The Fall of Gaia : Character Creation

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War Paint

The Princess

?THE FALL OF GAIA?


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The Lost War of the Tragic World of Ominia.

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Welcome to The Fall of Gaia's Character Creation thread! Here you can create your own character to play within the story of The Fall of Gaia. Please refer to "The Fall of Gaia : The Lost War" located in the Fantasy / Supernatural Storyline & Info section of this forum for the original story and for information on character races, classes, and additional information. If you have any questions, be sure to contact me by private message or refer to our FAQs.


Thank you for showing interest in playing a part in The Fall of Gaia!


PLEASE REFER TO THE SECTION TITLED


"AUTHOR'S NOTES" BEFORE POSTING.

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?AUTHOR'S NOTES?


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A Beast Tamer and vowed warrior of the Valkyries.

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Hello and welcome to "The Fall of Gaia : The Lost War." I'm very pleased to hear that you have interest in taking part in my roleplay. It was inspired by a favorite game of mine but then grew into something much more and far off from my original idea. I put a lot of time, effort, and thought into this roleplay and hope you enjoy it and like the concept. And yes, this is my second attempt with the roleplay. I wasn't thoroughly attached to my characters and didn't like how the roleplay started so inspiration was lost rather quickly. Here's to a new try!


About Character Creation; here you can create your own unique character to feature in the roleplay of The Fall of Gaia, but before you start creating a character, make sure you have a firm grasp on how the race, class, and additional information of your character will work in the storyline. If you have any questions, please refer to the FAQ section or ask me yourself. Before your character is accepted, my co-Game Master Humor or I will inspect your character down to the smallest detail to make sure they will flow well with the storyline and do not conflict with any additional information or plans I have for the roleplay. I do ask that all characters carrying the "Mary Sue" gene, please be saved for another roleplay because all characters here need depth and unique characteristics in order to survive the Lost War.


I am accepting characters at any time until further notice and everyone participating in the roleplay is allowed up to four characters at a time; meaning, if you kill off one of your characters or if they die, you are free to create another one. However, you cannot duplicate a character that has died and must come up with a new, unique character to play. Characters can die and if your character finds themselves in a battle they can't handle, they may die. So proceed with caution and have fun creating your character!


I hope you enjoy your time here and thank you very much!

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?RULES?


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Eva, the Goddess of Equality.

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  1. Literacy. This roleplay is made for the literate; please be knowledgeable of being literate and having proper grammar. Being literate does not mean you have to be an extremely high experienced roleplayer. There will be no punishment or shame if you forget to place a comma in a certain spot or how to spell a word. This is an understanding roleplay.
  2. No one-liners. This roleplay will never, ever accept one-liners and those who continuously post one paragraph. This roleplay is driven off of creativity and detail, so please be kind those roleplaying with you and respond with as much creativity as you can to move the roleplay forward.
  3. No Mary-Sues. All characters come with flaws, different personalities, and weaknesses. No character is perfect and I personally will not allow any characters in this roleplay with the typical characteristic combination of timid, shy, frail, with a tragic back story of her parents beating her for everyone to pity her. If there is one character I cannot stand, it's that character. Have a realistic character.
  4. No claiming a character. When I say "no claiming a character," I mean you cannot look at someone else's character and say, "Hey, can they be my character's love interest?" For one, they've never met. For two, that's just annoying.
  5. Do not mix character photos. In Character Creation, I do not want a mixture of photos from real to anime to descriptions. Photos are allowed, but they are only "anime" types, and I do not want characters with modern day clothes and school girl outfits flooding my fantasy world roleplay, thank you.
  6. No God Moding. This goes for all races and types of characters. No character is indestructible, whether they are a God or not. Here, I make the decision of who dies and who does not die. If your characters get into a fight, fight realistically. Also, this means you cannot kill off Gloia's Beasts without my agreement and you cannot take over my roleplay. If Gloia or Gaia are reborn or if another God takes over or even if someone else becomes a God, it will be on my call.
  7. Be polite. While taking part in my roleplay, you must be kind and polite to all roleplayers. I do not want to see any fights between roleplayers or someone will be kicked out of my roleplay.
  8. PG-13. I'm not one-hundred percent sure the full rules on PG-13 on this site and if I am wrong, I will correct myself. But anything past kissing must go somewhere else. As long as it's not on our main thread or where we can see it, I don't care what happens as long as it goes somewhere else. Other than that, we will keep a PG-13 rating on this roleplay in general.
  9. Four characters per roleplayer. Each roleplayer taking part in this roleplay can have up to four characters and they can kill them off at any time. Just because you can only make up to four characters at a time does not mean you cannot create another character after yours has died. I personally just believe four is enough before it becomes a hassle to roleplay.
  10. Be realistic. Be realistic from fights, to wounds, to facing enemies, and even to love. In the real world, love does not last forever and people can fall in and out of love, and cheating can happen. If your character falls in love, they can die, break-up, or leave them for someone else. Just because they fall in love does not mean they have to be forever and always within the roleplay.



?CHARACTER CREATION?


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Spirit of Legends; keeper of hero's tales and the legends of lands.

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Name: (Please replace "Name" with your character's first and last name; center their name.)


Appearance: (Please replace "Appearance" with a picture of your character; anime only.)


Age:


Gender:


Hair:


Eyes:


Skin:


Race:


Class:


Faith: (The God, Goddess, or faith your character follows.)


Weapon(s):


Mage Element: (Only answer if your character is a mage; this is their most powerful element.)


Wing Color: (Only if Angel or Valkyrie; choose between white, grey, and black to reflect your belief.)


Inner Beast: (Only answer if your character is an Anashi. This is the animal they are morphed with.)


Tamed Beast: (Only answer if your character is a Beast Tamer. This is the name of their beast.)


Appearance of Beast: (Only place a picture or description if your character is a Beast Tamer.)


Appearance Notes: (Please note if your character has any tattoos, scars, markings or a physical appearance you want to make note of. If they are Anashi, please take note of their tattoos and markings. If they're Elves, please take note of the length and conditions of their ears.)


Biography: (Please also include in your character's story if they wish to raise Gloia, Gaia, or any other God to rule Ominia, if they believe in any God ruling Ominia, or wish to become a God so we can understand their standing in the Lost War. You do not have to list their entire story if you wish to have mystery to your character, but please place some detail of your character to give us an understand of what they're like.)


Extra Notes: (Anything else you want to make note of, if anything.)


?ACCEPTED CHARACTERS?


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Serenity; First Angel and Leader of the Valkyries

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  • Cressy - Xohar Cordalo
  • Don Valence - Cyrus Altriedes and Siyena Altriedes
  • Dino - Rered Rafariu
  • Haley - Adela Primress
  • Gray - Blaine Seria
  • Rifleman - Thomas Osaris and Sarah Osaris.
  • paipai900 - Alys Boudica
  • CharChar45 - Eleanor Leatherwood
  • ninbinz - Sir George
  • Rafi - Lanus Nox



?PENDING CHARACTERS?


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A Black Winged Angel; follower of Gloia and child of Serenity.

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  • Cressy - Abril Daiyun, Joan, and Unnamed Character.
  • paipai900 - Jia Hua
  • CharChar45 - Ivar Nadeau
  • Drez - Dratha Telmiras
  • TheMadHatter44 - Mana Mortan
  • EliCarter - Marisol Genovia Lux Illumina



?MY CHARACTERS?


FIONA DEMENTO





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Age: Twenty-two / Twenty-five.


Gender: Female.


Hair: Fair Blonde.


Eyes: Blue-Green.


Skin: Fair Porcelain.


Race: Angel.


Class: Valkyrie.


Faith: Gaia.


Weapon(s):

  • Glory, a golden spear forged by the knights of Illuminus. Attached to the staff is a pair of chains for Fiona to grasp after she has launched the spear at her foe to yank them back to her. At the end of the chains are two balls of iron for her to attack with as well if she were to spin her spear.
  • Victory, a golden shield forged as well by the knights of Illumius and blessed by the priests of Gaia. The shield is fashioned with decor of an angel's wings with fierce spikes protruding from the sheild in order for her to use as a weapon as well as a method of defense.
  • Truth, a small sword meant for gladiators and warriors given to her by Serenity when she was born. The sword was said to have been hers in her previous life and held by Serenity to be given to Fiona after she was reborn from Gaia. Fiona keeps it attached at her hip for only close combat.


Wing Color: White.


Biography:


  • When Fiona was reborn, all she could remember was the harsh light of life being breathed back within her as her eyes shot open to the powerful lift in her chest. She felt a cool breeze, like a spring evening welcoming her with the scent of wildflowers dancing in a friendly wind. The fragrance of roses was overpowering, shaking her but also embracing her within the world she had been born back into. She fell from the sky, just as any other Angel with the brightest beam of light spreading across the land to greet a coming Angel into the land with the blessing of Gaia radiating from her porcelain skin. When her knees kissed the soft earth again of a vacant meadow residing just within Illuminus's countryside, she was greeted with the welcoming hand of the crimson halo baring Angel of Gaia: Serenity. Taking her hand, Fiona was born again within her life of Ominia, baring the wings gifted to her by Gaia. She was raised by Serenity with little knowledge of her previous life except for how she had earned the privilege to be reborn as an Angel.



Extra Notes:


- Fiona is Lilith's older sister.


