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[SolemnSongbird]

Hey look! This might actually be able to come back. :T

 

[Krashkube]

Yeah, again, sorry for being so inactive but when your comp breaks down not much you can do

i'll put a post up tomorrow since it's late as hell

 

[Gravitational Force]

Yay!

 

[Ammokkx]

Still here, still willing to write.

YoungX skulzortheskeletalsamurai Vagabond Spectre You guys still with us too?

 

[skulzortheskeletalsamurai]

Yeah I'm here.

 

[Ammokkx]

Krashkube Yo, would it be alright if I made some slight changes to Sayaka's deck? I figured she didn't need that many Gagaga monsters, so I felt like changing it around like this:

Gagaga Head x 2 > x 1, replaced with Cardcar D x 1
Gagaga Magician x 3 > x 2, replaced with Tasuke Knight x 1
Gagaga Girl x 3 > x 2, replaced with One-Shot Wand x 1
Gagaga Sister x 3 > x 2, replaced with Dark Horizon x 1

Additionally, I'd like to propose two custom cards:

Desperate Stunt
[Normal Trap Card]
When a monster declares an attack: Target the attacking monster; Take Damage equal to half its ATK, negate that attack and end the Battle Phase.

Last-Chance Guard
[Normal Trap Card]
When either player would take damage from a card effect: Pay half your Life Points; that damage becomes 0. Neither player takes damage until the end of this turn.

 

[YoungX]

Still here, still willing to write.

YoungX skulzortheskeletalsamurai Vagabond Spectre You guys still with us too?

Yeh. Just waiting for my cs and all dat.

 

[Krashkube]

Krashkube Yo, would it be alright if I made some slight changes to Sayaka's deck? I figured she didn't need that many Gagaga monsters, so I felt like changing it around like this:

Gagaga Head x 2 > x 1, replaced with Cardcar D x 1
Gagaga Magician x 3 > x 2, replaced with Tasuke Knight x 1
Gagaga Girl x 3 > x 2, replaced with One-Shot Wand x 1
Gagaga Sister x 3 > x 2, replaced with Dark Horizon x 1

Additionally, I'd like to propose two custom cards:

Desperate Stunt
[Normal Trap Card]
When a monster declares an attack: Target the attacking monster; Take Damage equal to half its ATK, negate that attack and end the Battle Phase.

Last-Chance Guard
[Normal Trap Card]
When either player would take damage from a card effect: Pay half your Life Points; that damage becomes 0. Neither player takes damage until the end of this turn.

yeah that's fine

 

[Krashkube]

Yeh. Just waiting for my cs and all dat.

CS is fine

I won't be on for another couple days tho due to christmas, i can probably be on 27th/28th tho

 

[firestorm]

Cool am i aceepted

 

[Krashkube]

no

- numerous spelling mistakes + random accented a's and e's, I don't want that bleeding into your RPing so please fix that
- generic edgy backstory
- deck is barely readable, plus you can't have 4 spear dragons (max of any card is 3)

Spoiler: Just putting the customs here for readability

Hell Hound
DARK | ??? (probably beast, fiend or zombie) | Level 4 | Effect
(This card is always treated as a "Death" card.)
When a Zombie monster attacks this card, you can Special Summon 1 "Hellstorm" (from where? Hand, deck or grave?), and if you do, destroy all Spell/Trap cards on the field.
400/1000

Dragon Lancer
??? (probably DARK) | Dragon | Level 4 | Effect
(This card is always treated as a "Death" card.)
Cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. You can Special Summon this card (from your hand) when a Dragon monster is sent to the GY.
2000/1400

Hellstorm
DARK | ??? (idk on this one, fiend or zombie?) | Level 8 | Effect
(This card is always treated as a "Death" card.)
As its effect is just Hell Hound's effect, it seems redundant to make this card do the same thing.

Death Saber
Equip Spell
Equip only to a "Death" monster. The monster equipped with this card gains 400 ATK and 500 DEF.

