Kloudy
The Lore Savant
On the flip side, if anyone wants to point out anything about my character, then feel free to do so. : D
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Not really interested in nitpicking your character, although I would like to hear what you think of mine since you're handing out character appraisals ^,^On the flip side, if anyone wants to point out anything about my character, then feel free to do so. : D
Not really interested in nitpicking your character, although I would like to hear what you think of mine since you're handing out character appraisals ^,^
Eek, I only have USD! Although, it was worth it to see an outsider's opinion ^,^Well that's hardly the giving attitude that'll motivate me to do so. >:3
But I'm nice, so I'll say something. Your golem ability is interesting, but are there any size/complexity limits? Because I can totally see you creating some massive super golem from continuously combining all your tiny golems and then ruling the universe with it. And the whole "I can't control them sometimes" thing is stupid because if they are truly sentient then they will know they had to obey you or die. And if they don't realise that, then you can just resummon the golem until you find one that does realise this.
The marionette thing is fine, but the super strength seems a little disconnected. Why would your character need it given that he is a control/master type fighter? Something defensive like barrier construction or enhanced endurance/natural armour/super tough skin would have more synergy. Of course no character is perfect, so perhaps that's just his luck of the draw.
His personality is rather interesting given his skill set of controlling things. Nice guys who like to fight for the friends are weird if they use minions to fight for them, it's kinda contradicting. That's my thoughts on your character anyway, that'll be £4.99.
seriously, your character can atomize anything he touches, telekinetically move blades with his mind, become a black hole/nuke mixture of some sort AND appears to be pretty perfect in every other situation as well. seems waaaay more OP than anything anyone else here can come up with.
also, Kloudy , i love how you complain about everyone when your character has the ability to atomize everything. so, you know what they say - 'practice your preach or change your speech'.
I have stated that numerous times.
I've skimmed/sorta looked through each person's CS
I'm going to consult with Aki once we've gotten home from our jobs.
(Or if he's online while I'm on break)
However sprouhtt , your character seems like a pseudo-goddess and I'm not sure how comfortable I am with that. It'll be taken into consideration.
Realistically, if you de-atomise ANYTHING, you basically destroy it. You can;t put something back together after you tear apart the atoms.Kloudy Y'know, technically, your character can easily kill people. When you atomize someone, that breaks their bodies down into the atoms that make it up. You're ripping apart all their organic systems, vital organs, parts that make up their mental personalities; basically that kills them. XD But since this is fiction, that's hardly an issue. Got no problems with you character or his powers, just felt like you needed to know. lol
#InconspicuousWhistlingRealistically, if you de-atomise ANYTHING, you basically destroy it. You can;t put something back together after you tear apart the atoms.
Pfft. Sir I have a degree in over-evaluation. And a masters in using illogical thinking.#InconspicuousWhistling
I'm a professional writer. I do this BSing for a living, and then I have to BS the characters OUT of that BS to make sure that the story doesn't end early XDPfft. Sir I have a degree in over-evaluation. And a masters in using illogical thinking.
I prefer the stories where the MC's get their asses kicked and aren't totally immortal to everything.I'm a professional writer. I do this BSing for a living, and then I have to BS the characters OUT of that BS to make sure that the story doesn't end early XD