- Fiona has absolutely no memory of her past life or what her sister even looks like, nor her name.


- The queen despises Fiona with all her being and has done everything in her power to unofficially cast her out from the kingdom.


DELILAH "LILITH" DEMENTO





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Age: Nineteen / Twenty-two.


Gender: Female.


Hair: Crimson Red / Teal.


Eyes: Blue-Green / Red.


Skin: Fair Porcelain / Pale Violet.


Race: Demon.


Class: Succubus.


Faith: Gloia.


Weapon(s):

  • Demonic Grasp - When Lilith was reborn and her form was altered to fit her new demon body, she was given very long nails as sharp as daggers. Her nails are a form of her weapon as well as her most used line of offense. When using her demonic form and powers, her nails can grow to an extreme length in order for her to pierce through her victims and can easily cut through flesh with a swift swipe. Her nails are always pointed and kept at a decent length for a succubus, ready to attack at any given moment.
  • The Embrace - Along with her bat-like wings, two hooks reside at the peak of her wing's arch. These serve just as well as her claws, able to hook into flesh and grab onto whatever is near her. At the edges of the other points of her wings resides smaller horns which can also help her grip onto her victims and be used for defense when shielding herself with her wings if anyone wishes to run towards her. Her wings also cause her to be very swift from flight and quick, giving her unnatural speed which can be used to her advantage.
  • Demon's Whip - A demon's whip is a term often used for their tails, if they bare one. It is very common for succubi to bare tails with a spade or pointed tip. They lash around quickly and can pierce through wood, flesh, and even sometimes metal. As sharp as a fierce sword, they are very deadly when one is not aware of their snake-like movements. Lilith often fashions her tail around her to cover her body or be worn as a belt.
  • A Succubus's Charm - As known, succubi are very fatal when it comes to the hearts of men, and even some women. They use their bodies, eyes, voices, and touch to their advantage. Succubi tend to be very persuasive and their voices can be very misleading, almost giving them the power of a siren to cause men's minds to muddle and bend to their will, depending on the strength of the man's mind. When they cannot speak, they can use their female charms of their bodies to lure men into their traps and whenever someone locks eyes with a succubus, they fall to their hypnosis, which is where warriors and knights have come to know to never look a sultry woman in the eyes. Succubi are often formed to be any man's desire but when a succubus ventures into a man's mind during his sleep in attempt to poison his mind, they can take the form of whoever they desire as long as they are either asleep or under their hypnosis.


Appearance Notes: Before Delilah was reborn as Lilith, she was one of the fairest maidens in the land with hair as red as the petals of a crimson rose and skin as white as snow. Her eyes bared the same color of her family's and her sister, but since her rebirth, she bares a only her previous body and face with all her noted features taking a dramatic change. Lilth also bares dark purple, bat-like wings and grey devil-like horns curving from her head with frightfully sharp nails.


Biography:


  • Lilith was originally born to the world as Delilah Demento, daughter to the Demento family and younger sister to Fiona Demento. When Lilith was born, she took on the genetic appearance of her mother with fiery red hair and skin as pale as the moon but bare her father's eyes, just as her sister. Growing up, Delilah was always the curious child and the troublemaker, the one who was always scolded and had to be constantly watched over by her older sister but no matter if she was in trouble or not, she always laughed like everything around her was a game to her. When her family attempted to cross the land in order to move to New Pearl and she had to endure the site of her father being brutally murdered while her mother was tossed to the ground by the merchants, she was silent for an entire month. It was assumed that she would never speak again within her second week at the orphanage in New Pearl and she became quite the hassle at night from constantly sleep walking away from the orphanage.


    One night she even disappeared and wasn't found until three day's time, deep within the woods just beyond New Pearl, staring down a well. That was the day Delilah began to speak again when the priests shook her and scolded her for disappearing, claiming she could have died. "I wasn't going to! The man in red was taking care of me!" She exclaimed, screaming and kicking away from the priests. This was when the priests began to hold a firm grip on Delilah's restrictions, keeping her from playing outside after deeming the man she saw as none other than Korth. It was to protect her soul from him, they told her, as she watched the other children and her sister play outside. As Delilah grew, the priests began to notice her fascination with water. At first it was assumed perhaps she was gifted by Gaia and was to be a mage, but as they waited for her gifts, they found nothing but the simple fact that Delilah would stare at water for hours but never touch it. She would never swim with the children during the winter but instead watch them, saying things like the Red Man said it's not time for her to drown and such. One of the exercises the priests attempted to get the "Red Man" from her mind was baptizing her within the ocean for a blessing of Gaia. Delilah was locked away in the children's corridors for a week for biting one of the priests until he bled after going into a fit of hysteria to escape them.



Extra Notes:


- Lilith was named by Korth.


- Lilith is Fiona's younger sister.


- Like all other succubi, Lilith is in love with Korth.


- Lilith has yet to come into contact with the queen of Illuminus so her being reborn is unknown.


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"My wrath shall be felt, through the light of the sun and the stars. I am the child of the moon at the true ruler of all the lands, by the word of the stars. I will cleanse the land of the abomination its become by my light."

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Age: Nineteen.


Gender: Female.


Hair: Starlight Silver.


Eyes: Sunset Golden.


Skin: Pale Indigo.


Race: Elven and Anashi.


Class: Mage.


Faith: Herself.


Weapon(s):


Rah'mya, in translation meaning: "Moon of Rage." A moon shaped staff given to her as a wedding present from her tribal leader. It's a beautiful golden staff that the tribal leader had stowed away from their ancestors from before their journey to the forests of Amazi. On the moon, words from the Bara'ku's language are carved witin with their tribe's motto, "From the grace of stars and moonlight, to the fire of a setting sun, let the earth rise." At the tips of the staff is a sharp point fashioned within the staff to be used as offense, but the large shape of the moon can be used as a method of defense from it's large, circular size. S'aurora focuses her energy and magic through the staff.


Illumination, the power gifted to S'aurora by Gaia. It is a very rare power that is not often seen, but somehow was given to the "moon child." It is the overpowering ability to summon light to blind her enemies, burn their skin with the sun's flames, and destroy any darkness, like the sun. It is the opposing power to darkness, but is not overpowering to the skill. It can also be used to heal minor wounds and bring forth balls of light to act of objects of force.


Mage Element: Light.


Appearance Notes: S'aurora has an odd appearance for being the only one of her race. Her legs are built almost in a human manner, but are cut off after her knees to morph into that of a satyr's with pale white fur to come into hooves of an animal. Her ears are long and perked of that of an elf's, but are located higher than an elf's from her Anashi blood. A horn protrudes from her head that pulls from her indigo skin into a pale silver but as the horn gathers to a tip, colors of gold begin to settle and swirl into the silver. S'aurora bares tribal tattoos and scars given to her by her tribe. They were burned into her flesh by the fire of her tribe, then soothed by the healing of her hands to create a deeper indigo on her skin. She was given these markings to signify her gifts to her tribe and were kissed by all of her followers to mark their blessings upon her.


Biography:


  • S'aurora's story is that of a glorious one to those who do know it. To those who speak her name and worship her gifts, she is Ominia's true ruler. She is the light gifted to them by the want for freedom and the mercy the souls weep for. She is the answer to all of Ominia's prayers and the one to bring them into a new world where she would be the mother of a pure world filled with freedom and the righteous will of her people. However, none really know of her story because it is a story that is often never told. The way her tribe tells the story, S'aurora was found in a basket after a storm where the breaking moon illuminated her sleeping face as they wandered out into the sea to embrace this child that had survived the wrath of the vicious waves. The moment her new found father bared witness to her face, they knew she was different not from her animal characteristics, but her elven ears and elegant golden eyes, as well as the glittering horn protruding from her head.


    Taken back to the village of the tribe just within the forest of Amazi, not far from the cherry blossomed trees of Jaisai, she was presented to the foreign Anashi. They admired her strange appearance and she was taken in by the tribe's leader as their own. The tribe gifted her with the name S'aurora, named after the illuminating lights and stars of the night sky, and with the second name of Mya'Sho, meaning simply "moon star."



Extra Notes:


- S'aurora has no idea of what the world is like outside of the Amazi. The only demon she has ever witnessed was the succubus she had seen and does not have any common sense as to what the world is truly like.


- S'aurora's ultimate goal is to become a goddess and rule over Ominia. She was raised on the idea that she was meant to save the world and was born from the stars. She is very sold on this idea and cannot fathom anything other than this idea.


- S'aurora was given the gift of magic by Gaia, not because she's a child of the moon and stars.


- S'aurora's father is still alive and lives within Shadei, not knowing that she's alive.
 
