Ok, so I felt like I just read a novel. Lol. XD
But the character is good. I like the idea of "The pony of Light" and how it is similar to the "pony of shadows". I think it will definitely be a cool character!
I agree with everyone on the weaknesses, but as you say it is a 'work in progress' I...
I appreciate everyone adding their own creative criticism! But, I would like to ask everyone to pause on posting anything for now so I may have time to read the character for myself and give feedback!
No problem, and I'm sorry if it seems like I don't like your character at all. I honestly think it is a nice idea for her to be a helper and having such a smart helper will definitely prove to be useful, especially if the characters might not know how to handle a situation. It's just Celestia as...
The only thing I would change is make her a prodigey of a DIFFERENT PRINCESS. I see so many people wanting to be the students of Celestia and it bothers me. Making her a student of a different Princess would help to make her more original! After that, no, there is nothing that you need to do...
Ok, I like the idea of her being a helper like spike but there are a couple things wrong with this character.
Her age (filly) makes it a little OP that she knows so much at such a young age, even if she can't do all the magic, her aptitude is way too high and considering she knows more than...
I like this character a lot actually. He sort of reminds me of Twilight in a way, but if you were hoping to get the Element of Magic, it is already taken. The element that is left is Laughter (or, if changed, something similar) Sorry for any inconvenience.
I don't want there to be too much technology in this Roleplay because it clashes a lot with the fandom and lore itself. And At this moment a person is only allowed to have 1 OC but may play multiple characters if they have appeared in the MLP Universe. I'm sorry if this is not what you want to...
Hey, now. No negativity towards anyone's characters. I understand that there is a strong dislike for Alicorn OCs but her character is no a Mary Sue OR overpowered because her abilities are limited.
When, it comes to alicorns I am very skeptical, but this OC is very well made! Her abilities are balanced and will be useful. Being a daughter of Hades and Persephone are interesting considering that Hades is Greek (which opens a new world for the pony kinds). Don't overdo the psychotic episodes...
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I want to be sure everyone understand this very well because I feel as though there is some confusion:
The Elements that the New Mane 6 acquire do not have to be the exact same thing.
If one character would like to have an Element but does not wish to have...
Ok, so there are a few things I would like to point out.
I am trying to keep this mostly PG since MLP is that way itself. Your character smoking and doing drugs is inappropriate to the fandom and even though this has a twist with one character being from a different universe, drugs will not be...