Kim Hartly

[DamagedGlasses]

Kim Hartly

Introduction

A punk girl with a ravenous hunger for humans and control.

Games the Character has been involved with

Unfortunately, none at the moment, but some day!

Basics

Name: Kim Hartly


Age: 16


Ethnicity/Nationality: American


Gender: Female


Sexual Orientation: Straight


Occupation: Villain/Gang Leader

• Appearance
• Personality
• History
• Equipment
• Skills
• Likes/Dislikes/Relationships

• Appearance
  
  Height: 5'4"
  
  
  Weight: 90 lbs
  
  
  Hair: Black with multiple highlights of various green like colors. Similar to a pixie cut, but it is longer than it would be if it were one, and overall has a more flowing style to it than regular pixie cuts. Is sometimes kept in a bun.
  
  
  Eyes: Aqua blue. Lacks a obvious pupil, but it is there.
  
  
  Body: Skinny, with a tone of muscle.
  
  
  Attire: Very confident, Kim's attire usually consists of clothes that shows of her midriff and overall rebellious garbs, as well as entertaining things such as her headphones which is a fashion statement as well as helpful when annoyed. Her black leather coat is also something that is common to see, and is never far away from her.
  
  
  Is overall cutsy in a roughed up, fallen angel kind of way, but exudes violent amiableness with her clothes.
  
  
  
• Personality
  
  Kim is very manipulative person who hides her true evil behind a innocent punk who, while rebellious, also has a charm that draws people to her. Outwardly rebellious, yet loyal and playful, Kim is actually a cruel person who will use any means necessary to get what she wants. The leader of her own passive gang, she makes it a goal to make it known to the community that they are there to protect them from other gangs, planting the seeds that will grow into the variables needed for her plan. Kim also has very good control of her emotions, and can stay visibly calm in even the most nerve wracking moments.
  
  
  
• History
  
  Bio: Born in the slum section of her town, Kim was constantly told by her parents that she was worthless. Her mom, a "recovering" alcoholic, and her dad, a employee who got "hurt" on the job and sued for millions, both blamed her for their misfortune in life. Exceedingly bad at their responsibilities, Kim's parents still made it a point to control her entire life, keeping her out of school sometimes and at other points making her do her homework, purely because they could.
  
  
  They also made it their job to hurt her physically when possible, only providing minor injuries that wouldn't be seen as suspicious. Kim tried to deal with the absolute control and minor abuse of her parents, still loving them like any child would, but it slowly became too much. Her patience shattered when she was 12, where, under the influence of alcohol, her father and mother locked her into the trunk of the car, and went on a night on the town uncaring of their child's safety, mental or physical. Cracking under the pressure, when Kim was released from the trunk, her parent's were surprised by how calm she was. Thinking nothing of it, the parents forced her back inside, and told her to go to her room. Walking to her room, a shabby little part of the small house they had, Kim took detour into the kitchen and sought a knife, which she used to kill her surprised and still-drunk parents. It was when she looked at the bloody corpse of her father and mother, that a strange hunger appeared in her stomach.
  
  
  Her mouth starting salivate uncontrollably, Kim followed her instincts and jumped onto the corpse of her father, eating her hearts content. It was when she started to feel stronger and visibly healthier, all of her wounds healing, that she realized that she had the same special powers as the people she had seen on T.V. Running away with all that she could stuff in her bag, Kim started living on the streets, where she prospered due to the enhanced strength and other abilities she had been gifted with. Starting her own gang, Kim originally was very antagonistic, taking down all other gangs, but eventually stopped her attacks and became more benevolent. This was all so that she could gain new strength from eating new specimens and a seat of influence where she was stationed. This was needed to enable her lead up to her ultimate goal, which was total control over the city that had housed her abuse and lack of freedom.
  
  
  
• Equipment
  
  Likes to use a switchblade that belonged to her father, likes to keep it so that she can be reminded of her childhood abuse and use the resulting anger to fuel her conquest. Also keeps a gun on hand for the more pesky opponents.
  
  
  
• Skills
  
  Kim can heal herself by eating fresh corpses of other people, gaining strength and special characteristics the specimen may have possessed. Her abilities gained by this consumption are usually equal to the amount of the corpse eaten by the time it's fresh blood becomes dead. As a result, Kim has taken a penchant for eating victims as much as she can while they still live and keeps her prey in good condition to lengthen the amount of time they will survive her "meal time". This power comes with multiple side-effects which are a high-metabolism and and an instinctive need to "evolve" that can sometimes cause disruption with her fun, punk girl persona.
  
  
  
• Likes/Dislikes/Relationships
  
  Likes: Breakfast, Dinner, Supper, Eating at "Meal Time", Water Parks, Freedom, Hunting.
  
  
  Dislikes: Hard to Get Meals, People who disrupt her "Meal Time", Other Gangs, Fathers, Mothers, People Controlling her, Lost Meals, Wasted Meals.
  
  
  Relationships: While she is cruel and evil, Kim does genuinely care about the few she sees as friends, and will do very disconcerting things to make sure they live in good health. Although, she can be quite controlling in any relationship, getting quite mad when her partner, or friend defies her orders.
  
  
  

 

[SkyGinge]

Salutations, Glasses-kun (as I recall you used to ask to be called :'))! Seeing as you've been doing a fine job with the old critiquing rounds, I figured I'd get your back and give you some feedback in return for your efforts! I do like the way you seperate your reviews into little sections, though partially for the sake of avoiding plagiat and partially for my own tastes, I'm just going to do everything as a big, juicy overview. Remember, everything is objective and another reviewee may see things in a completely different light to me. Here goes:


So, in general, you present a tight and concise form with relevant detail and no excess waffle. One of my biggest personal annoyances in character threads like these is when people go totally ham on unimportant data and factoids, but your character has none of that padding and is focussed and relevant, so congrats for that! In addition, you present tidily organised and friendly form that is grammatically perfect and very clearly written. I get a good idea of what your character would be like, and it's certainly an ambitious and fun idea to have somebody with a charming front but twisted insides like her. The detail you provided would be absolutely fine for RP application.


However, to me, your character feels like they could do with a little more fleshing out in most sections. Obviously, you haven't RPed with her yet and so a lot of this further detail will come then. Don't get me wrong; the character is good, and having RPed with you on multiple occasions I can see you playing her very well indeed, but I just feel there's a certain potential for elaboration. Has she really just been turned into a heartless, cruel monster, or is there a weaker side to her that sometimes comes up due to the abuse she faced? Her personality is fine and you do a very good job of saying a lot with concise precision, but it feels a little inbalanced to me, and if she is this total monster, then I personally as a reader want to be fully convinced of that.


Another thing is, parts of your background and skills sections indicate towards a world that she has already been built towards, which is strangely unelaborated across the form. Even if it were just a signle paragraph, some context for this world might be a good thing to add, just to further enlighten our appreciation of the character and the world they live in, as environment is obviously an important factor for shaping character. Obviously though you have said she isn't attached to an RP at the moment, which is probably why these bits aren't really explained, but if they are there, I think they should be there properly, even if there's a little note somewhere saying 'this could all change depending on the RP she ends up in'.


So, in summary, an interesting premise with plenty of room for development and elaboration, which is probably a wise place to be if you're saving her for future RPs. I hope this helped!

 

[DamagedGlasses]

Thanks SkyGinge, this means alot! I haven't actually ever played with this character, like you said, and was actually one of my first Character Sheets I ever made for this site. Nonetheless, thank you, and I really enjoyed this.