Poetry My Poems

[MsPolite]

Hello, My name is MsPolite. Starting today I will be writing poems once a day, and I will posting them all here. I'm not to familiar with poetry terms but i believe i have created an original sonnet consisting of 14 lines, alternating between 6 and 10 syllable lines with the rhyme scheme of (aaa) b (ccc) b (ddd) b (ee)
I hope you enjoy it and feel free to critique it as well.

 

[MsPolite]

Simple Philosophy


Simplicity is sweet
Like fighting and being caught in the heat
Like dancing to a beat

Always tackling a problem straight on

Either with speech or fists
No complications if you get my gist
My tale without a twist

I will have no heartache to come upon

Problems solved with hands
Not with people's words shaky as the sands
Nor with their faulty plans


Integrity and chivalry are gone

Honor is old and dead
With malefic corruption in its stead

 

[MsPolite]

a small price


i rise every morning
To work a job that is all so boring
You might catch me yawning

Yet i work so much for a small paycheck

Too many bills to pay
Too many headaches to worry away
And each week comes more, yay

My entire life is one stressful trek

i feel like a burden
To those that are close i am a cretin
To me i am craven

My life is spiraling into a wreck

So i must end it all
For my life as a price is all to small

 

[frakncheese]

it's cool that you're experimenting with form. this feels more like a riff on limerick than sonnet. if you like adhering to form like this, i would suggest practicing some more traditional forms just to get a feel for them. villanelles are fun. you could also try actual sonnets, either english or italian, since those are great for helping writers learn more about stress and rhythm, as well as the role of form in governing content. keep it up and hmu if you ever wanna talk shop.

 

[MsPolite]

it's cool that you're experimenting with form. this feels more like a riff on limerick than sonnet. if you like adhering to form like this, i would suggest practicing some more traditional forms just to get a feel for them. villanelles are fun. you could also try actual sonnets, either english or italian, since those are great for helping writers learn more about stress and rhythm, as well as the role of form in governing content. keep it up and hmu if you ever wanna talk shop.

Thank you I appreciate, ive written Italian and English sonnet before but to long ago, also what does HMU mean? XD

 

[MsPolite]

Also I used to do free form poetry

 

[frakncheese]

hmu = hit me up
slide into my dms, in other words

i'm of the (not so) humble opinion that even freeform poetry benefits from an intimate understanding of highly formal poetry. just having a really strong sense of words and sounds and how they work together is helpful. but i'm a bit of a formalist so take that as you will.

 

[MsPolite]

felt a little more free form today

Bad Luck

I slipped and fell today
Hit my back on the edge of the tub
Hit my head on the toilet
Hit my bum on the drenched floor
I slipped and fell today


I sprained my ankle walking home today
After I dropped a shovel on my foot
After I got my foot stuck in the mud
After I dropped a saw cutting my leg
I sprained my ankle walking home today


I got yelled at by my family
Mom yelled at me for not doing the dishes
Dad yelled at me for spilling the detergent
Daughter yelled at me for not picking her up
I got yelled at by my family

And

I slipped and fell today

 

[Blush]

Your writing is so awesome! its very pretty but eerie??? and its really nice to read! owo

 

[MsPolite]

Your writing is so awesome! its very pretty but eerie??? and its really nice to read! owo

thank you so much! how are you doing btw?

 

[MsPolite]

Scorched

My back is bent against the sun
Toiling in the soil soaked in sweat
I don’t have time for any fun
My body aches yet I can’t fret


Toiling in the soil soaked in sweat
Wish I had someone to call my hun
My body aches yes I can’t fret
I’m hoping my day will be done


Wish I had someone to call my hun
Gotta make the dough to pay my debt
I’m hoping my day will be done
My crumbling body is my biggest threat


Gotta make the dough to pay my debt
I don’t have time for any fun
My crumbling body is my biggest threat
My back is bent against the sun

frakncheese

 

[Flowiest D]

How was I not tagged?

 

[MsPolite]

How was I not tagged?

Lol I wasn’t really tagging anyone except one person who introduced me to pantoums

 

[Flowiest D]

But rhymes? Aha

 

[Blush]

thank you so much! how are you doing btw?

Pretty good! you?
owo

 

[MsPolite]

Pretty good! you?
owo

I’m doing great ty for asking

 

[MsPolite]

But rhymes? Aha

What do you mean? I am rhyming it goes abab

 

[Kloudy]

Going over all the poetry and these are really great, thanks for sharing. : )