Death Wall
Continuous Trap
Target 1 monster your opponent controls. While this card is on the field, that monster cannot attack "Death" monsters.

Death Dragon Cards
Normal Trap
When a Dragon monster is destroyed: Special Summon 1 "Dragon Lancer" (from where?)

 

[firestorm]

Alright Will do

 

[YoungX]

no

- numerous spelling mistakes + random accented a's and e's, I don't want that bleeding into your RPing so please fix that
- generic edgy backstory
- deck is barely readable, plus you can't have 4 spear dragons (max of any card is 3)

Spoiler: Just putting the customs here for readability

Hell Hound
DARK | ??? (probably beast, fiend or zombie) | Level 4 | Effect
(This card is always treated as a "Death" card.)
When a Zombie monster attacks this card, you can Special Summon 1 "Hellstorm" (from where? Hand, deck or grave?), and if you do, destroy all Spell/Trap cards on the field.
400/1000

Dragon Lancer
??? (probably DARK) | Dragon | Level 4 | Effect
(This card is always treated as a "Death" card.)
Cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. You can Special Summon this card (from your hand) when a Dragon monster is sent to the GY.
2000/1400

Hellstorm
DARK | ??? (idk on this one, fiend or zombie?) | Level 8 | Effect
(This card is always treated as a "Death" card.)
As its effect is just Hell Hound's effect, it seems redundant to make this card do the same thing.

Death Saber
Equip Spell
Equip only to a "Death" monster. The monster equipped with this card gains 400 ATK and 500 DEF.

Death Wall
Continuous Trap
Target 1 monster your opponent controls. While this card is on the field, that monster cannot attack "Death" monsters.

Death Dragon Cards
Normal Trap
When a Dragon monster is destroyed: Special Summon 1 "Dragon Lancer" (from where?)

I think Hell Hound/Hellstorm effect should need a bit of a rework. The whole zombie consition is nice and all but summoning a stronger version that also includes a Harpie's Feather Duster effect is pretty insane. Now granted this is a text-based RP, consistency and what is not an issue. It should probably stand to reason that a rework is necessary.

 

[Ammokkx]

Also a note: "Death" is a thing in the OCG, and it's always translated as either 'Doom' or 'Des' depending on the OCG spelling. TCG would never put the word 'Death' in their card lore. Similarly, 'Hell' is also always localized as something different. Example: Stygian.

It's why I made Antitopian's effect be called 'Dark-Wing Pressure' instead of 'Moon Pressure' because while the OCG calls Utopia's effect 'Moon Barrier', the TCG calls it 'Light-Wing Shield'.

I know this is ironic coming for me since I spent two pages ragging on Antitopian's localization, but consistency is important. Especially when cards are treated as other names for... no real reason.

Just call the cards in the archetype 'Infernal Doom/Infernal Des' and things will be a lot easier. It incorporates both a translation for 'Death' and 'Infernal' refers to the 'Hell' portion of some of the cards.

EDIT; So in my proposed re-name, it'd look something like:

Infernal Doom Hound

Infernal Doom Lancer / Infernal Doom Dragon / Infernal Doom Dragon Lancer

Infernal Doom Storm

Infernal Doom Saber

Infernal Doom Wall

Infernal Doom Dragon Cards (would personally call it something like Awakening of the Infernal Doom Dragon or Infernal Doom Awakening)

 

[firestorm]

Thanks i fixed it. I hope his back story is not to dark now

 

[Ammokkx]

Thanks i fixed it. I hope his back story is not to dark now

Errr... When I suggested those names, I did so in lieu of being able to dodge the 'Death' clause in their effects. Let me write up what I mean:
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Infernal Doom Dragon Lancer
( DARK) | Dragon | Level 4 | Effect
Cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. You can Special Summon this card from your hand when a Dragon monster is sent to the GY.
1800/1400
-----
This is Doom Dragon Without the 'Death' clause. Thus, your Spell and Trap cards would look like:
-----
Infernal Doom Saber
Equip Spell
Equip only to a 'Infernal Doom' monster. The equipped monster gains 400 ATK and 500 DEF.

