRAINED IN ONE OF THREE CATAGORIES:




a.)

WARRIOR

THE WARRIOR CLASS OF PROJECT ZERO ARE SOLDIERS DESIGNED SPECIFICALLY FOR SHORT TO MEDIUM RANGE COMBAT SCENERIOS. THEIR STANDARD ISSUE ARMOR IS DESIGNED IN TWO LAYERS;

• THE FIRST LAYER IS A FULL-BODY, CLIMATE CONTROLLED SUIT COMPRISED ENTIRELY OF CARBON NANOTUBES. A LIGHTWEIGHT, VIRTUALLY UNBREAKABLE MATERIAL USED IN THE CONSTRUCTION OF OUR SPACE ELEVATORS. THIS SUIT WAS DESIGNED SPECIFICALLY FOR BALLISTIC PROTECTION.
  
  
  
  
• THE OUTER LAYER COVERS THE WARRIOR'S EXTREMETIES AND VITAL ORGANS, MADE OF AMPORPHOUS METALS WITH TWICE THE STRENGTH OF STEEL. IN ADDITION, EACH SUIT IS OUTFITTED WITH A SELF-REPAIRING METAL FOAM EMERGENCY DISPERSAL SYSTEM TO QUICKLY REPAIR GRIEVOUS DAMAGES TO THE WARRIOR'S ARMOR, KEEPING HIM FULLY PROTECTED. THE OUTER LAYER WAS DESIGNED SPECIFICALLY FOR ENERGY PROTECTION.
  
  
  
  

WARRIOR'S ARE ARMED WITH THE HIGHLY CUSTOMIZABLE .21 SC M-01(SMART)LASER RIFLE. THIS RIFLE LINKS DIRECTLY TO THE WARRIOR'S COMBAT HELMET AND DISPLAYS A TARGETING RECTICLE IN THEIR HEADS UP DISPLAY (H.U.D) WITH ONLY A 0.0001% DEGREE MARGIN OF ERROR. THE .21 SOLAR CELL(SC) IS THE PRIMARY AMMUNITION FOR THIS RIFLE. THE .21 SC IS EJECTED FROM THE RIFLE UPON EXPENDATURE, BUT CAN BE COLLECTED BY THE USER AND BE FIRED AGAIN AFTER AN 8-12 HOUR RECHARGE PERIOD. UPON IMPACT, THE .21 SC RELEASES A SMALL-GRADE ELECTROMAGNETIC SHOCK WITH THE CAPABILITY OF SLOWING, STUNNING, OR PERMANENTLY DISABLING ELECTRONIC PERSONNEL OR EQUIPMENT. TO ORGANICS; THE .21 SC MAKES IMPACT WITH FLESH AT 1,700 MPH AND 400 DEGREES CELCIUS. A STANDARD CLIP HOLDS THIRTY .21 CELLS

NOTE:

THIS RIFLE HAS NOT BEEN FIELD TESTED AND HAS ONLY BEEN USED BY PROJECT TEAM ZERO CADETS FOR TRAINING PURPOSES.




FINALLY, EACH WARRIOR CLASS IS TRAINED OZEAN COMBATATIVES LEVEL 4.5. AS YOU KNOW, LEVEL 4 COMBATATIVES EMPHASIZE THE DISARMAMENT AND ELIMINATION OF AN ENEMY WITHIN SEVEN SECONDS. IN LEVEL 4.5, WARRIORS HAVE BEEN SPECIALLY TRAINED WITH MECHANOID AND ROBOTIC UNITS IN MIND.









b.)

RANGER

THE RANGER CLASS OF PROJECT ZERO IS SPECIALLY TRAINED FOR STEALTH AND LONG RANGE COMBAT SCENERIOS. LIKE WARRIORS, THEIR STANDARD ISSUE ARMOR COMES IN TWO LAYERS:

• THE FIRST LAYER IS IDENTICAL TO THE WARRIOR CLASS IN EVERY WAY, SEE ABOVE.
  
