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Some glaring issues are that the first character is a complete mary sue, none of his weaknesses are actual weaknesses. The second's name is kind of irksum having goku and wukong both in the name. Overall the backstories also could be far more fleshed out.

You should probably specify things such as what it can work on (perhaps levels of gems ect) possible weaknesses such as the strong minded, the poasible adverse effects it has on her (limiting her use of it), perhaps the strong willed are more resistant ect. In general such an ability will need...

The whole mind control ability probably needs to be explained more in depth since such a power can be gamebreaking

This is probably better put in the creativity forum, character feedback is where you post a cs for feedback on it (though some just use it to store characters rather than using the private workshop. I didn't read all of it, it's quite difficult as some of the paragraphs are far too long...

Needs a lot of fleshing out. For the bio, how was her childhood, when and how did she discover she could talk to animals and gain their abilities. For her personality, using single very broad definitions doesn't really explain much, calling her simply crazy can be taken in many different ways...

Needs far more detail in every aspect. For appearance, there's any number of shapes who could fit that bill, how about height, weight, muscle tone, soft/rugged, those are just a few basic ones you would need. If you get a picture from online similar to your character you can write a bit less...