Alice The Maid
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Hey, this is kind of out of the box, but, the way i write my Essays and stories are almost identical, and, I need some criticism. Here’s a sample text of how i write, and I need help.
Throughout human history, there have been hundreds, if not thousands or millions of conflicts, some even before Civilization. One of the bloodiest and longest lasting impacting conflicts happened in the mid 20th century, World War II. 21 years after the First World War had ended, everyone had believed, after the massive death toll, and how many took part in WWI, it was nicknamed, “The War to End All Wars”. But that is where those who spoke the nickname were wrong. Over the span of the early 1930’s, in Germany, a radical right Wing extremist is coming to power. His name, Adolf Hitler. Soon following his “Election”, He decides to Invade Austria-Hungary to begin to unify Germany. Shortly after, Germany invades the western border of Czechoslovakia, and Signs The Nazi-Russo nonaggression pact with Stalin, dividing Czechoslovakia in half. Slowly, as Germany Began to grow in territorial size, they made a mistake, and invaded Poland, whose allies, the British and the French, saw as an act of aggression, and, Declared war on Germany in 1939.
The Germans had been using a tactic while invading Poland, and other surrounding territories called ‘Blitzkrieg’ Or, lightning war, in which the German army would quickly invade the territory, using tanks to smash through the front lines, with infantry to follow suit.
The Treaty of Versailles had a large role to play in the earlier stages of the war, with Adolf Hitler seeing the Treaty as unfair, taking so much land from a once large and prideful Germany. Adolf Hitler used the Nationalism, and feelings of the German people to create what would later be known as the Nazi Party.
The French and British originally had held a conference in Munich, Germany, which ended in appeasement, to avoid a Second World War, But Germany stepped on the toes of the agreement, starting World War Two, while, in the pacific, Japan had begun invading mainland China, for their natural resources.
While Japan Industrialized, War had been raging on the Eastern front, between Germany, and France, after Germany had used Belgium, which was neutral at the time, to invade France, trying to take back some of the land that it had lost during WWI. Eventually, the United States was pulled into the war by Japan, after December 7th, 1941, and to quote President Franklin Roosevelt, “A day which will live in Infamy. The United States was Deliberately and meaningfully attacked by the Empire of Japan...” With war being declared in the pacific on December 8th, 1941. The war in the pacific ended on June 6th, 1945, when America dropped two Nuclear bombs on the Cities of Nagasaki, and Hiroshima. This event killed millions of innocent civillians. And a death toll only rivaled by the Jewish Extermination in Germany. It wasn’t just soldiers that were casualties of war, millions of people were displaced, losing their homes, losing their lives, some forced to move millions of miles away, others gunned down in the streets due to ethnicity, factories, railroads, medical bays, all bombed and destroyed, not just by the Nazi and Axis powers, but by the allies as well. In war, there is no winner, no loser, No good, no Evil. It is all death and fighting By the young, the weak, and the ignorant, who are tricked by old and bitter men to lay down their lives for someone else’s own interest. What they say about war is true.
“History is Written by the Victor”
Throughout human history, there have been hundreds, if not thousands or millions of conflicts, some even before Civilization. One of the bloodiest and longest lasting impacting conflicts happened in the mid 20th century, World War II. 21 years after the First World War had ended, everyone had believed, after the massive death toll, and how many took part in WWI, it was nicknamed, “The War to End All Wars”. But that is where those who spoke the nickname were wrong. Over the span of the early 1930’s, in Germany, a radical right Wing extremist is coming to power. His name, Adolf Hitler. Soon following his “Election”, He decides to Invade Austria-Hungary to begin to unify Germany. Shortly after, Germany invades the western border of Czechoslovakia, and Signs The Nazi-Russo nonaggression pact with Stalin, dividing Czechoslovakia in half. Slowly, as Germany Began to grow in territorial size, they made a mistake, and invaded Poland, whose allies, the British and the French, saw as an act of aggression, and, Declared war on Germany in 1939.
The Germans had been using a tactic while invading Poland, and other surrounding territories called ‘Blitzkrieg’ Or, lightning war, in which the German army would quickly invade the territory, using tanks to smash through the front lines, with infantry to follow suit.
The Treaty of Versailles had a large role to play in the earlier stages of the war, with Adolf Hitler seeing the Treaty as unfair, taking so much land from a once large and prideful Germany. Adolf Hitler used the Nationalism, and feelings of the German people to create what would later be known as the Nazi Party.
The French and British originally had held a conference in Munich, Germany, which ended in appeasement, to avoid a Second World War, But Germany stepped on the toes of the agreement, starting World War Two, while, in the pacific, Japan had begun invading mainland China, for their natural resources.
While Japan Industrialized, War had been raging on the Eastern front, between Germany, and France, after Germany had used Belgium, which was neutral at the time, to invade France, trying to take back some of the land that it had lost during WWI. Eventually, the United States was pulled into the war by Japan, after December 7th, 1941, and to quote President Franklin Roosevelt, “A day which will live in Infamy. The United States was Deliberately and meaningfully attacked by the Empire of Japan...” With war being declared in the pacific on December 8th, 1941. The war in the pacific ended on June 6th, 1945, when America dropped two Nuclear bombs on the Cities of Nagasaki, and Hiroshima. This event killed millions of innocent civillians. And a death toll only rivaled by the Jewish Extermination in Germany. It wasn’t just soldiers that were casualties of war, millions of people were displaced, losing their homes, losing their lives, some forced to move millions of miles away, others gunned down in the streets due to ethnicity, factories, railroads, medical bays, all bombed and destroyed, not just by the Nazi and Axis powers, but by the allies as well. In war, there is no winner, no loser, No good, no Evil. It is all death and fighting By the young, the weak, and the ignorant, who are tricked by old and bitter men to lay down their lives for someone else’s own interest. What they say about war is true.
“History is Written by the Victor”
