Character Concept (Critiques/Suggestions/Help Needed)

Black Rain

Drowning in Art Requests and Comissions
This is for a future webcomic.

I'm still in the very early stages of rough planning so any help or suggestions would be appreciated, especially with the personality.

Anything marked red are names I'd love different variations for (aka. they probably suck so any other names you think would be cool sounding would be awesome to hear)

**Pictures will be added later on. My tablet is currently being a bitch**



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CHARACTER ONE
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Takeshi Kei


Name: Takeshi, Kei/Kai

Meaning Behind Name:

Kei; there are multiple meanings depending on the written kanji. He has chosen ‘respect’ among the others as he considers respect the basis of relationships and thinks all the other meanings are lame and girly.

Kai; forgiveness. Due to the constant confusion people have over his name, he goes by either Kei or Kai.

Takeshi; fierce warrior/military, martial.

Age: appears to be around 12 physically with the forced muscle composition of an adult.

Gender: Male

Sexuality: Unknown. He has yet to show any interest in either gender/doesn’t care enough for romantic relationships.

Nationality: Japanese

Relationships:

  • Damien - a young man under the care of 'foster grandparents’ who work with the Body Retrieval service. He was the one who had originally found Kei a few kilometres beyond the Void Borders (although he was also the one who suggested to leave him be due to the risks of having him around). After being recorded in the City's Soul Records and meeting with ‘God’ for his papers and home assignment--whom found Damien to be a ‘proper fit’ for a foster family (in actuality he just found it funny that Damien was so annoyed by Kei and thought it would be interesting to see what would happen if they were forced to live in the same household)--he was swiftly placed with the Gould's. They have now become best friends although some may compare their relationship to a mother and their child.

  • Klaus - **to be decided later on. There's so many different factors to bring in with him since he's not originally around the boys or within the group so**

  • Christian ‘Blue’ - Damien’s hobby teacher and big brother figure to the three boys, he would often meet up with them if they required a ride, needed to talk, or if they needed help with work of any kind. He owns a small tattoo and repair shop in town.

  • Grandpa Julius and Grandma Marie - Damien and Kei’s foster grandparents. They feed them, school them whenever they can and discipline them if they’re too rowdy. They have a very tranquil life and live in a small fish shop on the docks. Grandma Marie manages the ships and local imports, while Grandpa Julius works two jobs, doing the house chores and working for the BRS when there’s a slot available.
Appearance:

  • Face: Kei, like all Asians, has a fairly rounded face and pointy chin, with narrow, almond-shaped golden green eyes and thin yet fairly childish looking lips. His eyebrows are thin and long while his nose is button shaped. People have often time described him as cute due to his chubby baby cheeks. He is considerably self-conscious about this as he believes it ruins any possibility of intimidating potential ‘business partners’ or threats in general. His hair is incredibly thick, with pointy bangs and long side strands that shape his face. In correct lighting, it can look almost blue but it is naturally a cool raven black.

  • Body: Kei is around 5’1” and 144 pounds. He’s in great shape but sometimes get comments from doctors on how he needs to tone down on the weights due to medical reasons (there are multiple health concerns to someone of his stature lifting such heavy objects and conducting harsh workouts). He pays for this with intense bruising, limb/muscle pain and there have been times where he’s actually dislocated joints and broken bones. He’s missing his pinkie on his left hand and has visible scarring along his body.

  • Clothing: Kei’s main outfit normally consists of hoodies, formal shirts and form-fitting cargo pants depending on what’s available, however, he has a very simple outfit he prefers to wear and will re-wear if he considers it still clean (even then he may still wear it as he believes cologne is the magic spray to mask any scent). This very special outfit consists of an indigo blue sweater with two parallel thin orange stripes going down on either side of the zipper (this is normally kept unzipped to around his belly button or so), maroon thin cargo pants, black running shoes with a red stripe going above the sole, and a backpack covered in different patches and buttons he’s bought through his journeys. The necklace he normally keeps with him is a simple silver chain with what appears to be a modified, unfamiliar button he found when he first 'arrived'.
Weapons: after a specific incident regarding him supposedly having ‘trigger fingers’ and illegally possessing a firearm under the age requirements, he’s been downgraded to a simple, metal ‘gold’ baseball bat which he’ll often stuff into his bag or have it hooked onto his belt. He doesn't like using a bat as he finds it inefficient in long range fights. But thankfully, his brash mindset has him stupidly charging head first into a fight relying on pure instinct anyway so it wouldn't really matter (he also just steals a 'better weapon' if he can)

Personality:

Kei is often described as the ‘little devil'. Some have often described him as charming, carefree, boisterous, and charismatic, finding that words can be just as effective as using a gun, but in the end, choosing a gun because it's so much more badass and fun.