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Xohar Cordalo


The Ultimate Swordsman

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Personality (small Addition): Xohar is a very outgoing and fun guy, he has always been cheery and tries to make people happy by telling jokes or being sarcastic. He likes to live on the edge, be reckless and have fun but in battles it can cost him a lot, it's a habit he's trying to get rid of really. He can sort of be the "LEEERROOOYYYY JJEEENNNKIINNS" in battle (one of the many reasons he fights alone at times). He is an impatient and stubborn guy when it comes to arguments. He has accustomed himself to reading even though he's not a fan he needs it for research. He likes to fight alone so he doesn't jeopardize people by accident or something. He worries too much about others like that and he honestly likes doing his own thing. (To be continues)


Small Quote: “Beasts are a mistake, they only need to be erased. Humanity doesn’t need immortal beings walking amongst them. It only causes trouble, all the problems now are because of the immortals. I am simply addressing the problem a bit more...Directly.” - Xohar


Age: 22


Gender: Male


Hair: White he was born with it and no one knows why


Eyes: Green, it only makes him more mysterious


Skin: Light skin color


Race: He looks mostly Human


Class: Beast/Demon Hunter


Faith: He used to believe in Gaia but he has no current Faith aside from the belief the world should be freed from celestials and immortals


Weapon(s):


6 Blades: What made him such a well known swordsmen and Demon/Beast Hunter was his remarkable Talent with blades. Being able to quickdraw and slash with several different blades at a time.


Havran (1st): Havran is an enchanted blade that was a gift from the First Betrayer, he found it one night at his side while he was sleeping in the cold snow, he at the time hadn’t decided his future as a Beast Hunter. He believes this sword guided him and it’s usually the first or second to draw. The sword never dulls or breaks against other weapons, unless they are magical as well. It is designed to kill demons and beasts and it also sucks magic if it comes into direct contact but it gets heavier and hotter the more powerful and the more magic it consumes. The way it releases the magic is by submerging it into water. He isn’t sure of it but he believes Havran can harvest and store the soul of a Beast.


Curse (6th): Curse is a blade Xohar found in Larin in one of his adventures. He has fought a demon with it and knows the Raw and ruthless power of the blade. It is the 6th blade and he would only use it as a last resort. The blade is very powerful. He keeps it chained around the hilt so it doesn’t unsheath unless he opens it with a small key. The sword sends dark messages and voices through the users mind, making them slowly slip into the darkness and fall to insanity, always trying to kill themselves. Xohar barely made it alive and he vowed to never use it. But yet, he still kept it.


4 other blades: The 4 others are regular elite blades, very sharp and deadly as well and he is adept in using them. Although they are more vulnerable to breaking and dulling which is why he likes to take them to blacksmiths every now and then. They are named


2nd: Eclipse


3rd: Kreno


4th: Titan Fall


5th: Wrath


First Hook: He carries around the hook of when he caught his first fish, a reminder of where he was born and to never forget New Pearl is his home. (Could be used in emergencies to gouge eyes out > :) )


Appearance Notes: He has what look like red tattoos in the more of tendrils going up to the center of his right forearm. This was from when he used Curse, they are mostly reminders not to use it, like a Scar. He is around 5’11.


Biography:


  • Xohar was found in New Pearl as a small child, his origins were a mystery but the parents only left a note to the elder saying his name. Xohar was an odd child at first, the elders discussed if it was wise to bring him to their peaceful town, his white hair and mysterious green eyes were a bit off putting until an old man rose up and took Xohar as his own. Xohar’s life was the best as he described it, he was cared for by the Old man (Harold Mcroul) and treated as a son. His life was peaceful without much tragedy aside from the village not entirely welcoming him. But he believed he had a wonderful life. When he learned that he was adopted at the age of 8 he understood. For a child he was mature and knew that whoever his parents were they were simply not ready or were having problems of their own. As a child of faith, he believed he was blessed. Life went well until he was 9, when he first found out what Beasts were.



Extra Notes: He likes to name his weapons. The Cursed Faces (What he called them)


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Oh and he wishes to one day kill a beast of Gloia. He is currently searching for Rathmen, The Gnasher. His top goals for Killing beasts at Cerbus, Rathmen and Krane/Khor.


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Her Application/Character Page


-Joan (Name Unsure)-


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OMG War~! You're bringing Fall of Gaia back?! :D Consider me signed up, and bringing my characters back from the previous running! 



Cyrus Altriedes


The Seraph of Mercy


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Age: Unknown due to memory loss of previous life. (Officially twenty-three years as an Angel)


Gender: Male


Hair: Metallic gray; silver.


Eyes: A mix of gray and blue, giving an icy appearance.


Skin: Pale white.


Race: Human (Formerly an Angel)


Class: Mage (Formerly a Valkyrie)


Faith: Formerly Gaia, now without faith.


Weapon(s):


-Remembrance, a blue-steel shortsword found within an abandoned temple in Larin. It is inscribed with magical runes of Angelic origin.


-Compassion, a gauntlet crafted from white iron that he found within an abandoned temple in Larin. It is inscribed with magical runes of Angelic origin and amplifies his Divine magic.


Mage Element: Divine


*Manipulation of light particles, giving him the ability to change sources of light solid to use as a weapon or defense.


*Prone to seizure-like visions which reveal to him possible paths in the future; any of them may or may not happen, with most of them never coming to fruition.


*He can heal minor and standard wounds (ex. A deep cut on an arm or leg), but is not strong enough to heal anything overly fatal.


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Wing Color: None (Once possessed white wings, but were changed gray upon his “sentence”.)


Appearance Notes:


·Feminine in features, body similar in build to a female’s with the exception of breasts and slimmer hips.


·No facial hair, or does it ever grow.


·Keeps hair long, about shoulder-length.


·He has a raven-shaped tattoo on his right shoulder, a mark he cannot explain.


Biography:


  • Even though his memories had long-since been lost, Cyrus could still remember the feeling of being reborn; the return into warm flesh, the intake of chill air, and the return of sensation to his being. Taken from the darkness, he had been granted the light of life once more, all at the behest of the Goddess he had served in his previous life. Despite the fact that he had almost no knowledge of his mortal life, he embraced the chance at a new life dedicated once again to Gaia. In his time on the mortal plane, he had been a warrior priest who fought and died for the sake of those he deemed as innocent, for his heart was gentle and held no room for hatred or resentment, even for the very creatures who had slain him. Mercy was the way he lived his life, and it would be with mercy that he would serve his Goddess as one of her Angels. Found and taken in by veteran Angels, he was raised into a world he could only vaguely remember as . . . Ominia.





Extra Notes:


-Cyrus occasionally has small fits of Divination, which can be a liability and an asset, depending on the point of time they take place. He has no control over it.


-Cyrus is often mistaken for a woman at first glance; something that often agitates him.


-On an unexplainable whim, Cyrus tries to avoid Valkyrie and usually goes through great efforts to do so.


-Cyrus' soul is still technically that of an Angel's, but it is simply in a human body.


-Cyrus is the twin brother of the demon Siyena, but has no memory of such blood relation.


Siyena Altriedes


The Mistress of Demise


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Age: Twenty-Three Years (In the World of Ominia)


Gender: Female


Hair: Metallic Silver


Eyes: Blood-red


Skin: Pale White


Race: Demon


Class: Reaper


Faith: Gloia


Weapon(s):


- Lunar Rose, a carbonite war-scythe imbued with a soul-stealing gem and internal spellwork.


- Heartbreaker, a massive black broadsword magically charged with demonic energy and blood from her own body.


- Eternal Rest, a small, curved bone-white dagger with a silver hilt used primarily to slay Angelic foes; it possesses a magical chamber within it to store souls, specifically that of Angels.


Demonic Powers: Necromancy (Such as speaking with the dead, raising weaker undead, and soul-gathering), and Soul Suppression (The ability to hide one’s soul presence).


Wing Color: Deep-black bat wings that disappear upon use of Soul Suppression.


Appearance Notes:


· Slim body and normal curvature, slight in height and low in weight.


· Keeps hair cut short and tied with black bows.


· Has a raven-mark tattoo on her left shoulder, a mark she had since her ‘birth’ into Ominia.


· Often wears extravagant dresses when under cover or at home in Beryl, but switches to light combat gear when out on a ‘hunt’.


Biography:


  • Siyena awoke to a dark, dank, and fiery plane of existence, the demon world of Glorius, with nothing but a black shift and a few memories of her mortal life. All she recalled from her past life was that she had served in the name of Gloia, and had died from her wounds after killing her twin brother, a priest and defender of the goddess, Gaia. At first, anger consumed her; using her new, deadly demonic body, she slaughtered other unfortunate demons that got in her path, causing a path of destruction that drew the attention of some higher, more powerful demon lords. However, upon their arrival, along with one of the demon king's generals, her fury had been sated and she had drifted into a state of relaxation. The underlings beside the general squabbled amongst themselves over her punishment; the unsanctioned slaughter of some of their soldiers had angered them immensely, but the demon general simply stared at her and the chaos she had created. Watching the demon approach, Siyena crossed her legs and leaned back as he stopped beside her. Leaning to her ear, he whispered something into her ear . . . a proposal that made her smile.



Additional Notes:

  • Siyena is often childish and petty, especially when it comes to getting what she wants.
  • She hates the taste of sweets; plain and simple.
  • She is the twin sister of Cyrus, and harbors a deep resentment towards him.
 
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Name: Rered Rafariu


Appearance:
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Without helmet


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Age: 32


Gender: Male


Hair: Brown


Eyes: Green


Skin: Slightly tanned


Race: Anashi


Class: Warrior and a beast tamer


Faith: Is a follower of Gaia.


Weapon(s): A steel Zweihander.


Inner Beast: Wolf


Tamed Beast: A female wolf named Lokia.


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Appearance Notes:
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Goes from the palm of his right hand to just short of his elbow.


