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Well, yeah. It should be common sense not to ignore good advice being handed to you.

Thanks you all for your thoughts and criticisms on this. I know it’s poorly thought and written out, but I’m trying to get better. I probably won’t reply to this again, since this was just something I wanted an opinion on from the community, and I didn’t think people would respond, but I truly...

That makes sense, since she would definetly have to feel her immediate core beliefs change in correspondence with plot points. Possible commandment/belief, she believes humans at their core are evil and her parents are the only ones who aren’t actively trying to kill her. How’s that?

Yeah, like I said, you’re giving really good feedback, and actually making the story even better than before. Now that I’m re-reading it, the abuse is really unnecessary, so I removed that.

Totally, like this is of course a changeable story, and I really like that element added. Within her isolation, the main protagonist wouldn’t trust a stranger, so maybe it’d be that he continually has to show her he’s isn’t the monster she thinks he is. I also find this the most plausible of...

There’s a Mother, and a Father, who both want their daughter to grow up to be the perfect child. They fill her head with lies from the day she could comprehend it. She’s told other humans are evil, and only want to corrupt her to turn her into a monster like them. The girl, for her whole life...