He still retains a sense of childish curiosity and impulsivity. It's almost a talent to be as horribly reckless as him. Despite the chaos that ensues, however, success is...often...achieved (as inefficient as his so-called ‘plans’ can be). He’s an action junkie and will purposely patronise and tease a potential threat to make a situation more blown up or interesting. He’s known for his incredibly confident, determined and brave attitude as well, and his fearless views have bitten him in the ass more than a few times, whether or not by karma or by those around him.

Something that’s often annoyed Damien is his laziness and rebellious lacklustre enthusiasm towards things he thinks isn’t worth his time. This can range anywhere from cleaning up after himself to potentially helping an old lady save her kitten. Whether or not he’s roped into it, he’ll always find a way out or at least, find a situation he considers to be ‘intriguing’.

Kei can be very level headed and overly relaxed, even in times of absolute danger. He never seems to get angry or panicked, as though he sees everything as a game and this has brought upon some tension every now and again, especially when the situation requires some form of seriousness and maturity. If it wasn't for these flaws he would be a fantastic leader, and fairly fair too. He has a talent for running groups, taking the initiative when no one else wants to, handling money, negotiating, organising, and forming strong relationships. Damien and Klaus realise however that something isn't quite right about him, and although they view him as a childish little boy who likes ruining things, they also understand that he may be a lot smarter than how he looks or makes himself out to be.

But there are times where even he will often snap that rock hard exterior and break down in emotional exhaustion. This can result in him showing very immature spouts of anti-social and grumpy behaviour as though he were sulking or throwing a tantrum like a five-year-old. Even he isn't free from normal twelve-year-old tendencies. He also refuses to admit weakness and is horribly stubborn about not crying or 'burdening others' with his potential negative feelings as he believes that's what a leader is supposed to do.

Beyond this, he appears to lack sympathetic thought but attempts to make up for this with an unwavering loyalty to those who he respects and respect him back. His friends are very family based, bonded through 'blood', and because of this, betrayal isn't an option and to him, is considered the worst crime one can commit. He prides himself on making sure his friends and family are safe, almost to the point of being obsessive about it when he feels danger is lurking. Despite his slightly annoying personality, people have found themselves drawn to his hyperactive internal clock constantly pushing him forwards into the future and he isn't afraid to leave people behind if necessary. He refuses to carry baggage or grudges, and so, he’s normally the crutch, the being to help other people instead of the other way around.

Likes:

-Pins/Buttons (he collects a new one to put on his backpack in every new city he goes to).

-Eating/food (he eats like a pig from all the calories he burns off on a daily basis and will get very cranky very fast if he doesn’t at least have a steak or two)

-Rollerblading

-Soccer

-City/urban settings

-Money

-Photography

-Good alcohol


Dislikes:

-Boring situations (aka. predictable situations)

-Loud/Annoying People (ironically, people who are like himself)

-Being confined to very small areas.

-Being controlled by other people.

-He despises being lied to or betrayed.

-Being told what to do by those he considers to be 'lame'.

-Schooling in general. The only thing he wants to count is the money in his pocket.


Habits/addictions:


  • Redbull. He needs to drink at least one can every day or else he refuses to function.

  • He’ll drink alcohol if he can, but Damien or the grans normally catch him and give him a good one-two as a result. He’s determined otherwise.

  • When he’s thinking, he needs to do something with his hands, whether it’s playing with his hair, twirling a pencil through his fingers or even folding laundry.

  • Before he goes to bed he checks up on everyone at least once and then double checks to make sure everything is locked. If he’s paranoid about it, he’ll wake up at the same time every night to do the same thing. It’s become such a habit that he’ll do it without thinking and almost sleepwalk.
    • Following this, he also refuses to go to sleep first. Doesn’t matter how tired he is.