  
  
  
• THE SECOND LAYER IS THE EXPERIMENTAL CHAMELEON CARBON SUIT (CCS). A SPECIALIZED LAYER OF CARBON NANOTUBES THAT HAVE BEEN CHEMICALLY ALTERED TO BOND WITH NEARLY EVERY MATERIAL IT COMES INTO CONTACT WITH, ALLOWING THE WEARER TO BLEND IN WITH NEARLY EVERY SURFACE. IN 2105, THE CCS WAS FIELD TESTED IN THE FORT SIERRA URBAN TRAINING GROUNDS AGAINST A SQUAD OF VOLUNTEER MARINES. THE SPECIALIZED NANOTUBES SUCCESSFULLY BONDED WITH EVERY SURFACE AND THE MARINES WERE UNABLE TO LOCATE THE PROJECT ZERO RANGER IN FOUR SEPERATE "HIDE AND SEEK" MISSIONS.
  
  
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  PROJECT ZERO RANGERS ARE VULNERABLE TO ENERGIZED WEAPONRY. UNLIKE WARRIORS, RANGERS ARE NOT DESIGNED FOR EXTENDED COMBAT AND ARE EQUIPPED WITH SPEED, MANUVERABILITY, AND VERSATILITY IN MIND.
  
  
  
  

THE FOREARM OF THE CHAMELEON CARBON SUIT IS EQUIPPED WITH A PLASMA BRACER THAT CAN PROJECT A PLASMA-BASED BLADE AT THE USERS DISCRETION. THIS BLADE IS COMPOSED OF TWO PARTIALLY IONIZED 'BLADES' OF FREE MOVING ELECTRON BASED GAS HELD IN A BLADE-LIKE FORM BY TWO SMALL MAGNETIC-FIELD SOLAR GENERATORS BUILT INTO THE BRACER OF THE WEAPON. THIS PLASMA BLADE WAS DESIGNED WITH SPEED AND LETHALITY IN MIND AND CAN CUT THROUGH VIRTUALLY ANY SURFACE WITH MINOR RESISTANCE.

NOTE:

EXCESSIVE USE IN A SMALL AMOUNT OF TIME WILL EXHAUST THE GENERATORS AND REQUIRES 4-6 HOURS TO RECHARGE.

THE .34 SC SNIPER RIFLE IS THE LONG RANGE COUSIN TO THE M-01 LASER RIFLE. WITH A MAXIMUM RANGE OF 5000M AND MAXIMUM EFFECTIVE RANGE OF 3000M COMBINED WITH THE SELF-CHARGING .34 SC ROUND, NO OTHER SNIPER RIFLE CAN COMPARE. LIKE THE M-01 RIFLE, THIS SNIPER RIFLE LINKS DIRECTLY TO THE USERS H.U.D. WITH A 0.0001% MARGIN OF ERROR. THE .34 SC ROUND CAN BE FIRED AS AN "E" ROUND FOR "ELECTRONIC" OR AN "O" ROUND FOR "ORGANIC." THE E ROUND, ON IMPACT, WILL EMIT A HEAVY ELECTROMAGNETIC BLAST CAPABLE OF FRYING ANY ELECTRONIC SYSTEM, EVEN IF THEY ARE GROUNDED. THE O ROUND, ON IMPACT, WILL IGNITE ANY ORGANIC MATERIAL IT COMES INTO CONTACT WITH. A STANDARD CLIP HOLDS TWO .34 CELLS.

NOTE:

THE .34 SC SNIPER RIFLE IS LOUD AND BRIGHT WHEN FIRED, LIKELY REVEALING THE RANGER'S POSITION.




c.) HACKER

THE PROJECT ZERO HACKER IS THE ULTIMATE IN COMBAT SUPPORT. EACH HACKER IS PAIRED WITH AN A.I. THAT PROVIDES REAL TIME ANALYSIS, ASSESSMENTS, AND RECOMMENDATIONS TO PROJECT ZERO WARFIGHTERS IN AN EASY TO UNDERSTAND FORMAT. THE HACKER UTILIZES A SINGLE LAYER OF CARBON NANOTUBE INTERFACE ARMOR (C.N.I.) THAT IS STILL UNDERGOING EXPERIMENTAL TRIALS. SOMEWHAT RELATED TO THE RANGER'S "CHAMELEON" CLASS OF ARMOR, THE "INTERFACE" CLASS ALLOWS THE WEARER TO ELECTRONICALLY BOND WITH ANY TECHNOLOGY CAPABLE OF GENERATING A SIGNAL. THE SUCCESS OF THIS FUNCTION HAS BEEN UNRELIABLE, AT BEST, AND REQUIRES FURTHER REFINING.




