SBURB: YCM Feedback/Questions

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Eidolon Astronaut Noivian Twin Fantasy GamerKitty205 MasterRed Lunar Venchi1986
That should all of the most prominent readers right now.

So this thread is essentially what I’m making to improve the story you all read. Don’t feel obligated to reply here, as this is simply for those who’ve read my story to give me feedback and questions about it. This is my first quest after all, and how to make it more enticing and improving myself as a writer is always good, So criticism is welcome.

 

[Lunar]

BTW Sorry for my inactivity, my job has been busy the past while