Biography: Born in Shadei, Rered has lived there most of his life his parents had brought him up to a nice living or what he thought to be a nice living. The tribal meetings and feasts were always a nice way to end his days. When he started to grow up he was taught how to fight and up hold his families honor by his very own father. He became found with the animal in which his own beast form was, which was a wolf. When he was in his teen years he would go out into the forest and hunts with any wolfs he could find. All was well till the Lost war came. His father being a follower of Gaia Went out to eventually fight off the demons of Gloia.


Before his father left he handed him his Zweihander and told him to keep it close to him and that it would help him in protecting the village should any demons come to attack.A couple of weeks later he stumbled across a wolf, when he returned to the village the wolf had followed him back there. He thought it was hungry so he gave it some of the meat he had hunted earlier in the morning, even after that it wouldn't go away. He went to talk to his mother about what this was, the wolf still following him. She explained to him that he must be what they call a "Beast Tamer" In which a certain beast will become attached to you and that you would become attached to them. From that day forward, after he'd checked the wolfs gender of course, called her Lokia.


It was as if he was using Lokia to fill a gap where his father had used to been until he had gone off to fight. But he couldn't fill the gap completely there would never be anything that could fill that gap, but Lokia was the best thing that could make him forget about it. They spent every waking hour together and slept inside of the same tent. Whenever he would wake up Lokia would be there watching over him like she was protecting him whilst he slept. During the day they would go out hunting together almost as if they were competing to see who could hunt the most animals and bring them back.


It wasn't long before Asari was off fighting himself for his people. He and Lokia were always there to watch each others back, like they could read each others every move and thoughts. After a many bloody battles he was granted his tribal markings on his arm representing honor and loyalty. To this day he still lives in Shadei with his own tent now, he has no kids or family ties apart from his mother and has never seen his father since the day he went to fight, he presumes him dead. He had never had a wife because he'd never had any romantic interests in his village and did not peruse any form of romantic life therefore didn't end up having kids and didn't adopt because he didn't reckon he could cope looking after a child all on his lonesome.


He had never had a "Pack" although he had the blood of a wolf inside of him, he'd never stuck close to one group. He'd always stuck with one or two people but no large groups of people. He was more of a lone wolf than anything, sticking close to Lokia and keeping shut away from most other people apart from his oldest of friends. The reason Rered was honor bound is due to the day of a large battle he and one of his oldest of friends had gone out to fight to protect the town with a group of other men. His friend was struck by the blade of the enemy and with his dying breaths he told Rered to give a note to his brother in Jaisai and before he died clamped the note into Rered's hands. He vowed to get the note to Jaisai and as soon as he returned to the village he started packing a bag of supplies and told his mother he didn't know when or if he would ever be back.


In the middle of day he and Lokia left Shadei to get to Jaisai. He knew it would be a long trip and that there would be dangers along the way. It wasn't long before he came across a battle, some knights being ripped to shreds by what appeared to be demons...Demons so close to Shadei? He'd never even seen a Demon before. He was already scared a trembling slightly so ran as fast as he could away from the battle but still heading in the direction he needed to go. Every day or so they would stop to rest, set up a camp and refill on water and food. Rered and Lokia would normally find a secluded spot most people wouldn't look and went undisturbed through the nights.


After lots of travel they'd found themselves at Hiren, Rered disapproved of most things that happened here, especially the treatment of women inside of these so called brothels. He spent a night here, bought some more supplies at the market and left as fast as possible from all the sinners that resided there. A couple more days of travelling and hopefully he would be at Jaisai. He wasn't wrong after just under another week of walking. He'd arrived, now he just needed to find where his friends brother was. On the back of the note is said where he lived in Jaisai but still Rered spent a couple of others before he found the brother. He knocked on his door and when he opened the door and come in Rered told him of the grave news and gave the note to the brother.


Since then he had returned back to Shadei but only for a short time before he left to try find something else in the world that might fill the gap in his life. He didn't know what the was yet. Maybe it was a wife and family maybe it was the honor of fighting for Gaia or maybe it was to help anyone who'd been stricken by the war and help them get back on their feet. He would soon know, but for now he didn't.


Extra Notes:


Asari is honor bound to his oaths. If he ever makes an oath towards anyone he can not break it.


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Adela Primress





Age:


97 (appears 22, the age she was gifted by Gloia)


Gender:


female


Hair:


Long and white


Eyes:


Dark blue


Skin:


Grey


Race:


Elf


Class:


Witch


Faith:


Gloia


Weapon(s):


"Oblivion"


Oblivion is Adela's staff. It's her primary weapon which helps amplify her blood magic, just as any other staff would. It has a jewel encased in the bulk of the head for soul collecting along with a blade at the end for if she would need to spill her own blood or anyone else around her also, if she is energy drained and is forced to fight melee.


Adela discovered Oblivion while scavenging around Larin for goods she could sell for food. She found it on a body long decomposed and figured Gloia placed it there for her to find.


"Blood Magic"


Blood, she uses either her own blood or any spilled blood within a 30 yard radius. With the blood she is able to poison the mind of her opponent and make him/her see or feel things that are not there. She also has the ability to make the opponent sick with symptoms like: throwing up blood, bleeding from any or all orifices. Mostly her aim is never to kill. It’s to drive the opponent insane and hopefully have them believe that Gloia is their only hope for cure. It’s her brilliant way of recruiting for the dark side.


Appearance Notes:


Adela’s ears are exactly 5 inches long and, she’s done a suburb job of keeping them in mint condition.


Biography:


Adela was born and raised until the Age 22, in Forah like most other elves. She had two loving parents and a few loving siblings but, unlike all of her other elven peers, she was always a bit different. Her family, and the rest of Forah started to take notice of just how different she was when she became around the age of being a young woman, 18, and she started to speak her mind against the things that Forah believed in; such as, being the safe haven for spirits to dwell. She preferred the idea of reaping them and giving them to whichever side she could benefit the most from. Her family was embarrassed and worried for her but it just made sense to her. Why waste so much energy protecting something that life has pretty much given up on?


She also hated how secretive and quiet Forah was, like a nervous bug, waiting to be squashed. It didn't take long for Adela’s words to reach the ears of Forah’s elders and, feeling sympathy and loving worry, the old elves tried to be patient with the wild and selfish girl and teach her their ways of peace and freedom along with her family but, the more they drilled it into her, the more rebellious and hateful she became towards it.


To stir trouble she would sneak out late at night and sleep around with some of the elven married men for the soul purpose to create marital trouble. This planted thoughts in young Adela’s head that she wanted to be a succubus. She had and still has, a dashing body, a sultry voice, lush lips and, long silky hair so, why wouldn't she make a perfect Succubus for Korth and Gloia? Soon after becoming a bit obsessed with the idea, she began to seek out Korth and Gloia, pleading to become a Succubus. She even went as far as reaping some of the souls that dwelled in Forah in secret to offer to Gloia and Korth but, they would not answer her prayers. In return, she became even more spoiled and wrapped within her own selfish mind that she escalated from sleeping around with married men, too stirring bigger trouble between the peaceful citizens of Forah by successfully framing other elves for the disappearing of the few spirits she reaped for Gloia. She would make the men she slept with fall in love with her and play innocent to their calls. She would start fights between families until the point of bloodshed between them, the whole time becoming more and more twisted and hungry for more trouble and selfish fulfillment. She wanted to be more powerful, more wanted, more envied, more feared.


She wanted to be a succubus.


Adela quickly and, impressively developed a keen talent for making people believe things that were not there and feel things that didn't exist until their lives were destroyed by the hands of this beautiful and young elven woman. It was obvious what Adela had to do from there. She had to gain Gloia's favor.


On the night of her 22nd birthday Adela hunted out a young virgin male who was passing through Faroh with a merchant as his assistant. The whole exchange was very easy for Adela. A few sweet words and empty promises of affection and good times and he was wrapped around her finger. With a bottle of wine, her body and a hidden blade as her weapons, Adela lured the nervous teen male away from the tree city and into the woods where she murdered him in Gloia's name.


This was it she thought, this was the day Gloia would have to grant her biggest wish to her but, it didn't happen the way the young elf woman expected. Instead of being granted the abilities of a succubus, Adela was given the abilities of a witch.


After being gifted by Gloia Adela did her best to hide her gifts from her family and the rest of faroh but, it became too difficult, she was starting to get a reputation for being involved in most of the problems in the elven colony. She was shunned by almost every woman and only lusted after by low men. On top of that she still had to be able to reap souls to keep her gift for Gloia. After only s few months of being a witch, her family caught on to her past time hobbies and motivations for being so cruel and selfish and was thrown out of her home, claiming that no daughter of theirs would pursue such evil. No one else in the city wanted anything to do with her either and after a vote of the city councils she was exiled from Faroh never to return.


Adela was heartbroken at the turn of events with her home well, the fact that she was caught and couldn't continue her rendezvous all in all, she never really cared about how they felt. She also had to admit she wasn't happy with the fact she still wasn't given the privilege of being a Succubus but, she understood why Gloia gifted her with what she did. Adela thanked Gloia for her gift and has since devoted her life to bringing Gloia to glory over Omnia by reigning chaos in the hearts and minds of men and women across the lands with the hope that one day she will be finally gifted by being turned to a Succubus. Until then, she still seeks out Korth and his other succubi to try and sway their minds into letting her become what she wants the most. So far, all she succeeded in is having the nickname “Lover girl” from the succubi and being taunted for her wishes. After turning 22 many years ago she decided to leave Forah and now lives mostly in Larin but, travels to places like Hirin and Jasiai often, to claim souls for Gloia.


