I'll bite the bullet and give criticism but only because you asked. XP
In some places, the harmony sounds a little off. I'm not sure if it's because of the chords or if it's something else.
I'm also not sure about the continuous sixteenth notes; they kind of distract from the the main melody...
Oooh, did you want sketches and not written descriptions? shh you didnt see anything
If you want to borrow the character for D&D or anything, feel free! He's, uh, "open source" I guess. : P
Well, I have this dumb idea for a (D&D maybe?) character that's been on my mind a little while. It'd probably be fun and maybe not too hard to draw. : P
He's a kobold named Needles who has one love in this world, and that love is sewing. He wears a patchwork cloak made of definitely-not-stolen...
This is a pretty unique idea for a shop. I like it. < 3
@SniperBus
Could you do a dramatic reading of this? In the most deathly serious voice possible, like you're reading lines from a Shakespearean tragedy.
Pls. I need it.
If you wait for moments of inspiration, you'll never finish your novel. Whenever you open your laptop, write something. Even if it feels like absolute garbage, keep writing something down. You can always come back later and edit.
If you just can't get anything down, close the document, open...
The critiques are anonymous? That's kinda strange. : /
I would think people would be harsher if they didn't have their name attached to a critique.
On the critiquer's side, I've heard the advice that for every couple of things that you suggest a writer improve, you also include something about...