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What is so great about david's father that this sorceresses would fall for a peasant farmer? What about the sorceress made her attracted to the farmer as well? It would be nice to know if maybe the sorceress was fed up with nobles and if maybe david's father had qualities that acted as a foil to the nobles. Because any old peasant can be humble and lacking pride because that's where a simple farmer would stand vs royalty. So what stood out about his father that made a royal sorceress go for him?David was born into a farming family. His father was born and raised on a farm. His mother on the other hand, was a sorceress. She helped many people on her travels. She has also become a loyal subject to the king. When she had found David's father, she couldn't leave him. In all of her journey's, she had never met anyone like him.
The farming thing is a throw away line. It serves no purpose and should have been left out.Everyday he would wake up and feed the animals. When he became of age, 14, he was sent off to train as a knight.
How exactly was he disadvantaged because of his status? Being picked on doesn't make someone disadvantaged.When he arrived, he was picked on. Everyone else was of a higher class, nobles, tailors, knights, while he was a farmer. Because of this disadvantage, he usually spent most of his time training.
When he went to visit his mother, David found out she was dying. With her last breathe she enchanted his sword with the magic of her family. Now
whenever David is up against a foe, his sword will glow a brilliant blue. His swings send light energy at the opponents. He fights with honor, or doesn't fight at all.
Before he left, his mother gave him a sword with a blue gem in it's hilt. She said," As long as you protect the kingdom, the sword shall protect you."
I rather like this personality. He instantly becomes a merciless sociopath at drop of a dime if you're marked as an enemy. That's probably the one fundemental flaw I've seen in this entire post. The fact that he's a zealous sanctimonious do gooder.David is a man of honor. If something isn't honorable, he won't accept it. He is usually a kind person, unless you are his enemy, then all bets are off. David is an intelligent man, knowing many strategies and battle tactics. If the moment calls
for it, David will even crack a joke.
Nothing about his story gives us any indication that he should be able to do these things. In fact if you wrote a good history, you wouldn't even need to list his power. Because we'd know what he was capable of based on reading that. Same with personality,but that doesn't matter as much because you can say whatever you want in that section and as long as its vaguely human, anyone can nod their heads at whatever you choose. But powers have to be derived from a place of logic or they just seem to be tacked on without a second thought.Sonic Manipulation: Able to control, stop, and emit soundwaves
Regeneration; with this, he is able to heal a broken bones in mere hours. Most wounds heal in minutes.
Why?Underwater: Being underwater renders David's abilities useless.
How ca he set a village ablaze? Is it a fire ball or more like a sheet of flame? and can he create said flames from nothing or take them from an existing fire?Sorcery: David is able to do many things with this. With some he can set a village ablaze, with others he can heal any
In terms of his rage, does he attack both friend and foe? or is it a more calculated rage, wherein he would avoid attacking any allies but would fight with reckless abandon, leaving him more in danger of being wounded? eg not caring about his own safety and charging headlong into the foe. This could do with being more fleshed out.If David becomes enraged, he will become reckless and begin to attack more viiolently. When he goes into this rage, he becomes open to attacks.
Why? is this a universe where magic is naturally taxing? or is this more specific to him?If David uses his sorcery too much, he risks the possibility of death. Even if he uses it for a simple thing he will faint.