Chaos The Destroyer
Harbinger of the Wolf
So this is the story i'm writing, but i'm stuck i need ideas and some feedback on my work pls help.
BANG. BANG. Jack had never felt so much pain before. It took a moment for him to realize that it was he who had taken the bullet. It was strange really, the sensation of the lead bullets tearing through his sternum. People say that in your last moments your life flashes before your eyes but that happen for Jack the only image, he saw was her face every detail like it had been blown up onto a high definition T.V. and for a moment he was at peace. Then everything went black. When Jack regained consciousness and stood up, he seen the first responders all around him, but they didn’t seem to be fazed by him. He tried to get their attention but to no avail. Then he Looked down, and the sight made him go pale. It was his body, covered in blood where the bullets had made their impact. Jack didn’t know what to think all he knew was this couldn’t be happening it had to be a dream. Before Jack could think anything more a man, a strange man cloaked in black appeared, this stranger brought a deathly cold chill with him. “But this isn’t a dream Jack, this is reality.” The man spoke in a voice that sounded like he had razors in his throat, it was deep and raspy, and Jack knew that this man or being or whatever it was, It had power, Jack knew this man was ancient older than the earth perhaps, He had been around for a long time and this realization scared Jack. The man continued to talk “You now have a choice Jack and count yourself lucky not everyone gets the choice I'm giving you.
BANG. BANG. Jack had never felt so much pain before. It took a moment for him to realize that it was he who had taken the bullet. It was strange really, the sensation of the lead bullets tearing through his sternum. People say that in your last moments your life flashes before your eyes but that happen for Jack the only image, he saw was her face every detail like it had been blown up onto a high definition T.V. and for a moment he was at peace. Then everything went black. When Jack regained consciousness and stood up, he seen the first responders all around him, but they didn’t seem to be fazed by him. He tried to get their attention but to no avail. Then he Looked down, and the sight made him go pale. It was his body, covered in blood where the bullets had made their impact. Jack didn’t know what to think all he knew was this couldn’t be happening it had to be a dream. Before Jack could think anything more a man, a strange man cloaked in black appeared, this stranger brought a deathly cold chill with him. “But this isn’t a dream Jack, this is reality.” The man spoke in a voice that sounded like he had razors in his throat, it was deep and raspy, and Jack knew that this man or being or whatever it was, It had power, Jack knew this man was ancient older than the earth perhaps, He had been around for a long time and this realization scared Jack. The man continued to talk “You now have a choice Jack and count yourself lucky not everyone gets the choice I'm giving you.