HIGHLIGHTING ENEMIES, IDENTIFYING HIGH VALUE INDIVIDUALS, AND PRIORITIZING TARGETS ARE JUST SOME OF THE HACKER'S MANY CAPABILITIES. USING A SURGICALLY INSERTED NEURAL INTERFACE, THE A.I. AND HACKER ARE THE DEFINITION OF EFFIECIENCY AND SPEED. WHETHER IT BE A LOCAL POWER GRID, ENEMY COMM TRAFFIC, OR HEAVILY SECURED GOVERNMENT DATABASE, THE A.I. WILL IMMEDIATELY RECOGNIZE THE HACKER'S NEED AND PROVIDE ACCESS, OR THE MEANS TO GAIN ACCESS.

THE A-03 "GAZE" IS THE FIRST PROTOTYPE TO SUCCESSFULLY INTEGRATE THE USER'S AND A.I.'S MIND'S AS ONE. OUTFITTED WITH THE NEWLY ENGINEERED "HARD LIGHT" OPTIC TECHNOLOGY, THE A.I. CAN PROVIDE A VISUAL DISPLAY OF THINGS THAT ARE OTHERWISE INVISIBLE TO THE HUMAN EYE. FOR EXAMPLE: IF THE HACKER WANTED TO JAM THE SIGNAL CONNECTION BETWEEN TWO POINTS, BUT ALLOW OTHERS TO CONTINUE, THE A.I. WILL ACTIVATE THE HARD LIGHT OPTIC AND GIVE THE HACKER A VISUAL REPRESENTATION OF THE SIGNAL SPECTRUM. THEN, USING HIS OR HER FINGERS LIKE A KEYBOARD, THE HACKER CAN PHYSICALLY MANIPULATE THE SPECTRUM TO THEIR BENEFIT. THE HACKER DISPLAYED IN THE FIRST PHOTO SHOWS THE HARD LIGHT OPTIC IN ACTION.

THE MX-17 "INTERFACER" IS PROJECT TEAM ZERO'S RESPONSE TO MECHANOID, FRONT LINE, COMBATANTS AND IS ONLY EFFECTIVE AGAINST THOSE UNITS. THIS EXTREMELY EXPENSIVE HANDGUN FIRES MICRO-TRANSMITTERS THAT TRANSMIT IN THE 30GHz-300GHz RANGE, HOPPING FREQUENCIES EVERY SECOND TO AVOID JAMMING OR INTERCEPTION. UPON MAKING CONTACT WITH A MECHANOID UNIT, THE HACKER CAN TRANSMIT A SIGNAL DIRECTLY TO THE MECHANOID, IGNORING ANY FIREWALLS OR SECURITY PROGRAMMING, AND EFFECTIVELY TAKE OPERATIONAL CONTROL OF THE MECH, SO LONG AS THE HACKER CAN STAY AHEAD OF THE MECHANOIDS SELF-REPAIRING SECURITY SOFTWARE. EACH CLIP FOR THE MX-17 CAN HOLD 5 TRANSMITTERS, AND ARE EXTREMELY EXPENSIVE TO REPLACE.

THE .10 SC RECOILLESS LASER SUBMACHINE GUN IS THE HACKER'S PRIMARY WEAPON, IN THE EVENT OF IMMINENT DANGER. SHORT RANGE, LOW TO MODERATE ACCURACY, AND VERY HIGH RATE OF FIRE FIRING .10 SOLAR CELLS WHICH ARE EJECTED FROM THE SUBMACHINE GUN UPON EXPENDATURE. THESE CELLS CAN BE COLLECTED AND USED AGAIN AFTER A 2-4 HOUR RECHARGE PERIOD. A STANDARD CLIP CAN HOLD 150 CELLS.