Extra Notes:


((Don't worry though, I know it seems kind of OP but in the even of a brawl between a character and mine I would ask permission before having any symptoms of her magic attack you and what-not.))

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Blaine Seria


“The Wandering Warrior”


"I live to die"


Appearance


When he was alive


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Post Mortem


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Age


24 years of age Pre-Death/33 years of age Post Mortem


Gender


Male


Hair


Black/Ash


Eyes


Black/Blue


Skin


Pale/Tan


Race


Mix between Human and Ashani/Now Undead


Class


Warrior/Assassin


Faith


No Faith


Weapon


Saruhyo


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Blaine's sword is called the Saruhyo. He channels his inner-beast's (Mountain Lion) "killing intent" or his "ki" into a deadly blade that can take any shape he needs to effectively eliminate those before him. The blade itself is essentially invisible to those who are either afraid of Blaine, or are not at a similar level of combat. The blade used to be intact, but was destroyed, so now he uses the hilt of the sword to animate a blade powered by his inner-beast.


Inner Beast


Because he is only half Ashani, he only has “killing intent” of the Mountain Lion, which is what his combat revolves around.


Appearance Notes


No visible marks distinguishing Blaine as a half-breed. Post-mortem he always wears the same battle-scarred cape/armor as he did before his death. He appears to have both human-like and Ashani features facially. His eyes resemble those more of an Ashani, his facial structure that of his mother who is a citizen of New Peral. He is a tall, slim figure, roughly 196cm in height, and 78kg in weight.


Biography


-A Bright Future-


Unlike most half-breeds, Blaine's upbringing was not as negatively tainted as those like himself. His mother, Ludia, was a famous mage that fought for the Will of Gaia, and his father, a renown swordsman known for his inner-beast “The Mountain Lion”, known to those as General Seria, served under Ar'Ku. General Seria led the Hwarang Division, which consisted of the twenty most elite swordsman under Ar'Ku. Blaine grew up in the village of New Peral, where his mother was born. His father was the ambassador for the Ashani of the village, which is how his mother and father ultimately met. At a young age, just like his father, Blaine was gifted in the art of combat. He excelled at learning all arms of combat. At the tender age of 15, Blaine became a known as a prodigy among the ranks that served under Ar'Ku. He joined the top ranks of the Hwarang Division at the age of 16, fighting under his father. Unlike his parents who fought for Gaia, Blaine often expressed himself as a free soul. He fought for the good of all pure beings alike. He often expressed his ideologies among his Gaia serving comrades. For the most part, his comrades accepted his more open-minded thinking, and his parents respected his choice nonetheless. After years of training and a life filled with excitement and thrill, it all came into and end for Blaine near his 18th birthday.


-The End-


On an expedition from New Peral to Hiren, General Seria's company was ambushed by Korth himself. Hearing of the General's prowess, Korth took it upon himself to test the power of a mere Asani. It is rumored that it only took a mere smirk from Korth to kill the company that stood by the side of General Seria, and all that stood among the corpses were the General and his wife, Ludia. After a short period of time, the couple was defeated by Korth. It is said that the Demon King was pleasantly surprised by the fighting abilities of mere mortals, but nonetheless dismantled them with ease. The Demon King kept their spirits near his other prized spirits. Upon hearing the news of his father and mother and what happened to their spirits, Blaine's soul become filled with rage and disgust. His closest friends and the few left of the Hwarang Division tried to calm the young prodigy from making any rash decisions, but nonetheless the young warrior went out to seek Korth all by himself. Ar'Ku himself warned Blaine to not challenge Korth, but to train himself until the time is right, but his heart was too tainted to change his mind.


-The Meeting-


After four long years of secluded travel and training, word finally got to Korth that the half-breed was killing off some of his high-ranking officials, just to get the Demon King's attention. Korth took it upon himself to eliminate the pest that was defying his name. The Demon King would make sure to embarrass the young warrior in front of the entire world. The two met in the barren wastelands of Larin. The surrounding vicinity around the two became almost unbearable to be in. Harsh winds and a strong downpour of rain crashed against the two opponents as they met face to face. Blaine called out his parent's names as he crashed into the Demon King. After some time, Korth became bored with the young warrior, and with ease dismantled Blaine's sword with a single swing from his massive blade. After this point is when Blaine tapped into his inner-beast, and a blade made from his own rage and fury came to life from the hilt of his sword. The last thing Blaine remembered what taking a swing at Korth before everything became dark.


-Hell-


When Blaine woke up from his “slumber”, his exhausted body was on the ground in the field where he and Korth fought. A Succubi appeared when the warrior awoke, and explained to him what happened. Essentially, Korth had easily killed Blaine. But killing the warrior was not enough for the Demon King, he wanted Blaine to suffer for the rest of eternity. Korth reanimated Blaine, and took his spirit back to Beryl, where it will forever be kept with the spirits of his father and mother. Blaine will forever be a "wanderer" until he can get his soul back from Korth. When Blaine came to realization of the words the Succubi was telling him, his will to stand gave up. He sat on the ground, on his knees and looked up into the dark sky. His world had now turn into a living Hell.


Nine long years have passed from that eventful day.


Blaine now, known as "The Wandering Warrior", wanders about the world training, hoping that one day he can defeat Korth to put his spirit, and those of his parents, to rest.

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Name: Thomas + Sarah Osaris


Appearance:


Thomas:


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Sarah:


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(Full Suit)
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Age: 23, 20


Gender: Male, Female


Hair: Brown, Blonde


Eyes: Blue ( Both)


Skin: White


Race:Human


Class: Warrior


Faith: (Gaia )


Weapon(s):


Sarah's Sword : Dawnbreaker


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Thomas: Nightshade


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Appearance Notes:


Thomas: 6'6 225 Pounds


Sarah: 6'0 165 Pounds


Thomas: Has a scar going down his right eye


Biography:


The Osaris family regarded from Illuminus, where a warrior wanted to give up a life of fighting to have a family, which he did. The warrior didn't believe in much of religion, and he only saw an Angel once in his lifetime, however this didn't stop him from serving in conflict, or mercenary work on its own. After, the warrior tried to settle down a bit, as his dreams for a family longed him from his battle weariness... Which he did have a family as he married a bar maid from Illuminus.


Thomas was born first, the favorite, he was an average baby, he was precious. He was considerate as he grew and he appreciated the stories of warriors going off and doing battle for money, fame, and reputation. He especially appreciated his father's stories the most. Thomas wanted to become a warrior ever since, it was a birth right.


Sarah was the second born, she was little, but she was her fathers daughter, so she had to be protected, Thomas watched over her when she was little, however that didn't last long, as she too wanted the taste of battle. She used to dream of the vast glory and treasure from battle as warriors foretold in their stories. Sarah always followed Thomas around and saw him as a leader, which he was. This doesn't go without a downside however, as Sarah was somewhat mischievous when she was young.


As both children blossomed in their father's eyes, they did not go without trouble as they weren't really the favorites around the area, As a child Sarah, was told that others didn't think she was much of a fighter. She was bullied, because she was small and couldn't defend herself if Thomas wasn't around. Thomas received his scar from a sparring accident with his little sister when he was 8, when she accidentally cut from his right eyebrow down towards his cheek leaving an ever lasting scar on his right eye. As they grew Thomas, did also find his sister to be quite an annoyance from time to time, as she was somewhat a trouble maker and sometimes did the opposite of what he or anyone else told her. Thomas however himself was not without flaws, he was somewhat shy when he was younger and refused to meet other people, as he was only around his sister, because she was constantly getting hurt. However, this changed as they both grew, Sarah was stopped being bully when she used her fists as a weapon rather than sitting back, and Thomas became more casually social as he grew older.


It was then at the age of 13, when their father began to start training Thomas, and three years later when Sarah turned 13, he taught her how to fight with a blade as well. They spent many years training together, using blood, sweat and tears as a guidance, until Thomas turned 18 and left to do some mercenary work. Thomas, returned at the age of 21, when she was old enough to leave the household to request her help and form a team between the two. Their old man agreed.


The old warrior, instead gave his last gifts to his young children to assist them and protect them as they moved on. Armor, that was constructed using a durable light weight metal, was given to him as a gift for completing a quest, of which was his last. Among that, his two blades were also given, one was named Dawnbreaker, and the other sword was named Nightshade. Dawnbreaker was given to Sarah, for its lighter personality, and Nightshade was given to Thomas for its ability to instill confidence in battle.


Their father fell ill, as he saw the two ship off to start their own stories of glory and combat. It would be his last view of them, as soon after he would perish. The two, Thomas, 23, and Sarah, 20 stride to make their father proud, and hopefully start their own stories of combat, glory, and fame.
 
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Real quick: the Anisha is not Anisha, it's actually Anashi. My computer attempted to auto-correct it, I think, and messed up the word. But Half-Beasts from Shadei or Jaisai are called Anashi.
 

Name:


Cynth Tsena


Age:


20


Gender:


Male


Appearance (general):


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Race:


Human


Class:


Assassin


Faith:


None


Weapons:


The Ky?shin (The Resonance): Cynth's katana which he made himself. When swung, it vibrates at extreme speeds to make quick, clean cuts.


