Recent content by Avouleance

Can I interest you in trading feedback for feedback? Since your piece is substantial I'd like to commit some time to make more detailed notes via Google Docs but I wouldn't go ahead with it without checking that's what you were looking for.

Sorry but I'm not sure I can commit the time to make notes on this and I've no real connection to either universe. Good luck getting feedback though.

Is it possible to link to a google doc or some other sharing service? Because that's a wall of text at the moment and a comment link could really help make it more easy to read.

Could be fun, count me interested

Presuming most character's wouldn't know the difference between a gazelle and a small horse?

Shall give other people a chance to respond/ join in. But for now, assume that Iryz doesn't notice what he's saying, but if manage to get her attention she'll likely get Flame Face out again.

Posted, is that all good?

Iryz didn’t know how long it took before the lizard nudged her back into realisation. “Mumphs puff humpf.” It’s mouth stuffed with coins. Iryz offered an open pouch for the lizard to spit them out into with a jangling. “Much obliged, now I’ve managed to find you some room in the stables for the...

Nice intro, are you happy with someone else saying they see you walk into the bar or do you want to save that for your next post?

Thank you. I should sleep but we should probably message around to people who haven't responded in a while to inform them about our mutiny.

Do tell me what you think

It had been a pretty productive day so far. Iryz wasn’t exactly fond of how densely forested the surroundings were, preferring to be out in the open. But if that was where one went to be ambushed so be it. Unfortunately, the bandits had barely had anything good on them. The weapons she’d looted...

Working on something

After you

Worth making a conversation as a character hang out until then?