Cool. You should put this all into one paragraph. When you separate these sentences like you did, it breaks the flow of the prose. Very lovely nevertheless.
This is wonderfully beautiful. Is this an actual band, and do you have a link to it? I write a blog, and if it's good enough, I'll consider writing about you guys.
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His hair is a cherry blond; the type that is close to what is considered ginger but holds a hue that has origins in Dutch. You may say he looks like the men from that famous Dutch painting everyone talks about. I think it's the one with the dead body and the men with surgery...
I'm waiting for people to volunteer. Such projects demand a lot of time and effort. I've both volunteered as an editor for newspapers in the past and have worked professionally for my local paper for a few months as a paid intern. I was just going to make a thread here. You and the...
Hi guys,
You're all very talented people. What are you thoughts on starting a RPdom newspaper that reports on general story plots, comics, and endorse the unique culture that is RPdom? Your thoughts are welcomed.
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To my daughter – E.J.K.
Do not let your love grow attached or apart:
Let no one rule your heart –
Not god nor man nor beast nor king.
Seek the Truth in all art:
Even when there is no art to see
Nor science to build Nor god to believe.
Create war from war:
And fight the nature...
I really appreciate your innovation. The I used to do a similar thing before writing longer prose.
I don't have much criticism because it's obvious you did this to have fun. But I did like how cheesy the dialogue is. You certainly give that JRPG vibe. ;)
Actually, now that you mention it, it shows. You have quite a structure. Good job. But my advice does stay: don't rush things. It goes better for you in the end. :)