5 B?meran'naifu (Boomerang Knife): Cynth's kunai, also hand made. They can be thrown, then return like a boomerang.


Tamash? Dorob? (The Soul Stealer): Cynth's left arm. It feels like metal, yet there are some parts that feel like human skin. When he grabs someone with this arm, he absorbs the magic force a person has, rendering them unable to use magic temporarily.


Biography:


When Cynth was born, he was missing his left arm, which he grew up without for a while. He was born into a wealthy family under the last name Vasuda in the kingdom of Illuminus, but over the years his parents were overcome with greed. They treated him like a monster, wanting him out of their sight, beating him and locking him in his room. He was eventually disowned by the age of 8 because his parents thought that the servants they hired for him were too expensive and useless, only to be left on the streets of the city slums near the entrance. Cynth was then taken in by a traveling inventor and his wife, a mage, that were returning to their home in Jaisai and built him a fully functioning prosthetic arm once they arrived. He was surprised at this gift and amazed at how well it functioned. He went on living life in his new family, under their last name, Tsena, helping around in the inventor's shop and wife's garden. One day, when he was 16, he went out to go hunting, unaware of the soldiers heading for the home of his foster parents. Cynth witnessed his foster parents killed at the hands of the soldiers when he returned, soon realizing that they were hired by his real parents, judging by the flag one of the soldiers carried. The soldiers saw him and recognized him from his real parents' description, pushing him around like he was nothing, removing his prosthetic arm and breaking it, saying that "he didn't need it." He soon went to begging on the streets of cities and towns in Jaisai, only to be greeted by a certain wandering witch with green hair and a mark in the shape of a V on her forehead, who told him that she could grant him anything, doing this out of pity. He wished that he could take his revenge against the soldiers. Against his real parents. The witch brought him out of the town they were in, and asked him if he wanted to create a contract which would give him the power he wanted. He knew what witches were and what they were capable of, but he noticed something different, he couldn't tell what, about the one before him. Hastily agreeing, the witch cast a spell on him, which gave him a new arm. However, it wasn't a normal human arm. It looked mechanical and bony. Cynth asked the witch about the arm, with her reply being, "You figure it out." She then walked away, not to be seen again. Cynth soon found the camp of the soldiers that killed his foster parents. Filled with rage, he charged into the camp, which caught the soldiers off guard, and grabbed one of them with his left hand. The soldier quickly looked like he was aging fast and soon died because he had his life force stolen. The other soldiers called Cynth a monster and that they should have killed him when they had the chance. Cynth proceeded to kill the soldiers one by one, leaving nothing but empty husks of their body. An assassin saw him kill the soldiers with ease and decided to recruit him out of interest, teaching him the ways of the assassin. He then deemed that the power he was given was too dangerous to use, but he couldn't cut off his arm, so he resorts to being an assassin/mercenary, helping the oppressed and weak. The arm eventually got weaker in power, siphoning only magic power a person has. He still vows revenge against he real parents when he finds them for killing the ones that cared for him.


Appearance Notes:


Cynth uses a sleeve to cover his left arm from the public.


His mask bears this design:
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Other:


His left arm can steal the magic power of any living being, though he refers from using it.


He doesn't remember where his real parents are.


He likes tinkering with things.


He is somewhat well known, being nicknamed the "Magic Vampire," due to his ability to siphon magic with his arm.


He never accepts contracts with oppressed people as targets.


Due to him staying at the tinkerer's house and not really playing with other kids, he doesn't really know how to socialize with others.
 
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Wow! This sounds like amazing roleplay! I applaud your efforts! :) I have read the info thread and loved it all! :D Please correct me if there's anything wrong with my character sheet. :3


~>3<~


| A L Y S | B O U D I C A |

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"I dream of the day when I shall fight a real Beast of Gloria." - Alys Boudica


A young woman who lives for the thrill of battle,


Alys Boudica is a true cougar.

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  • Name:


    Alys (aa-lee-ss) Boudica (bow-dee-ka)


    Age:


    26 years old


    Gender:


    Female


    Hair:


    Platinum Blonde that reaches lower back.


    Alys has the same hair as her father, it would've been a more darker blonde if she wasn't always running around in the sun. Although it is now permanently this colour after all the stress she went through during her time as one of Sunshine's "lionesses". If the hair doesn't see the sun, an example would be when Alys was in the mountains, they tend to get a little darker, but isn't very noticeable.


    Eyes:


    Spring Green.


    This Anashi has the same exotic green eyes her mother had, and they're quite pretty. With her mother being a prostitute, Alys has natural good looks (if you ignore the multiple scars all over her body) and has long, thick, dark eyelashes.


    Skin:


    Pale, burns easily.


    She tends to always carry a bottle of sunscreen around with her, applying it on her skin everyday to avoid being cooked by the sun. There was once a time when Alys had put on cooking oil instead and got quite the serious sunburn, luckily there was a lake nearby that she had jumped in.


    Race:


    Anashi, Cougar


    Both Alys's parents were Anashi, it's just that one was from Shadei, and the other came from Jaisai.


    Class:


    Beast Tamer (also a Beast Hunter)


    Faith:


    Neutral, Alys recognizes that there are some sort of celestial beings, but she doesn't worship them. She will pray to them when in times of need though, or use mock prayer as an expression.


    Weapon(s):


    This woman is so violent, she can turn anything she gets her hands on into a weapon. She's very well trained with just using her body, considering her past, but has learned how to use a sword during her early teens. For a weapon, Alys usually uses;

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    • Boris: a short sword tinted red and has the phrase, "Haha! Die." engraved in gold on the side of the blade. This is her favourite weapon and Alys is very protective of it. She tends to fall asleep with Boris in her arms. It's a little heavy, but with Alys's muscles, she can easily lift it. This was a very expensive sword to make, it was custom made just for Alys.


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    • Clydette: two twin daggers that have a shiny black hilt. The only remainder left of her tribe that abandoned her, Alys likes to get up close and personal with her prey. Although, these aren't usually used as weapons unless necessary.


    Note: Alys tends to give names to her weapons and treats Boris like her child.


    Inner Beast:


    Forget the eagle in the picture! This woman's a cougar!


    This is the same Inner Beast as her mother, who was also a cougar. If you know what I mean.


    Tamed Beast:


    A male lion by the name of Sunshine.


    Read the childhood part of her biography to know how they met up and bonded.


    Appearance of Beast:


    Doesn't he look a Sunshine?


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    Appearance Notes:

    • Two red lines on the sides of her cheeks. (tribal tattoo one)
    • Black swirl tattoo on upper right arm (tribal tattoo two) in the picture it looks like custard.
    • Instead of elf ears, please replace that with cougar ears. Along with the cougar ears, Alys also has a tail to keep her balance and large cougar legs that go up to her knees, causing Alys to walk on her toes like all cats.
    • Many scars all over body from beast hunting, a noticeable one would be the stitches on her neck. (yes, I know it's a necklace, but I've decided it's going to be a scar :P )
    • Above average height, stands at 5'10 feet tall, and her body is mainly muscle, muscle weighs more than fat, so Alys weighs about 158 lbs.
    • Alys's clothing is, like most Beast Hunters, made of all the beasts she has killed before. Although she only uses the good ones and may take other things like scales, bones, etc.
 
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First Verdict:


Here are the issues with your characters as you know with the way the role play works I will have to be fair and unbiased towards the ruling. These are a not flat out denials unless otherwise stipulated. Please fix accordingly and I will re evaluate your character sheets. I will also be available in PM's or shoutbox or even in this thread to help make your character come to fruition.


I say these things not out of anger but to create a fair and balanced role play that will live on and be a joyous one.


Just because I have not put anything in this post for your characters does not mean they are accepted. I will get around to you.

Reasons I can not accept your characters are as followed.


Cyrus: As reading your glorious history of Cyrus there are points that make no sense with me. It seems illogical that a man who was cast down to the world of mortals to struggle and die as one instead of an angle. Would be given an arsenal that would be fit a warrior. I would either like an explanation as to why this commander gave him these special runic weapons to a criminal. Or I would like you to just give your character a ceremonial knife used for suicide. As that would make sense to him having a weapon. Other than a sheer form of favoritism coupled with a thought of his innocence would a commander risk his place to help a criminal.


Also I would like an explanation as to what your character's divine magic is, as when i see ETC it shows a blatant misuse of said power further in the role play. I can not give you free reign of what you can and cant use as magic as apart of heavenly divination magic. I would like you to address with by giving at least a more thorough description of it in the magic elements part.


Siyena: This character was made towards the end of Gaia last time and I could not give a verdict as the RP died shortly after she was posted. So here is the first attempt to look at your character. As your story points out you have direct contact to the Demon Lord Korth... That by itself is a flag in my mind as he only deals with his generals and other succubus. Korth is overly sexist in nature and only thinks them valid as slaves or in the kitchen. This will need addressing as you probably did not know that but I checked with War Paint.


Your hemomancy and necromancy bring another product of issues as blood magic is something that can be considered drastically overpowered and unfair... I will need you to be able to list what she can do with it... the limits and weakness of it. Necromancy is already allowed in the role play so that is fine.


- Eternal Rest, a small, curved bone-white dagger with a silver hilt used primarily to slay Angelic foes; it possesses a poison only toxic to Angelic entities and slowly saps their life energies.


