Angel Rose Aednat aka "Phoenix" (Feedback/Constructive criticism welcome)

[Kestrel]

Angel Rose Aednat aka "Phoenix"

Introduction

"Air goes in and out. Blood goes round and round. Any variation of this is bad."


"Support EMS, Run with scissors."


"Be nice to me! I may be your paramedic someday. Remember, needle size is up to me!"

Games the Character has been involved with

-Louisiana's Other Side


-The Beginning of the End (of the World)


-Zombies!

Basics

Name: Angel Rose Aednat aka "Phoenix"


Age: 26


Ethnicity/Nationality: Born in America, but she is of Irish descent


Gender: Female


Sexual Orientation: Heterosexual


Occupation: Zombie-Slayer, Paramedic, former Search-and-Rescue dog handler

• Appearance
• Personality
• History
• Equipment
• Skills

• Appearance
  
  Height: 5'6"
  
  
  Weight: 125 lbs
  
  
  Hair: Long, curly red hair, often braided or in a ponytail
  
  
  Eyes: Green
  
  
  Body: Small-framed and thin, but athletic
  
  
  Attire: At work: Paramedic uniform
  
  
  Off duty: Jeans and t-shirt with sarcastic or funny saying
  
  
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  Other physical features
  
  
  -Freckles
  
  
  -Often has bruises on arms
  
  
  -Right side of her face is scraped
  
  
  -Ears pierced, rarely wears earrings
  
  
  
• Personality
  
  Deep down, Phoenix is a caring and compassionate person. Experience with abuse, and trying to survive in an post-apocalyptic wasteland has made her wary and mistrustful. She believes that she can only depend on herself and her two dogs, Koda and Angus. She doesn't believe in love anymore, and she takes a while to warm up to people. She is willing to do the right thing, and will help those she cares about. Once she trusts somebody, she will do anything for them. She thrives on the adrenaline rush from her high stress job. She is skilled with a crossbow and hand-to-hand combat.
  
  
  Goals: Phoenix has spent the past 15 years looking for her sisters, but now, she just wants to survive.
  
  
  Likes: Dogs, music, her job, shotguns, her crossbow, Nutella, drawing and painting, horses, playing guitar
  
  
  Dislikes: People, the dark, fire, loud noises, sudden movements, cats, coffee
  
  
  Fears: People, the dark, is wary of men, uncontrolled and/or large fires
  
  
  
• History
  
  Date of Birth: Feb. 14
  
  
  City of Birth: Atlanta, Georgia
  
  
  Best Memory: Adopting Koda and Angus
  
  
  Greatest Achievement: Becoming a SAR dog handler
  
  
  Worst Memory: Her fiancé, Aidan (who was a firefighter), dying in a house fire
  
  
  General Background: Since she was 9, Phoenix has never had a choice of where she lived until she was 18, because she was in foster care. She bounced around in different homes in Atlanta and the surrounding suburbs. When she was 15, she was placed in a group home, where she quickly learned to fight. Growing up with other children with similar backgrounds reinforced the belief that she could only depend on herself. Each new place, she looked for her two younger sisters, but she never found them. After she aged out of foster care, she moved to Alaska. She had planned to move to Alaska ever since a foster family took her there on vacation. Using scholarships, she went to school to be an EMT, while she was living in Alaska. On a ride-along on an ambulance during training, her team found a dog standing in the road. The year-old stray led them to a crashed car, and he had pulled them out of the wreckage to safety. Since his owners couldn't be located, he became a SAR dog. Phoenix quit being an EMT and became a SAR dog handler, and the two were paired up. He was injured in an avalanche two years later, when he was three. He was retired due to his losing a leg and eye. Phoenix moved back to Atlanta and went back to school and became a paramedic. A patient had a litter of Irish Wolfhound puppies, and so she adopted Angus. She also met her future fiancé, who was a firefighter before he died while rescuing a kitten from a house fire. After he died, the emotional trauma made her doubt if she could ever love again. She also blamed his death on herself, for no apparent reasons. She's been on her own (except for the dogs) since the start of the apocalypse, three years later. At the start of the apocalypse, she was at a refuge camp, until it was overrun. She barely escaped, but managed to get supplies and ambulance. She's been constantly on the move, living out of the ambulance. After the apocalypse began, she was attacked by a group of men, who molested and raped her.
  
  
  Biggest Failure: Koda and Phoenix were called out to find survivors after an avalanche. A second avalanche came and Koda was injured. His left eye and back leg were amputated, and he had to retire from SAR. Phoenix blames herself for not knowing about a second avalanche, and staying on the mountain to look for survivors.
  
  
  Health: Colorblind, asthmatic, which she keeps an inhaler for. Prone to panic attacks and night terrors. The night terrors are controlled by medication. Blood type O-.
  
  
  Koda:
  
  
  -6 yr. old Belgian Malinios mix
  
  
  -63.7 lbs.
  
