Dagfinn
Maid Of Doom
I'll be posting random various poems of mine on here.
I'd like real critiques please, compliments are nice. However I appreciate advice on becoming better more.
A Boy...
There once was a boy...
His soul blackened
Like a ravens feather-
To scary his new found prey
His heart hardened
Like a ravens beak-
To peck his new found prey
He sees the world through coal black eyes
And the world sees him the same
Through all the years of cold and pain-
Some things to him became plain
The world he lived not too sane
The world within seemed much the same
What left of him was much to shame
But the rest is just a guessing game
How things will never be the same?
The what, the where, the when…
There once was a boy...
I'd like real critiques please, compliments are nice. However I appreciate advice on becoming better more.
A Boy...
There once was a boy...
His soul blackened
Like a ravens feather-
To scary his new found prey
His heart hardened
Like a ravens beak-
To peck his new found prey
He sees the world through coal black eyes
And the world sees him the same
Through all the years of cold and pain-
Some things to him became plain
The world he lived not too sane
The world within seemed much the same
What left of him was much to shame
But the rest is just a guessing game
How things will never be the same?
The what, the where, the when…
There once was a boy...
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