As most people love characters with wings and angelic like we will obviously have more of them... Poison is a dangerous dangerous thing in role play as it can simply be a deterrent of balance and fairness. So as the poison stands you label what it does and how long it takes for potency and the debilitation of said poison. Even if you fix this.... poison is something I have a hard time accepting so be thorough if it is crucial to your character.






First off I will state that your picture is ill appropriate for your characters age please find another one... As I have seen that picture way to much and for your character it doesn't make sense.


Your biography left something to be desired I would like you to reevaluate your work please and definitely add meat to it. I expect better from you as I have seen better. Please give a reason to the relationship between you and your wolf. As it is the most important thing for a beast trainer to have an animal and that is the least touched thing in your profile. Your character lived for 32 years 3 paragraphs that are about 3-4 sentences is not enough.


Inner beast what? The Anashi are at one with the inner beast like if they are of the wolf beast they look more wolfish and half wolf like qualities maybe claw like fingernails or fangs on their canines or lupine like eyes.


Anyway I want you to also give a what is he doing now sort of thing... where you explain how he survives and what he has done and why he is doing it.

 
I don't want to sound rude on here but


People PLEASE take care with your character sheets look at all the information read the 'Fall of Gaia' lore before posting... War Paint spent countless hours perfecting and crafting her role play so we may enjoy this rich world.


This is a highly literate and expectant role play Please make your characters that would be becoming of that.


Lore is located here


http://rpnation.com/index.php?threads/the-fall-gaia-the-lost-war.13374/
 
Next batch of cookies coming right up...

First off there are several issues and such with your character sheet. You have 2 characters in one sheet which means you have to have twice the information as each character is their own entity I do not mind if you have overlaps but with the little information you have on each they fall a little flat.


The Armored picture is good as it gives the reference to height weight and body size... but as we know people love interaction with flesh as it gives a more intimate approach and friendly gesture... I will require you to either type out a full description of your characters out of the armor or find a picture that is what their faces look like under the helmet. This is fair as your characters are a foundation to you to roleplay and if each person imagines your character differently it adds unneeded confusion to the role play.


I would like you to add a lot more meat and substance to your characters in the role play. Who was their father why does he have runic swords that he could give his children. How was he Famous...


Also I would like you to give the inter personal relationship of how the sister and brother are to each other... maybe there is a deep rivalry forged with her brother being the stronger of the two and she once belittled him for his acting of superiority. How is Sarah mischievous give a reference point to her life in why she is that.


Why does a mysterious smith make them armor? People don't hand out stuff for free without reason.


These are the issues of the character sheets. I like the brother sister duo aspect but I would love to read more on them... so that is what i am asking from you please add more.






Alright its go time.


Jester it would seem that your character has a lot of gaps and holes with things that need to be filled to give your character sheet the boost it needs in order to be passed by me.


Sooo... In your Biography you stated that your character was born into a wealthy family... what family is that as it gives no description because as a child he is abandoned due to his disfigurement so that would have been at birth. Not later on in the years... When the inventors or tinkerers take him in he would obviously take their last name because he would not know any better.


How does he know those soldiers are hired by his parents? Was there a clue left behind?


did his foster / adopted or pretty much his real parents tell him he wasn't their child and he came from a rich and powerful family?


Also please give a great story of to how your character reacted to having his first prosthetic as that would be the utmost magical moment in his life. please show us that with creative writing...


Now on to the witch part... what contract does he sign to get his new arm obviously he would read it and there would stipulations to the contract like giving his soul or he has to give money or something along those lines... but that area is empty.


Why is your character now an assassin? why does a man who refuses to kill take on a job that is for killing...


These are all questions that need answering.


Now I don't mind the metallic arm thing... but what i do mind is that Power as that is drastically overpowered and unbalanceable... stealing peoples life essence from a simple touch or grip is a nooo.... He can eat their magic with it but that is a replenishable source.... life energy is not okay though as characters will be fighting each other. Even if you say he refuses to use it that is still not okay as players can and may kill each others characters.
 

Eleanor Leatherwood





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Age: 46


Gender: Female


Hair: Auburn, with streaks of grey


Eyes: A dark, forest green


Skin: Golden tan


Race: Human


Class: Mage


Faith: Neutral


Weapons:


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Her bow, which is her main weapon that she uses often after her magic.


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A dagger, which she keeps tucked in her boot. However, she mainly uses this for carving or as a tool rather then for fighting.


Mage Element: Dark


Appearance Notes:


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A tattoo on her left wrist.


Biography:


Eleanor was born in Illumnis, raised single handedly by her father after the death of her mother during childbirth. He was loving towards her, and always made sure she was well taken care of. Being a well known merchant, he showed her the art of the trade and ways to make the materials he sold. At a rather young age, she became an excellent carver, and her pieces of work offered them rather good amounts of gold. People were impressed by such art, and Eleanor began to believe she would make a career out of it. That is what she wanted, to be a merchant like her father, to take a piece of wood and turn it into something people would admire and love. But a cruel twist of fate changed all of that.


When only eight years old, she was granted the gift of magic by Gloia, through a dream that utterly frightened her. And, once cursed with this supposed "gift", she had very little control over it, the dark magic leaking when she lost her temper or was extremely upset. Unsure on what to do, Eleanor turned to her father for assistance, wanting reassurance that everything would be okay, that it was only her over reactive imagination. Unfortunately, he could not give her the comfort she desired, only the harsh truth. Yet he refused for his daughter to be marked as an outcast, and proceeded to fight for her to be trained.


Because of his connections, he was successful, although barely so, and Eleanor was sent off to learn to control her new found abilities. Being young and naive at the time, she was excited and ready to learn, always listening to her teachers with alert ears. Of course, she only used her magic for good, refusing to use it to kill or otherwise. And, slowly, over time, she gained control over her abilities, becoming an excellent mage that served Illuminis loyally. Other mages tended to avoid her, or to be frightened of her, but she brushed them off, knowing in her heart she was doing the right thing. She had to be.


It was when she was eighteen that she heard rumors of a boy, a boy who had been gifted by Gloia as well, only ten years of age. Eleanor felt sympathy for him, but did not expect such cruelty from the people who spoke of him. They called him a disgrace, a disgusting pig that should leave Illumnis if he knew what was best for him. Others said he was a spy, sent to bring down their strong government, and that he must be killed. Eleanor, however, saw him as just a boy, one who was probably frightened and unsure, who didn't have the luck that she had when her abilities were discovered.


Wishing to change his fate, she searched for the boy, finding him alone in the poorer part of Illumnis, skinny and starving. He was near death, and left out on the streets by his own family. This disgusted Eleanor, and filled her with distraught and bitterness. How could they do such a thing to a child, who knew no better, who had been forced into an unlucky game of chance? She could not live in a cruel place as such, and it was then Eleanor made her decision to leave Illumnis and find her own way. And she brought the boy with her, refusing to leave him behind to die.


As for her father, she simply left him a note. A note filled with regret and passion, that told him how much she would miss him, but how she could not be in a land of such discrimination. And so she traveled, taking care of the boy to the best of her abilities, making sure he was well fed and healthy. Yet, in the end, it did not matter. Two years after leaving, the boy died, never speaking a single word to her, his skin pale and sickly. This greatly effected Eleanor, and her beliefs changed. Once, she had believed strongly in Gaia and that her way was the right way. Yet, after that, she became uncertain, and remained stranded in a neutral position. A position that could sway either way.


After the boy's death, Eleanor continued her travels, though very much a different woman then what she had been before. She was bitter and harsh, blunt with how she spoke to people, and not very easy to get along with. She used her magic more, though still refusing to kill with it, mainly as a threat to frighten people she considered a nuisance. She gambled and cheated, gaining gold and the dagger she had now, along with other riches. She taught herself how to fight, she taught herself through book how to make a bow, a task she found quite simple, then trained herself how to use it.


For fifteen years, this was how she lived. Constantly moving from one place to the next, spending most of her time in Harin, just wanting gold and wealth. Until, at last, at the age of thirty-five, she settled herself in New Pearl, finally accomplishing her childhood fantasy. She became a merchant, carving things out of wood and selling them, whether it was for simple decoration, protection, or otherwise. She lives alone, and does not make any effort to connect with others. All she seems to care about now is money, money she yearns to have more then anything.

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I edited my background. and the contract wasn't a written one. It was one like the contract Lelouch made with C.C. in the anime Code Geass (which is what I based the contract off of in the first place).
 
Here are some of the reviews I've managed to type up so far. When reading your review, unless I have blatantly stated "You're accepted," you have not been accepted. My reviews I wrote as kind as possible, and I appreciate all of you extremely for finding interest in my roleplay and look forward to roleplaying with all of you. If you are confused, have any questions, or remarks, do not hesitant to ask or state. And other reviews shall be finished shortly. Thank you!

I'm so glad you're happy to see the roleplay and are joining again!


Now, for your characters. As far as Cyrus, I'm okay with him and am familiar with his story so he's very close to approval. However, Humor does have a point. Why did the commander throw down his weapons? Also, I do agree that I don't agree with the term "etc," but this can easily be fixed. I understand you mean general healing powers, but just type up a simple explanation of those you mainly want present or wish your character to have, because "etc." can leave his powers open for resurrection and other, more godly powers which aren't accepted unless a character is a god.