A HACKER'S ARTIFICIAL INTELLIGENCE IS BY FAR HIS OR HER MOST LETHAL WEAPON. UPON NEURAL INTEGRATION, A HACKER AND A.I. WILL SPEND OVER A YEAR TOGETHER (IN THE HACKER'S MIND) BEFORE BEING TESTED IN HIGH STRESS COMBAT SCENERIOS. APPROXIMATELY 22% OF NEURAL INTEGRATIONS ARE SUCCESSFUL. THESE INTEGRATIONS FAIL FOR A VARIETY OF REASONS, 3% OF FAILURES HAVE PROVEN FATAL. BUT FOR THOSE 22%, WE HAVE A RECOGNIZED AN, ARGUABLY, UNBREAKABLE BOND. THIS RELATIONSHIP BETWEEN THE HACKER AND A.I. HAS SOME OF MY STAFF CONCERNED, BUT THEIR EFFICIENCY AND CONTRIBUTION TO THE BATTLEFIELD CANNOT BE IGNORED.





4.) THE POC FOR THIS MEMORANDUM IS GENERAL TIMOTHY ARSON.






TIMOTHY ARSON




GENERAL, UOA




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MR. PRESIDENT.HEAVY ELECTRONIC JAMMING DETECTED.TRANSMISSION SUCCESS UNLIKELY.PROCEED?

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>_manual cmd input:CADET'S, AND ALL OFFICERS, OF PROJECT TEAM ZERO; TODAY OUR NATION HAS BEEN SUBJECT TO AN UNPROVOKED ATTACK. WE HAVE LOST ALL COMMUNICATIONS WITH MILITARY, POLICE, AND EMERGENCY PERSONNEL IN THE SOUTH EAST SECTOR. THE ONLY NATION CURRENTLY CAPABLE OF PULLING OFF SUCH A SOPHISTICATED ATTACK IS THE HALENBRAAD EMPIRE


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YOU, THE PROJECT ZERO CADET'S, ARE THE BEST OF THE BEST. TRAINED TO COUNTER THE EMPIRE'S HIGHLY ADVANCED FRONTLINE MECHANOID COMBATANTS. WITHOUT THE CONCERN FOR PERSONAL ACCOUNTABILITY, THE EMPIRE HAS RAN RAMPANT ACROSS THEIR CONTINENT, UNCHECKED FOR OVER A DECADE. THEIR GREED AND LUST FOR POWER KNOWS NO BOUNDS, THEIR REGARD FOR THE BASIC LAWS OF WAR HAVE SLOWLY FADED, AND THEIR GENERAL CONCERN FOR HUMAN LIFE HAS ALL BUT EVAPORATED.

YOU HAVE BEEN EQUIPPED WITH THE BEST WEAPONRY AND TECHNOLOGY SCIENCE CAN CREATE. THESE TOOLS, ALONG WITH YOUR EXTENSIVE TRAINING, WILL SURPASS THE ABILITIES OF THEIR ROBOTIC SOLDIERS AND PLACE YOU ON PAR WITH THE EMPIRE'S MECHANOID'S. BUT TAKE HEED, THEIR NUMBERS FAR OUTMATCH YOUR OWN. WITH A "HIVEMIND" LIKE MENTALITY, THOUSANDS OF THE EMPIRES ROBOTS CAN COMMUNICATE TACTICAL UPDATES AND LOCATIONS IN MILLISECONDS. DO NOT BE CARELESS, UTILIZE YOUR TRAINING AT ALL TIMES, AND YOU WILL OVERCOME.


CADETS. PROTECT MY CIVILIANS. THEY ARE YOUR NUMBER ONE PRIORITY AND A TOTAL LOSS OF THE CIVILIAN POPULATION IN THE SOUTH EAST, REGARDLESS OF THE OUTCOME, WILL BE CONSIDERED A FAILURE. MY ASSETS TELL ME YOU ARE CURRENTLY SCATTERED ABOUT THE CITIES. LINK UP WITH EACH OTHER AND COORDINATE A RESISTANCE UNTIL HELP CAN ARRIVE.


FINALLY, AS THE PRESIDENT OF THE UNITED OZEAN STATES, I MUST ENSURE THE SAFETY OF THE REST OF THE COUNTRY. THE THREE MAJOR BRIDGES LEADING INTO, AND OUT OF, THE SOUTH EAST SECTOR WILL BE DESTROYED AND A HEAVY DEFENSIVE POSTURE WILL BE ESTABLISHED ALONG THE BORDER, UNTIL WE CAN COORDINATE AN EFFECTIVE RESPONSE. IF YOU RECEIVE THIS AND ARE NEAR ONE OF THE BRIDGES, EVACUATE THE AREA AND GET TO A SAFE DISTANCE. THE BOMBING RUN IS IMMINENT.


