CookieCrim
Tired Writer
I'm currently writing a mafia story that I've been developing for months now. I managed to write a started for it but don't know how to proceed. I was hoping that someone could read what I've written and maybe give me a few ideas.
here's what I've written so far
The door flies open. Ayato's attention snaps towards the loud thump, watching as his right-hand man enters the room, somewhat calmly, despite the sudden outburst.
He exhales softly. "Good evening, Ayato."
"It's 'sir' to you," Ayato snaps, crossing his arms and leaning back in his chair, frowning at the male standing in front of him.
Ruki sighed, irritated. "Good evening, sir," He rolled his eyes.
Ayato gave a small nod of approval. "Speak."
"I'm sure you're aware of the possibility that there's being a traitor in our clan, yes?"
The leader raised an eyebrow, waiting for Ruki to continue talking.
"I've received a message from an anonymous sender. Apparently, they've hear of the news, and wish to join us. In return, they're willing to find the identity of the one betraying us."
Ayato stared at his right-hand man, with a tint of disbelief. "Surely you aren't that stupid. What if they have connections with the traitor? What do you think will happen if we let them do as they please, without knowing anything about them?" He hissed. "I refuse to let our clan be remembered as nothing more than a joke."
"I'm aware. I simply came to ask you for your thoughts on this."
Ayato pinched the bridge of his nose. "Tell them this," He cleared his throat. "first, they must reveal their own identity. If not, I refuse to let them in."
"And if they happen to obligate?"
There's a small huff from the red-haired man. "then we can discuss it."
Ruki bowed. "Very well. I will proceed to let them know."
He turned on his heel, and opened the door. Before he could manage to leave, he heard Ayato call out to him.
"Oh, just one more thing," He began. "Why do you seem so angry today?"
"Just having a bad day, that's all," Ruki muttered. He left the room, this time, closing the door gently.
If you have any ideas in mind, even if they're just small ones, then either reply to this thread or pm me. If your like more information about the story, then just pm me and I'd be happy to tell you more!
hope I can get some ideas out of this!
here's what I've written so far
The door flies open. Ayato's attention snaps towards the loud thump, watching as his right-hand man enters the room, somewhat calmly, despite the sudden outburst.
He exhales softly. "Good evening, Ayato."
"It's 'sir' to you," Ayato snaps, crossing his arms and leaning back in his chair, frowning at the male standing in front of him.
Ruki sighed, irritated. "Good evening, sir," He rolled his eyes.
Ayato gave a small nod of approval. "Speak."
"I'm sure you're aware of the possibility that there's being a traitor in our clan, yes?"
The leader raised an eyebrow, waiting for Ruki to continue talking.
"I've received a message from an anonymous sender. Apparently, they've hear of the news, and wish to join us. In return, they're willing to find the identity of the one betraying us."
Ayato stared at his right-hand man, with a tint of disbelief. "Surely you aren't that stupid. What if they have connections with the traitor? What do you think will happen if we let them do as they please, without knowing anything about them?" He hissed. "I refuse to let our clan be remembered as nothing more than a joke."
"I'm aware. I simply came to ask you for your thoughts on this."
Ayato pinched the bridge of his nose. "Tell them this," He cleared his throat. "first, they must reveal their own identity. If not, I refuse to let them in."
"And if they happen to obligate?"
There's a small huff from the red-haired man. "then we can discuss it."
Ruki bowed. "Very well. I will proceed to let them know."
He turned on his heel, and opened the door. Before he could manage to leave, he heard Ayato call out to him.
"Oh, just one more thing," He began. "Why do you seem so angry today?"
"Just having a bad day, that's all," Ruki muttered. He left the room, this time, closing the door gently.
If you have any ideas in mind, even if they're just small ones, then either reply to this thread or pm me. If your like more information about the story, then just pm me and I'd be happy to tell you more!
hope I can get some ideas out of this!
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