As far as Siyena, I'm okay with her for the most part, but there are a few things I'm either confused about or unsure of. Combined with her being a Reaper and demon, I think her powers may be a bit overpowering. Please explain the extent to her Blood Magic, Necromancy, and I'm unsure of this Soul Suppression. Could you explain that a little more to me? As for the championship, I see where Korth would maybe request her championship after her service for him, but Korth is very odd and he doesn't really request -- he sort of makes you work for him. As far as Korth go, he has no respect for anyone. Women are his servants or slaves, while men are the scum of the earth. So if Korth were to make her a "champion," it would be more by forcing her to work for him after wronging against his demons then her accomplishments deeming her an unofficial "champion," but more infamous than anything.


But once again, a applause of a good job and I look forward to roleplaying with you!





Thank you for submitting a character sheet! I'm glad you've found interest and like the roleplay! I really appreciate it.


For Asari, his name seems to be very Asian for being born in Shadei, which bares more of a "Native American" feel, if you need an idea. If you wished to keep that name, it sounds more appropriate for an area like Jaisai. Perhaps his parents originated from Jaisai and relocated to Shadei, keeping their ethnic ways? Secondly, his picture doesn't really match his age. In my mind, he seems more early twenties than thirties. And as for his biography, it seems very bland and lacking description. It gives a general description of Asari, but it doesn't seem to open many doors for him. So I've arranged a few questions that might give you more ideas to flesh out his character.


Why doesn't he have children or a partner at his age? Did he ever have a romantic interest or just has never had a taste for romance? Have there been any highly noted battles he's experienced to be noticed? What's his relationship like with his father, or even mother? What was his relationship like with fellow Anashi his age throughout the ages? Does he have any animal characteristics that signify him being of a wolf's blood Anashi? Naturally, his parents would be wolf Anashi as well and wolves tend to stick in a pack. Is he a lone wolf or pack wolf? Is he more of a leader, follower, or neutral? Why does he believe in Gaia? What's his view on the war? Has he ever seen a demon of any sort? If he has, what was the situation like? Has he ever been outside of Shadei? Was it difficult for him to learn how to fight? Does his weapon have any history in his family or did his father make it just for him? His honor is his oaths? Why are oaths so important to him -- does he have a special situation that happened in life that made oaths so important to him? Does he have any goals in life? Does he wish to participate in the war or leave Shadei or perhaps meet a wife and settle down?


Those are just to give you a general idea of what to think of while looking him back over. I look forward to roleplaying with you!





Hello, rifleman! Thank you for submitting a character sheet and I'm thrilled that you're interested in joining! Here's your character review!


First off, I have a slight problem with one character sheet for two characters. I understand they're both in the same picture, but I like profiles to be separate in order to allow more character description to make them more personalized. So if you could separate their profiles and flesh them out, that would be wonderful. As far as their appearance, I do agree with Humor. There needs to be either a very detailed description of their appearance to give us a mental picture of their appearance, or a picture to show what they look like under their armor. Next, their weapons. I would like a description of their weapons. What do they look like? Do they have any special markings to show that they're from their father? What's so special about the weapons? Do they have history in the family? What's the history, if they do? Do they have names?


For their biography, the first problem is we have no idea where they live. Where do they live? Did they grow up there? What was it like growing up there? Did they get along with the other children there? How did their father raise them with their fighting -- was he stern, kind, or overbearing Do they have a mother? What was their mother like? How did Sarah react to their father favoriting? Why do they believe in Gaia?


Who is their father? What's so great about their father? What was a battle they he told about that really impacted them? Have they ever seen a demon or been outside of where they live? Have they ever seen an angel or a Valkyrie? Was Sarah picked on for wanting to learn how to fight as a child instead of being a girl? Why did she want to learn how to fight? Was it to match her brother or impress her father? Why is she so mischievous? What is Thomas like? Did he like his sister always following him or did he see it as a nuisance? What are their goals in life, individually? Do they have flaws, likes, dislikes?


These are just some things I'd like to be featured to help flesh them out and give you and idea of things to maybe include in their description.





Hi, Flip Jester! Thank you for being interested in my roleplay. I really appreciate it and am excited to have a new roleplaying partner! Here's your character review.


To start us off, I think a thorough description of his arm would be appropriate for his weapon section. What does it look like? What does it feel like? What is it's texture? Does it have any special marking from battle or perhaps he carved in? Does he have a name for it or does it have a nickname given to it by spectators who have seen it? What powers does it have? What kind of history does it have? I understand some of this is described in the biography, but a short summary would be nice so in case someone would like to look back at your character for future reference, they can find all the highlighted information within the weapon section. Also, kunai is a weapon that mainly comes from Jaisai. How would he have gotten kunai? Did he buy them from a foreign merchant? Did he pickpocket them, steal, or loot them from someone? Why did kunai interest him? Is he good with them? Do they have a history, special marking, or even names?


For your biography, it needs some meat. It needs to be fed up a bit. Where's he from? Where does he live now? Before he turned eight, what did his parents treat him like? What are some of the situations of their treatment that he can remember or specially have noted? What are his parents name? Was there anyone who showed him sympathy before he was fostered? How did the inventor find him? How did he get away to be fostered? Did his family give him up, did they sell him, or did he run away and they found him? Also, a prosthetic arm for their time and age seems a little impossible. Something like that would require magic. Was the inventor perhaps more of a blacksmith and his wife was a mage? How did the family treat him? What are some of his fond memories? What was his relationship like with other children his age while living with them? Did he have any friends?


Why would his honest family want to kill his foster family? Did he witness them getting murdered or was he too busy being bullied by the mercenaries? What was living on the streets like? Did he have to leave the place he once lived, scared the mercenaries would return for him? How did he meet the witch? What did she look like? What was her name, if she ever gave it to him? Why did she want to give him whatever he wished? What did he exchange for the wish? Had he ever heard of what witches really were like before meeting her? Was it a trick or something that will be revealed later? As for the arm, once again, mechanics don't really exist in this time and age.


How did he find the soldiers? Did he casually find them or did he hunt them down? What were they doing? Did the recognize him and attempt to bully him around again or did he instantly attack with no mercy? Why did he become an assassin? How did he become an assassin? Did someone see him murder the mercenaries and employ him? What is the name he goes by as an assassin? Where does he live now to be employed as an assassin? Are there any special assassinations that he can recall or that impacted him? Where did he learn how to fight in order to become a worthy assassin? Is he just starting out as an assassin or is he now well-known? How is he well-known, if he is?


Why doesn't he go and kill his parents now? Are they not located in their same location? Are they in hiding since hearing about his arm? Why doesn't he believe in a Goddess/God? Did he lose faith or ever really learn about them in order to carry a religion? Does he have any likes, dislikes, or flaws?


These are things to think about when fleshing out your character and giving them more depth. I hope it helps. Also, you said he covers his RIGHT arm with his sleeves, not left -- when his left arm is the tainted arm.
 
Just putting the finishing touched on my app tomorrow I'll edit it in to my first post, I need to sleep. Looking forward to joining! :)
 
I must say, I love how much work you put into this roleplay! It really paid off. I'll most likely finishing my application in a few hours, for I must sleep now. :)


Plus I'm waiting for @Cressy to post his application sheet so that I may write my part of our characters meeting.


Anyway, I'm looking forward to joining. :D
 
Edits have been made to both Cyrus and Siyena:


Cyrus:


*Added explanations of his Divine magic.


*Changed biography, added a new segment to explain Cyrus' discovery of his weapons in Larin.


Siyena:


*Removed all references to Korth (with the exception of his blessing for her to go to Ominia), instead replacing it with an anonymous demonic general.


*Removed Hemomancy and listed Siyena's necromantic abilities.


*Removed the poison component from Eternal Rest, replacing it with a soul-storage component specifically meant for Angels.
 
My character Alys is now complete!


Although, I keep thinking that I NEED to add more to her adulthood... It's bugging me very much, but I don't know what else to add because I don't want to drag it out. :3
 
Even though you did flesh out your biography a little bit, I still can't find it acceptable. You still haven't answered the important questions I asked, as to why his parents wanted to murder his foster parents, how he even got to Jaisai from Illuminus -- which is a while away --, how he learned to fight or even make weapons, how he learned about Jaisai based weapons, how he found the mercenaries, or even how he became an assassin, or how he feels about the war. These are issues that need to be answered. Until then, he is not accepted. If you need help with an idea of what your profile needs to look like, please look at mine located on the first post.





Dino, your biography looks much better and your character is almost able to be accepted. However, there is an issue that argues with one of our rules. If you didn't see the rule, here's the rule. Please make the change and you should be accepted quickly afterwards.


"5. Do not mix character photos. In Character Creation, I do not want a mixture of photos from real to anime to descriptions. Photos are allowed, but they are only "anime" types, and I do not want characters with modern day clothes and school girl outfits flooding my fantasy world roleplay, thank you."





Looks much better and I like the photos to put a face to. The biography is still not as fleshed as I wish it was, but you did touch base with everything I asked, so I'm going to accept the two.





Very good. Thank you so much for fixing those thingies up and you are accepted.




Very good! She was well thought out and her story line is very interesting. She's accepted.
 
I talked with Dago and he said the image was fine.I'll find a new one in the morning
 
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