GOOD LUCK CADET'S, I'LL SEE YOU ON THE OTHER SIDE. PRESIDENT HARRIOT BLAKEMAN, OUT.


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[Church418]

This was initially meant to be a standard Role-Play but then as I progressed with the idea, adding classes, weapons, abilities, and ammunition types, the plot seemed to have a sense of balance that I thought might make a successful Dice game.


I don't know, what do you guys think?

 

[Grey]

Do you have any idea what system you want to use?


I'm finding the presentation something of a slog, but I'll get back to you when I work my way through it.

 

[Church418]

No, actually.


Like I said, I've DM'd before so I can see how this might be successful using a system of some sort.


If it received good feedback on this forum, I was actually going to eventually contact you to see what you thought.


Your reply makes it that much more convenient ^ _ ^

 

[Church418]

But I was concerned that I had added too much "fluff" to the presentation. As in, I could have removed the "computer terminal" part altogether, and since reading it feels like a slog it might be better if I did that

 

[Grey]

I quite like the terminal part for flavour, at the start. You can probably safely keep that.


I'd say drop the memorandum. What you've done there is try to sell me on cool toys without contextualizing them adequately - convince me the plot is worth attention, then garnish it with cool toys. That said, I appreciate the obvious amount of thought and research that went into the Project Zero gear.


Strip back the president's message to the essentials, maybe lose the terminal look.


Hrm. Make sure the RP itself has plenty of details on the history of the Ozean-Halanbrad conflict, the cultural and political differences, their internal makeup, that kind of thing. I have very little idea of what these places are like, right now, but I'm reading The Ozean States as 'future USA as presented a 1980s anime'.


That is not necessarily a bad thing.


It sounds like you'll want a reasonably crunchy and versatile system for combat? It seems like you want something relatively gritty and combat-focused to me, anyway.


This would all make a neat concept for a third-person co-op videogame.

 

[Church418]

@Grey


Thank you for your awesome constructive feedback!


So you actually want to see the history of the two nations fleshed out more? I actually purposely omitted that because I thought people wouldn't care.


Additionally, I wrote the memorandum first because I thought people would definitely want to read about all the cool classes and "toys" lol. Man I'm all kinds of backwards!


So, for the system, I'm not looking to punish players by chance, like DND 5. I'm looking to punish players strictly for poor or non-descriptive role-play. For a very simple example: Warrior 1 walks out into the street. Mechanoid 1 spots Warrior and Fires his main cannon. A roll of 15 required to hit. Mechanoid rolls a 13. (+1 for players lack of tactical movement, +1 for player not anticipating combat) Mechanoid successfully hits. In the flip side of that, if the Mechanoid rolled a 15 and the Warrior role-played his movements effectively, I'd subtract from the Mech's role.


Civilians will have a vital part to play in combat/roleplay as well. Civilians have their advantages and disadvantages and this is determined by reputation. A player might choose to huddle all of his civilians in a corner and leave them so he can move about the battlefield more effectively, but this general lack of concern will lower the civilian's attitude toward the player. In addition, not taking the time to learn their names or build a relationship with them outside of combat will lower their attitude as well. Alternatively, if the player focuses heavily on building the relationship with his or her civilians, they might slow them down in combat, but might also motivate the civilians to help the player inside and outside of combat. For example: If your HP reaches zero the civilians may or may not risk their lives to revive you, depending on your reputation.


In combat, role-play will be restricted to actions/results. I'd provide a more descriptive list of each classes abilities and what "move" constitutes a full turn. I would also not enforce the 30 paces=1 turn. Each class will have preset stats that gradually increase as they are promoted.


Promotion: I would keep track of each player's XP and notify them when they have been promoted. Promotions will increase base stats and eventually unlock access to more advanced abilities. This list of abilities will not be very extensive, but will be well worth the unlock.


It's looking like this isn't as successful as I'd thought it would be, hahah. But I'll add a tab to expound upon the setting.

 

[Grey]

But you're still running off D20 as a base? You might want to look at Risus, which is free and Fate, which is pay what you want as options.


Eclipse Phase would be very appropriate but is much... heavier.

 

[Church418]

I'll look into those!


This was more or less me casting my idea into the figurative pond to see if I got any bites before investing more time and energy into it. Your feedback helped.