  
  -Retired SAR dog
  
  
  -Missing back left leg and eye, due to injuries sustained on-duty from avalanche in Alaska
  
  
  -Certified therapy dog
  
  
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  Angus:
  
  
  -3 yr. old purebred Irish wolfhound
  
  
  -Certified therapy dog
  
  
  -147.4 lbs.
  
  
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• Equipment
  
  -Backpack for herself, 1 pack for each dog to wear
  
  
  -Benelli Super Black Eagle II 12 gauge shotgun (includes carrying sling)
  
  
  *About 100 shells (half in backpack, half in vehicle)
  
  
  - Horton Legend Ultra Lite Crossbow (includes carrying sling)
  
  
  *About 20 crossbow bolts (in quiver)
  
  
  -Fully stocked ambulance with half a tank of gas (taken from overrun refuge camp)
  
  
  -1 week's worth of food and water for her and the dogs (Found in abandoned buildings, homes, stores, off bodies of dead survivors)
  
  
  
• Skills
  
  Strengths:
  
  
  -Dog training
  
  
  -Administering medical care
  
  
  -Search-and-rescue
  
  
  -Dealing with stress
  
  
  -Shooting (Crossbow and shotguns)
  
  
  Weakness:
  
  
  -Trusting and opening up to people
  
  
  -Forgiveness (Others and herself)
  
  
  -Starting fires and other survival skills
  
  
  -Asthma and total colorblindness
  
  
  

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[Kestrel]

I'd love feedback and constructive criticism for her. Is there too much details?

 

[TwilightFire]

It's a very well written character sheet! Well balanced and consitant. My only question is: did she stay in Alaska long enough to become an EMT/SAR dog handler? How long did she stay in EMT handling? How far is she willing to go in the apocalypse, what are her morals? Where did she get her supplies? Why does she trust people, despite being shuffled from house to house in the foster system? What about her fiancee, did his death leave any scars on her?

 

[Kestrel]

Thanks for reading through it! Very good questions. I will work adding that in. Here are the answers though: She went through SAR handler training in Alaska, and when Koda was retired she quit, moved back to Atlanta, became a paramedic, and later met her fiancé. His death made her doubt the existence of love, romantic or otherwise, because he was also her best friend. She will take care of her own group, but other survivors and outsiders are mostly on their own. She ransacks homes and buildings for supplies later in the apocalypse, but at the beginning she was in a refuge camp. It was overrun and she escaped with some supplies. Her decision to trust people depends on the dogs. If they trust them, she'll be more willing to give them a chance.

 

[TwilightFire]

So she's more of a, "I'll do what it takes to protect me and my family or friends" character than a, "free space to everyone?" Does she have a hard time naturally trusting people because she has no close bonds other than her dog? How does she handle emergency situations? What's pushing her to continue, even through the apocalypse?

 

[Kestrel]

Yes to the first 2 questions. She's learned humans close to her either die, or betray her. She keeps a cool, level head in most emergency situations because she's had so much vast experience with emergencies and disasters. She still wants to find her sisters, and she's been so determined for so long to survive that giving up just isn't an option. She wants to survive to care for the dogs, find her sisters and prove to herself that she can survive in any situation. Thanks for taking the time to read this and ask questions. It's been really helpful.

 

[Tryss]

I really like this character. She's incredibly well thought out. I had similar questions to the ones posed in the previous comments but since you've addressed those I only have one other issue with it.


Being placed in an out-of-state home while in foster care is incredibly difficult. There's so much paperwork involved. (So much more than what would be for her to swap homes in the same city/county.) Not to mention that if she were kicked out of a certain amount of homes, she would have been sent to a group home. There are specific group homes for "unplaceable" children. They are usually filled with other children who have similar pasts.

 

[Kestrel]

Thank you, @Tryss. I


didn't know that. I will edit that, then.

 

[Hercynia]

Ah, spotted a minor mistake.


"Each new place, she looked for her younger sisters, but she never did."


Other than that really nothing I can see to criticise. Good job!

 

[Kestrel]

Thanks @ResonantStorm. I'll fix that typo.

 

[sydmorg]

I like her for many different reasons:


1. No offense to anyone, but rarely do we see characters who embrace their ownership of pets as much as real humans do. I like that she has her dogs and loves them enough to mention them.


2. Phoenix seems to have some true human qualities. I love characters that make me hate them though love the true sense of humanity and the same need to look passed flaws as you do in the real world.

 

[Kestrel]

I like her for many different reasons:
1. No offense to anyone, but rarely do we see characters who embrace their ownership of pets as much as real humans do. I like that she has her dogs and loves them enough to mention them.


2. Phoenix seems to have some true human qualities. I love characters that make me hate them though love the true sense of humanity and the same need to look passed flaws as you do in the real world.

Thank you. I've tried to make her realistic.


1. Most people who's characters have pets don't make them as important.


2. I want my characters to be flawed, and get have redeeming qualities. I haven't met any humans who are completely good, or completely bad. It's interesting to see her face her flaws, doubts, insecurities, etc in the roleplays I've used her in.