Poetry A Few Poems I have written

MysticPainter92

A Broken Crayon still colors, so why give up?
My Mistakes
Nobody notices my pain,
Only my mistakes.
They never know my fear,
Only my screw ups.
My anger,
Comes from pain.
My smiles,
Hide my fears.
Behind closed doors, I hide
Nursing the darkness,
That I hold inside.
Behind closed doors, I wait.
Hoping one day,
Someone will notice and help.
Pull me in
And tell me it’s alright
That it's alright to cry
That it’s alright to feel
Every night I cry behind those closed doors.
But I know no one will listen.
No one will help
No one will care.
Until it works in their favor.
 
Please, continue sharing your thoughts. I'd like to hear more from you especially since I can relate so heavily to what you're doing. ^_^
 
How You Hurt Me
I gave you my heart,
But you broke it apart.
I trusted you with my secrets,
I believed your sweetness,
But now I see my mistake.
You are just a snake,
And I’m the most recent prey.
I hope soon you have to pay,
For all the heartache and pain.
For I know I will fall again,
That stupid smile,
That is so vile.
Those eyes that capture me,
Please release me I plea!
It seems my heart has broken,
With words told and unspoken.
So please hear my prayer,
And stop this violence, if you care!


*I actually write poems on another website this is one of the first ones I wrote*
 
I realized the last two poems where sad and kinda dark... so here is a happy one!

Sunset
How grand the sunset!
Filling the sky with a variety of color.
Under the sky, I sense no threat.
It hides the oncoming darkness as a cover,
Shining a little hope throughout the world.
I sing and dance in the light,
Basking in desire as I twirled.
But soon came the night!
Overtaking me in darkness,
I felt as though I could hardly breathe!
 
Just a thought, but maybe try loosening it up a bit? I think it feels kind of forced. You kind of hang off of each topic while you move onto the next, and while that gives this nice kind of natural ebb and flow, it’s a little bit redundant at times. Make each word count a little bit more.

They’re quite nice poems though, keep going.
 
Just a thought, but maybe try loosening it up a bit? I think it feels kind of forced. You kind of hang off of each topic while you move onto the next, and while that gives this nice kind of natural ebb and flow, it’s a little bit redundant at times. Make each word count a little bit more.

They’re quite nice poems though, keep going.
Thank you!
 

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