Our Dance

[DreamBeat]

Our Dance


I see you there


Nice to meet you


Let's begin the dance


Just start on my cue


One step, two step


Three step, four


We rumba, We romp


We tango, We waltz


The phone orchestrated a symphony


Our beat was ultimately break-dancing


And suddenly you had an epiphany


That our dance will soon have one missing


A bird flies the distance


I guess this is good-bye


Water on clear glass glistens


Let us dance again in another time


First poem. Criticism welcome. Any questions? Comments?

 

[Eclipse]

This is nice. Of course, poetry is up to personal interpretation, but I'm liking how the dance seems to be used as a metaphor for a life together with someone. It closed off in a direction I didn't expect, which is certainly not a bad thing. Keep writing, if you enjoy it~

 

[DreamBeat]

This is nice. Of course, poetry is up to personal interpretation, but I'm liking how the dance seems to be used as a metaphor for a life together with someone. It closed off in a direction I didn't expect, which is certainly not a bad thing. Keep writing, if you enjoy it~

Thanks. I'll continue to write when the inspritation comes. It's quite enjoyable ^.^ This is actually based on my experience, which I found was relatable to other people.