[One Piece: Eternal Quest] Temiro "Two Fang" McCalice

Articus

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    Character Name: Temiro “Two Fang” McCalice


    Character Concept: Wandering Nomad


    Devil Fruit User: Cat Cat Fruit: Model Tiger


    Race: Birkan


    Class: Swordsman


    Career: Navigator


    Alignment: Chaotic Good


    Ambition: buy a ship and sail the world in search of Black Alice.


    Place of Origin: Makota Island, a small island in the South Blue.


    Gender: Male


    Age: 24


    Disadvantages: Black Sheep


    Rebellious


    Amnesia


    Available Beli: 0


    Physical Description:


    Temiro is the kind of person who sticks out in a crowd for a number of reasons; first of which is his height. At an even seven feet tall, he often towers over those around him. His next distinguishing feature is his skin, which bears a color skin to fresh ash. He accredits this to his devil fruit abilities, seeing as when he transforms, he bears a resemblance to a Maltese tiger. His last distinguishing feature is his eyes, which are a vibrant purple. While that might not be strange, the fact that the rest of the area of his eyes is completely black is. Add to that his incredibly long, stark white hair, and he’s far from conspicuous.


    Unless around friends or out at sea, Temiro covers up his appearance by wearing clothes that cover his entire body. He also wears a mask to cover his face. In battle, he discards all clothes above the waist, especially when he uses his devil fruit powers.

    this is roughly what he would look like as well as what his mask would be like


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    Backstory:


    Temiro only remembers a few things before the age of ten. His strongest memory is of the name; Mako Alistair and the idea that Mako was training him to do something. This fact, along with his borderline demonic appearance and the devil fruit powers he doesn’t remember getting made him an outcast on the island where he lived on during his youth. He lived alone for five years, disguising himself when necessary, sneaking into town to steal food and other essential things he needed to survive.


    It was during one of these trips when he attempted to steal from a pirate ship; overconfident after gone uncaught for a long time. He was found by the captain however and begged for a quick and merciful death. Much to his surprise however, the pirate did nothing of the sort. She invited the boy into her cabin, asking him why he had to still what he had been after, which was measly loaf of bread and some meat. He explain his situation, how the villagers had chased him out of their village when he wandered into and how he been living in abandoned shack ever since. He fully expected her to do the same, but was instead given a fresh meal. Before he could eat though, the lady pirate asked him to remove his disguise so she could see what he truly looked like. When he did, revealing the appearance that had long marked him a freak, the boy expected to get the rejection he had been spared of earlier. Surprising the boy once again, the captain instead made the boy an offer. Come with her and her crew, sail the world as a pirate. Shocked at the offer, the boy quickly accepted; tears flowing from his eyes. Wiping away the tears, the pirate introduce her as Black Alice of the Mad Hat Pirates and brought the boy out to meet her crew. Temiro was raised by the entire crew; a colorful assortment of pirates that was a bit too altruistic to really fit the conventional definition of pirate, less concerned about treasure than they were about be a jolly pirate crew and going on grand adventures. That carefree atmosphere of companion did wonder for Temiro’s disposition, turning the timid boy into a cheerful young man.


    He spent the next nine years of his life traveling the seas. The group never entered the Grand Line though. Black Alice had once sailed the line, but had been captured by marines and taken out of it. She often entertained the idea, mostly from Temiro’s suggestion of returning to the line, but never made an action to get there. During his time as a Mad Hat pirate, Temiro trained himself in the way of the sword, later learning how to wield two blades at once, as well as acting as one of the ships navigators. Everything seemed to be set for Temiro to live an easy life of adventure, until one fateful day a fierce storm hit their ship. Temiro was standing the crow’s nest when it was hit by lightning; rending it from the ship. He managed to stay out of the water, but lost the ship in the waves. By the time it passed Temiro was left alone, floating on top of the one thing that was most dangerous to him. It took him a week to use a crude oar to reach shore. He has wandered the world ever since, seeking looking for enough money for buy a ship and sail the world in search of Black Alice.


    Significant NPCs:


    Black Alice: A very kind pirate captain that “saved” Temiro from his childhood home. She and Temiro were separated in a vicious storm at sea and he has yet to see her again. She is the closest thing he has to a parent, so he misses her very much. But, knowing that she wouldn’t want him to be sad, so he focus on all the memories


    Mako Alistair: A mysterious figure from the part of Temiro’s past that he has no other knowledge of. This person’s existence occasionally plagues Temiro’s thought, but his relatively cheery disposition helps this from happening too often.
 

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This is still super rough and I'm still working on the backstory and the last few technicalities.
 
Don't forget that you get blade guard and a weaker kenbunshoku as free feats.


Edit: Also, you didn't list your dial stuff on your secondary skills. Thats something to consider favoring. It'll make everyone love you
 
shepsquared said:
Don't forget that you get blade guard and a weaker kenbunshoku as free feats.
Edit: Also, you didn't list your dial stuff on your secondary skills. Thats something to consider favoring. It'll make everyone love you
Right. Sorry, I'm a bit all over the place at the moment. I'll get that fixed and post the updated stuff tomorrow. I'll also get working on the specific of my first Zoan stance. I have an idea, just need to get it written down.
 
No worries, this kind of nitpicking is why feedback helps during character creation.