Soul Records:

Himura, Ryuu - yakuza oyabun (Hisuino Association)

Date of Birth - Monday, March 20th 1956

Date of Death - October 23rd, 2016

Cause of Death - bloodloss → cardiac arrest (multiple gunshot wounds); visible lesions on the face.

Semi-Antemortem Injuries: blunt force bruising on torso and skull → broken nose, left leg and shoulder, fractured eye socket and collarbone.

Occupation: Due to his current age, he isn’t yet allowed to apply for a government job but is allowed to take board jobs (deals and requests set up by citizens. These are normally smaller jobs, or jobs either deemed un-organizable or black market deals).

-Black Market Deals are requests applied under the knowing of the government. They’re often disguised as something very light in the city job records but are twisted by the owners as they’re shipped to different organisations of their true intentions.

Youth Affiliation: The Immortals
 
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Character Two
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Damien Gould

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Name: Damien Gould


Meaning Behind Name:

Damien ; there are three origin countries. All three have a meaning of ‘one who tames’ or ‘subdues’.

Gould ; an incredibly old Irish/English surname with the fairly literal term of ‘Gold’.


Age: appears to be around 14 or so.


Gender: Male


Sexuality: He’s shown interest to both males and females although is pretty sneaky about it (bi-sexual).


Nationality: African American


Relationships:

Kei – Kei is like a brother in his eyes, sometimes a best friend, while others, an absolute annoyance; a pest even. They live together as a foster family through the placement process (as Kei is underaged, no matter how old he was when he was killed). He was the one who originally found Kei and was heavily cautious of him at first, even so far as hostile, but that slowly changed as they warmed up to one another. He originally formed the idea of their youth affiliation but Kei eventually reincarnated the idea after a conversation with Klaus.

Klaus -

Christian ‘Blue’ - Damien’s hobby teacher and big brother figure to the three boys, he would often meet up with them if they required a ride, needed to talk, or if they needed help with work of any kind. He owns a small tattoo and repair shop in town that sells different parts for all forms of technology.

Grandpa Julius and Grandma Marie - Damien and Kei’s foster grandparents. They feed them, school them whenever they can and discipline them if they’re too rowdy. They have a very tranquil life and live in a small fish shop on the docks. Grandma Marie manages the ships and local imports, while Grandpa Julius works two jobs, doing the house chores and working for the BRC when there’s a spot available.


Appearance:

· Face: Damien has very pronounced African American features, with pure chocolate skin, full lips, a rounder, wider nose and an oval slightly square face. His eyes, however, stand out on his darker skin tone, being a bright crisp blue. The overall shape of his eyes is fairly large but droopy, giving him an almost nonchalant, ironically relaxed and uncaring expression on a daily basis. His eyelashes are thick, and his eyebrows are small yet poofy and incredibly dark. His hair is buzzed down to a thin layer, cut with precision. So much so one may assume he used a ruler or some sort of measuring tool.


· Body: Damien, the tallest of the bunch, is around 5’12” and 135 pounds, just barely above the underweight mark for his height. He’s very much a bean pole, with lanky arms and legs, and a slightly bloated gut. This is a normal appearance for him as much as he has tried to gain back weight. However, it isn’t as bad as it once was. Slowly he’s beginning to eat better and so, his weight is getting back to a normal level. Beyond this, surprisingly enough dark tattoos faded with age stain his skin. When asked what exactly they are, he’ll say how he has no idea how they got there and what they even mean, but they are all kept on his back, upper arms and neck.


· Clothing: Damien’s main outfit normally consists of anything black and blue. Blue is his favourite colour and will use it until day and night (this is mainly because of how many compliments he gets on his eyes). However, all of these clothes are hammy downs from Christian and his grandfather. What he likes the most out of all his outfits is the hand-made basketball jersey from his grandmother. The rest consist of matching shorts, a blue and black quilted bomber jacket from his grandfather, and (of course blue, white and black) sneakers given by Christian for his birthday when he first arrived. He’s often accessorised it with different little gold pieces he’s found near the docks, such as a few cheap gold rings and a necklace (the paint is chipped off and uneven due to the water friction). Something he never leaves home without, however, are his ear buds and excessive amounts of technology; everything from phones to PDAs all stuffed into his pockets and in secret little cashes inside of his jacket.