Infernal Doom Wall
Continuous Trap
Target 1 monster your opponent controls. While this card is on the field, that monster cannot attack 'Infernal Doom' monsters you control.

Awakening the Dragon of Doom
Normal Trap
(This card is always treated as a 'Infernal Doom' card.)
When a Dragon monster is destroyed: Special Summon 1 'Infernal Doom Dragon Lancer' from the GY.
______________________________

Also, you might want to make a little more cards or make this series a little more cohesive and synergetic. Requiring both Dragons and Zombies in the same deck is a little... weird? Dragon Lancer is off in its own little world while Hound and Storm only work with themselves. Wall and Saber are completely okay as support, though Awakening only being able to summon 1 specific card from the GY once makes it seem like a worse Call of the Haunted.

(yes I know it's ironic considering my custom cards are pretty bad, but they fill a niche no other cards really do for scripting a duel; being really good for protecting your partner in an anime-styled tag duel.)

 

[firestorm]

They are from death thats Why they only work amongst themselves also if i were to make more custom cards it would get to far in What I have planed for later on hua story. I always like to devolpe a charter as i go. I like to detail out his story

 

[Ammokkx]

They are from death thats Why they only work amongst themselves also if i were to make more custom cards it would get to far in What I have planed for later on hua story. I always like to devolpe a charter as i go. I like to detail out his story

Uuuuuh...

You do realise that everything I'm saying is because I'm trying to make them only work among themselves right? In the way I word things, 'Infernal Doom' is the archetype you use and only 'Infernal Doom' cards would be affected. As far as I'm aware, nothing in YGO currently is called 'Infernal Doom' so it wouldn't conflict with earlier existing cards, unlike 'Death' which would have to be localized as 'Des' for the TCG, of which a whole boatload of cards exist for. If you called your stuff 'Death' then you would actually accomplish the opposite of what you're describing.

Also, I'm saying to make 'Infernal Doom Dragon Lancer' work more with 'Infernal Doom Storm' and 'Infernal Doom Hound' as he seems incredibly out of place. For all intents and purposes, Dragon Lancer is a generic dragon card which will have little to do with Infernal Doom cards, especially since your 'Death' cards don't stick to one specific type.

 

[firestorm]

Thé what you are saying you want me to make à féw more Monsters traps for them also death gave thé to Hum but he us mot mânes for it

 

[Ammokkx]

Thé what you are saying you want me to make à féw more Monsters traps for them

Well, alongside what Young X said about nerfing Storm and Hound's effect, I'd make Infernal Doom Dragon Lancer and Awakening the Dragon of Doom more like this:

Infernal Doom Dragon Lancer
DARK | Dragon | Level 4 | Effect
Cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. You can Special Summon this card from your hand when a 'Infernal Doom' monster is sent to the GY.
1800/1400

Awakening the Dragon of Doom
Continuous Trap
(This card is always treated as a 'Infernal Doom' card.)
Once per turn, when a 'Infernal Doom' monster is destroyed and sent to the GY (except 'Infernal Doom Dragon Lancer): Special Summon 1 'Infernal Doom Dragon Lancer' from the GY.
____

This would make it a lot more thematic, in my eyes.

 

[firestorm]

Makes sense thanks for helping i Will use that

 

[skulzortheskeletalsamurai]

People are so dense

 

[Vagabond Spectre]

Still here, still willing to write.

YoungX skulzortheskeletalsamurai Vagabond Spectre You guys still with us too?

Yes i am still willing to!

I got sick from the past few days. Stopping me from RPing but i am all good now!

 

[YoungX]

Yes i am still willing to!

I got sick from the past few days. Stopping me from RPing but i am all good now!

Should be fun.

 

[Ammokkx]

Vagabond Spectre Did Hiro say that last one out loud? The 'Again, talking to himself' part confuses me.