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This character was created for a homebrew Game of Thrones House seated in the Riverlands. Name: Maynard Harper Age: Nine and Thirty Appearance: Dark copper straight hair, usually wetted and brushed away from his sharply-featured face. Pronounced widow's peak. Well-groomed mustache and...

This is a new character I created for a gothic fantasy roleplay. You're welcome to leave your comments or criticisms. Link to the RP > Castle Mania; Uprising Name: Fergus Quigg Age: 51 Gender: Male Race: Human Height: 5'11" Weight: 164 lbs Unusual Marks: None Attire: His work/relaxed...

There's hardly anything to critique, but I'll give it a go. First, intelligence isn't a skill. Second, where and how did your character learn to hack? Where and how did she learn to become a mechanic? Is she currently employed? What's her living situation like? Why did her mother die? Why...

@Oneirois & @Ashen Assassin Thanks for leaving a comment. I hope to play her in the future. For some reason I overlooked both of your replies until now.

Base Information Full Name: Silvia Simone Ramos Temporarily: Claudia Greco Current Identity: Madame Hyde Gender: Female Age: 27 || Height: 7'1 || Weight: 326 lbs Occupation: Former New Jersey State Police officer, currently crook & mercenary Home: Houseboat docked on the Gotham...

Character created for the following roleplay: The Project - Hero System | RpNation.com - Best Roleplay Forum [tabs] If I cannot inspire love, I will cause fear! Name: Eerie Animal Stock: Bat Gender: Female Age: 6 (23 equivalent) Place of Birth: Venezuela Appearance: She...

This character was created for a realistic supers roleplay, so the layout and verbiage were catered towards the GM's taste. Feedback welcome. Kai Geoffrey Ramal [/media] Theme Song

It looks like you've copied a lot from your mech pilot when you made Eden.

I'll check it out later tonight. I like the changes you made. She's still got a lot going on but the pieces you're using now aren't contradictory. That's always a good thing. I recommend giving her character sheet a once over in order to tighten it up. You slip into some redundancies from...

This character was created for my own roleplay: Breath of Fire: Giantslayer | RpNation.com - Best Roleplay Forum Comments are always welcome. [tabs] Name:Desna Tonrar, Champion of Wraprax Age: 26 Gender: Female Height/Weight: 5'8 // 135lbs Dragon Tell: Enlarged canines &...

This following is intended to be constructive. Her appearance was well done; it reads like you gave that section the most love. Personality is believable, but not memorable. I couldn't find any motivations for her other than exploration. If that's true then I'd suggest developing her...

This is for Bone2pick Name: Philomena Diane Nyanchoka Nickname: Philo Age: 26 Gender: Female Height/Weight: 5'9 // 134 lbs Homeworld: Mars Faction: DUPC citizen, work visa with the Martian Civil League Occupation: Mech Warrior Rank: Squad Leader Callsign: Rapier Combat...

You're seeking feedback before you finish your character's history?

And I see her being, even if she wouldn't admit it, too empathetic to steal. She might stoop to picking up work from more sinister folk, but an outright stealing habit feels too personal for her. It's getting her hands a little too dirty. Anyway, thanks for taking the feedback so well.

It's obvious you put a lot of thought and love into your characters. Becky has plenty of history, character, and direction. That takes effort, kudos for that. Over all I like the girl — I like her mechanical aptitude, I like her relationship (strained as it is) with her father, I like her...

I can give you brief feedback for Becky (general impressions without providing examples) if that's something you would appreciate? If you want specific examples for each critcism, then that could take a while for me to get to.

Interestingly enough, all three of your questions are answered in Bel's character sheet. "The freedom of treasure hunting allowed him to finally relax.... ....Exploration was the greatest experience life could offer Bel, and he drank it up heartily. But the cold nights and quiet dinners were...

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Interested in feedback?

Cool. Well good job on the effort you put into him. You've got enough words to really tell us about the character, his environment, and his major struggles. I appreciate that. And as a matter of personal taste, I dig the vicious jungle lord character concept. That's why I gave this guy a...