Weapons: Damien doesn’t normally use weapons, but instead stays behind the scenes using his brain. He’s a talented hacker, information broker, electronic spy and the like. He often says that collapsing a company’s main network can be as effective if more than throwing a few bombs at their front gates. He’s also a great planner and online communicator.


Personality:

Damien is and will always be classified as the mother of the group, no matter how hard he tries to be seen differently. His appearance almost tells a lie; he seems very chill, relaxed and level headed when in actuality, it’s the exact opposite. He’s a worry wart, someone who will worry about even the smallest of things such as what they’re going to have supper that night or if he forgot to make their beds. He’s a ball of anxiety and stress. Often times, Kei has wondered if he enjoys stressing out as much as he does.

Naturally, he’s a big observer, keeping to himself in social situations to simply sit back and watch while planning out a simple order in his head to absolute perfection or even a battle plan to get out of a sticky situation. He’s trained his eye to be quick with details, and from this, he’s incredibly intuitive and his memory is something comparable to a God. He remembers what’s important and ignores what’s not, while all the rest is controlled by his almost obsessive tendencies.

As his title stands, he can be quite the pushover and naggy with a talent for over dramatic negative reactions to anything. He wants to make sure everything is that of perfection; clean, crisp and easy, and anything less of this will face his wrath (which normally includes a sponge and yellow rubber gloves). He enjoys taking care of others to an extent and likes being in charge, but there are times where social interaction becomes such a ‘burden’ that he would rather not. Often times he prefers any form of confrontation, and when he tries to act like the brave one or the strong one, he’ll curl in on himself, apologise a good few hundred times, and tuck his metaphorical tail between his embarrassed body and run like the wind in the opposite direction. This prevents him from a leader position, and because he lacks charisma and will often run away from a situation or fight he fears, Kei has stepped forwards to fill his shoes. With his talents, he’s meant to stay in the shadows and do damage without the actual knowing of the enemies, however, he’s often in denial of where he’s the most effective which has caused some internal jealousy towards Kei.

Beyond this, he’s a very caring person who shows his affection in very strange ways. He may not buy someone gifts but the occasional hug and parental adoration is certainly inevitable. He strongly believes his friends are his children one way or another (which Kei can find patronising from time to time but he got used to it after a while) and will support them until his dying breath (whether it’s with a first aid kit or a quiet cheer from the sidelines).


Likes:

-Cleaning

-Cooking

-Computers

-Video Games

-Hacking

-Making sure everything is perfect

-Helping his friends.

-The colour blue

-Cleanliness



Dislikes:

-Choas

-Confrontation

-Social situations

-Fighting

-Dirtiness

-Being out of the house in general

-Sickness

-Rowdiness

-Loud annoying noises

-Alcohol


Habits/addictions:

Cleaning. He absolutely refuses to go a single day without cleaning something or getting up to move around the house. He may be a hacker and gamer but even he needs to be proactive one way or another. He may also clean someone else’s house by habit or the area around him if he does end up sitting down to ‘relax’.

When he’s outside, he needs to listen to some form of music. It distracts him from everything that’s going on around him and helps him zone out for a little while. This is especially prevalent with long rides and such. If you can actually manage to get him on a boat or car, then he’s going to need as many electronics as possible or else he’ll probably have a panic attack.


Soul Records:

Dante Johnson.

Date of Birth – July 25th, 1977

Date of Death – July 24th, 2004

Cause of Death - Seconal (Secobarbital) overdose à self-immolation


Occupation: Due to his current age, he isn’t yet allowed to apply for a government job but is allowed to take board jobs (deals and requests set up by citizens. These are normally smaller jobs, or jobs either deemed un-organizable or black market deals).

-Black Market Deals are requests applied under the knowing of the government. They’re often disguised as something very light in the city job records but are twisted by the owners as they’re shipped to different organisations.

He will, however, secretly work with his grandfather at his job as he’s one of the few who can go past the borders unaffected (as he was a small minority who actually arrived in that area). He’ll also help him out with the chores and assist his mother in any technology based situations (website managing etc).


Youth Affiliation: The Immortals (?)
 

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