Cadryn

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  1. This is kind of a personal preference and pet peeve of mine but 10,000 years is a long time. Like a REALLY long time. Just for reference 10,000 years ago humans were still about 4,000 years away from developing any sort of civilization. Imagine living through the rise and fall of every civilization in history. Imagine how many people you would have known only to see die. If you're under the age of 27 you've been alive less days than she has years. I don't see a lot in her character to make her feel this utterly old. Her personality sounds more like that of a teenage girl than a creature older than civilization itself. So just some food for thought there. It just seems to be that you would make her a lot more interesting if you incorporated her age into her personality.
  2. I honestly think doing a few editing passes would do some good. It seemed like there were quite a few grammatical errors. I know that could turn a lot of people off, particularly since the interest check is where you're supposed to put on your best face and if you can't include proper grammar there what's the actual rp going to be like? I think the biggest turn off for me was that I wasn't really sure what characters you wanted us to play. Are the characters going to be playing middle schoolers? I assumed so but you don't really say up front. I don't think you ever define kaiego. Fynari are the hive-mind villain they will be fighting right? You should make all this more clear from the get go.
  3. I don't do a whole lot of 1X1 stuff but usually I find they aren't limited to just two characters. Usually just two main characters but I know most people like to throw in a cast of less important characters as well.
  4. There are some of us who do enjoy purple prose sometimes. Most Lovecraft fans have to have a stomach for it.
  5. fantasy

    I could be up for something like this. I kind of want to play a noblewoman or a female dragon sometime. I will say ahead of time though I like badass females but I tend not to like Tsunderes too much so I would probably try and avoid a lot of those tropes.
  6. "that should be plenty of time for me. I know several shortcuts. And what do you mean train against? I told you I'm a healer not a fighter." Despite her protests she stood at attention ready for the headmaster to tell her where to go. @RacingBloodWolf
  7. First I should say you shouldn't worry about taking heavy inspiration from other sources. It's rarely as obvious as you think it is, and even if it is it's perfectly fine as long as as it's not a direct rip off. Magic eyes are perfectly fine as long as you don't give them the exact power sets of the Sharingan or the Byakugan. You can even take aspects from those to incorporate in as long as you just add something that makes them different too. Now a couple of things to think about when you're designing your magic system. All just my opinions and preferences but I think these things can help make magic feel more interesting and unique:
  8. "Yes, Lord Adair would have a fit if he found me missing." she smirks a bit at the thought. "I guess I'll go to a class but if it's not interesting I'm going to leave." @RacingBloodWolf
  9. Rowan scowled at the thought of having to enroll. "I don't know. Are you going to make me sign a contract? Why can I just come and go as I please? If not why is that any different than working for the Adair's?" @RacingBloodWolf
  10. "so we're keeping power out of the hands of people who might abuse it? I can support that. Just don't expect me to do any killing for you. Who is this Nashini anyway?" Rowan had about a thousand questions and she was practically hopping up and down with excitement. @RacingBloodWolf
  11. Rowan didn't want to start off arguing but her mouth moved faster than her common sense and she blurted "well I don't think one's blood is any indicator of ones superiority. All the power in the world is useless, no harmful, without a superior mind to go with it." She then quickly added "but I think your cause can accomplish some good, I do wish to join." @RacingBloodWolf
  12. Rowan clutched her book so tight that the blood left her hands. It took a lot of willpower not to flinch but she didn't want to show weakness particularly to someone who felt this predatory. "But, Mr. Dalhof, I still don't know why."
  13. I apologize I probably won't post much more tonight. We had a fire on one of our friers at my work and I have to clean up.
  14. Rowan stepped fully into the room and swept her scrutinizing gaze over the headmaster and the office. She cossed her arms "may I ask to whom I am speaking first? And what your goals are specifically?" @RacingBloodWolf
  15. "My name is Rowan, and I'm a servant in the Adair household. I have and can get information on the house for you, and I'm probably the best physician and healer you'll find."
  16. Rowan opened the door a crack and poked her head in to get a look. "Hello. I was told I should come here if I'm looking for the rebels. I think I could be of some use to you." ( @RacingBloodWolf it's all good!)
  17. Rodya raises his hand respectfully and waits for Celeste to acknowledge him before asking "How long will it be?"
  18. Rodya perked up and stared at Celeste attentively. So many people in the room, and so many scents, it was hard for him to place a person with a scent like this unless he focused really hard. He could tell the girl at the front of the room was another were-cat, Zeral family he thought. His father made sure he was well aware of the other were-cat families, but it would probably be best to play dumb for now.
  19. Name: Headmistress Mara Nashini Nagendra. Nashini is her prefered name. Headmistress Nashini to any students. Species: Dragon Age: well over 600. History: Nashini came to the royal academy some 500 years ago, with the mission to research the creature known as the Destroyer. It was there she met Maron. She was surprised to encounter another dragon as she claimed all she knew of besides herself were extinct. The two grew very close, and Maron was perhaps the only person Nashini has ever confided in. Together they sealed away the Destroyer, using both their power and knowledge. But ever since Maron left Nashini has become more reserved, and cold. She enjoys playing "games" with her students, and she will often toy with them to see how they react, but she never gets close to anyone. Royal or Rebel: Royal Relatives: A nomadic tribe from a far away land. Deceased by her own hand or so she claims. Appearance:
  20. "I thought we were supposed to learn combat and things like that? Or how to use our own abilities more effectively." He actually looks slightly relieved and perhaps a bit excited at the prospect of math though.
  21. Rodya nodded and gave an awkward smile. He sits in silence for several moments before he speaks up "So um... miss Stillway what class is this exactly?" @RacingBloodWolf
  22. "Well I apologize if I did something wrong." he says. He gives a nod to Elijah as he enters the room and slides into the desk closest to the door. His eyes flick all over the room like this is the first time he's been in a place like this.
  23. I could probably handle something like that.
  24. I'm up for plotting but I'm a bit worried how well I would be able to handle another character once my classes get going.
  25. So for the office Rowan is going to can I make up what's there? Or does someone else want to do the person in charge?