Ideas for your zoan stances: A quadrupedal one that increases your movement speed, one that gives you a bonus to strength, one that gives you claws and a bite, one that gives better hearing or something (feline senses)


General zoan feats: fearsome roar
 
Well, for my first stance I was thinking of doing a strength one where his muscles thicken, his skin develops a tiger like pattern and a few other changes while not fully turning into a mantiger.
 
It looks like you've favoured Invent, since it's in bold. Shouldn't it be at 4 instead of 1? You don't appear to have any negative mods...


Also, good choice with the skypian, they provide utilisation of dials, which are freaking awesome.
 
Trinios said:
It looks like you've favoured Invent, since it's in bold. Shouldn't it be at 4 instead of 1? You don't appear to have any negative mods...
Also, good choice with the skypian, they provide utilisation of dials, which are freaking awesome.
Yeah, I was rushing this a little X\ That'll be fixed when I repost this.


Thanks, the choice was mostly random though since I mainly didn't want to be human and the other races didn't attract my eye as much.
 
Articus said:
Well, for my first stance I was thinking of doing a strength one where his muscles thicken, his skin develops a tiger like pattern and a few other changes while not fully turning into a mantiger.
That looks fine. A +2 bonus to strength is pretty nifty. Can you give me an idea of the other stances?
 
shepsquared said:
That looks fine. A +2 bonus to strength is pretty nifty. Can you give me an idea of the other stances?
Well, the next one would be full tiger man hybrid form, followed by a quadruped form. After that, I was thinking of halving a slightly more feral version of his second stance, him getting stronger and having more of a saber-tooth tiger appearance and the last one before the giant uncontrollable one would be a tiger style centaur, basically his second and third forms combined.
 
shepsquared said:
Right. God ideas for looks, but I meant the mechanical bonuses
Sorry for the late reply, RPoPdom was acting weird. Here's what I was thinking. Also, I added another form since I realized that I only came up with five. This new stance makes him look like a housecat, making him cuter, smaller, and other convenient cat stuff.


1st Tiger skin +2 Strength


2nd Full Hybrid +2 Listen, +2 spot


3rd House cat: +3 Charisma, +2 balance +2 jump


4th Quadruped Double speed, claw and bite attack


5th Saber Cat +4 strength, bigger claw attack


6th Chakat +2 Listen, +2 spot, 1.5 time regular speed, charge attack
 
Yeah, it was being weird for me too. That looks good, but you really shouldn't have 2 forms that do the same thing. I mean chakat is just an upgrade of full hybrid
 
And Saber Cat is also just an upgrade on Tiger Skin. The forms should remain useful even once you're at max level. For example, the +3 Cha of House Cat will stay useful even at high levels. If you've looked at the example sheet with the chameleon, it has a couple of forms that give utility in favour of combat prowess, that's a good way to go.
 
shepsquared said:
Yeah, it was being weird for me too. That looks good, but you really shouldn't have 2 forms that do the same thing. I mean chakat is just an upgrade of full hybrid
Trinios said:
And Saber Cat is also just an upgrade on Tiger Skin. The forms should remain useful even once you're at max level. For example, the +3 Cha of House Cat will stay useful even at high levels. If you've looked at the example sheet with the chameleon, it has a couple of forms that give utility in favour of combat prowess, that's a good way to go.
Okay. I'll work on reworking those. Sorry I'm taking so long on this, its been a while since I had to work with this kind of stuff X\
 
How creative can I get with these stance, because I have one idea but its a bit of stretch
 
Well check out these for examples I came up with:


Beyond that, feel free to mention anything, no matter how crazy, Doesn't mean I'll approve it, but its worth checking<p><a href="<fileStore.core_Attachment>/monthly_2013_06/CeberusFruit_pdf.09658b67148078ed3c616fae81fec7b8" class="ipsAttachLink ipsAttachLink_image"><img data-fileid="24014" src="<fileStore.core_Attachment>/monthly_2013_06/CeberusFruit_pdf.09658b67148078ed3c616fae81fec7b8" class="ipsImage ipsImage_thumbnailed" alt=""></a></p><p><a href="<fileStore.core_Attachment>/monthly_2013_06/RavenFruit_pdf.12d426d5a52f6cf801cbcf85be265ce7" class="ipsAttachLink ipsAttachLink_image"><img data-fileid="24015" src="<fileStore.core_Attachment>/monthly_2013_06/RavenFruit_pdf.12d426d5a52f6cf801cbcf85be265ce7" class="ipsImage ipsImage_thumbnailed" alt=""></a></p>

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Well, one idea I just had was a form similar to full hybrid, but in this form his stripes are constantly shifting, allowing a +2 hide bonus in nature and a chance to confuse an enemy that looks at him. Also, what if I change saber cat into him developing a sword sized claw on each hand, allowing him to fight as if with two weapons without a penalty.
 
You forgot to note your total bonus to skills. ie: Weapon Attack has a total bonus of +6 (4 from ranks and 2 from str)


Also you need to list the devil fruit feat you got when you ate it (your first stance). Beyond that, everything looks good and you can start posting
 
shepsquared said:
You forgot to note your total bonus to skills. ie: Weapon Attack has a total bonus of +6 (4 from ranks and 2 from str)
Also you need to list the devil fruit feat you got when you ate it (your first stance). Beyond that, everything looks good and you can start posting
oh, okay. I'll update that, add a couple images for reference and whatnot. Oh, what did you think of my new ideas for stances?
 

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